aww. this was cute. I loved it. =D.
awww that was so sweet. i love james!! this was a cute story. loved it!!
Aww taht was soo sweet!! Is this gonna be a one shot or a story casue you most definatly can make this into a really good sotry with like 10 chapteres!! Good work!! I LOVE IT!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This will most probably just be a oneshot...
this is really beautiful - and very well written, congrats =)
Author's Response: Thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Oooh! This is so lovely! I enjoyed every bit of it:)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it!
This is like a portrait of a moment--I can see, hear, and smell every little thing. It was really fun to read. I'm a little confused on the timing, though--is it end of 6th year?
"Even if he married someone else; he doubted he could ever again love someone else like he loved her." This struck me as a little odd--if he loves her, why would he consider the possibility of marrying someone else? I think it would be more realistic if you said, "even if he didn't marry her". But again, a beautiful word-painting of Lily and James!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I guess it could be the end of 6th year. It's just when they are friends but not yet together... And now that I read that line again, I guess it is kind of odd. I'll try to change it. Thanks.
This was good. There were a few too many repetitions of some words and I think it may have helped to put in the reason for the gusts of winf i.e. had someone opened the portait or was the window open. All in all however, a well written and thoughtout story, very sweet.
Author's Response: Hmm... I think you are right. Thanks for the feedback.
Sounds a little stalker-ish but more like really sweet. I like it. =)
Author's Response: Haha... Thanks!
aww, this was so cute! I think you captured James well
dat was sooooooo beautiful!!! truly cute
wash he had sed somethin though
Well done! I definitely enjoyed seeing things from James' perspective. The attention to detail in this story is remarkable =) ! Hope to see more from you in the future!
Author's Response: Thanks! And I hope I'll be free to put up more stories too.
Aww. This was so irresistiby sweet. If only all guys were like James.
Amazing work =D
Author's Response: Haha... Thanks!
Author's Response: Haha... Thanks!
