Reviewer: prongs_babe_317426
Date: 11/11/07 12:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

aww. this was cute. I loved it. =D.

Reviewer: lily_death_flower
Date: 11/10/07 9:34
Chapter: Chapter 1

awww that was so sweet. i love james!! this was a cute story. loved it!!

Reviewer: REMi iS AWESOME
Date: 11/06/07 8:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww taht was soo sweet!! Is this gonna be a one shot or a story casue you most definatly can make this into a really good sotry with like 10 chapteres!! Good work!! I LOVE IT!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! This will most probably just be a oneshot...

Reviewer: duskshadow
Date: 11/06/07 0:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

this is really beautiful - and very well written, congrats =)

Author's Response: Thanks!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Puss_in_Boots
Date: 11/05/07 23:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oooh! This is so lovely! I enjoyed every bit of it:)

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Nymphea
Date: 11/05/07 20:04
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is like a portrait of a moment--I can see, hear, and smell every little thing. It was really fun to read. I'm a little confused on the timing, though--is it end of 6th year?
"Even if he married someone else; he doubted he could ever again love someone else like he loved her." This struck me as a little odd--if he loves her, why would he consider the possibility of marrying someone else? I think it would be more realistic if you said, "even if he didn't marry her". But again, a beautiful word-painting of Lily and James!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I guess it could be the end of 6th year. It's just when they are friends but not yet together... And now that I read that line again, I guess it is kind of odd. I'll try to change it. Thanks.

Reviewer: midnight ink
Date: 11/05/07 10:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was good. There were a few too many repetitions of some words and I think it may have helped to put in the reason for the gusts of winf i.e. had someone opened the portait or was the window open. All in all however, a well written and thoughtout story, very sweet.

Author's Response: Hmm... I think you are right. Thanks for the feedback.

Reviewer: ILuvSirius01
Date: 11/04/07 23:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

Sounds a little stalker-ish but more like really sweet. I like it. =)

Author's Response: Haha... Thanks!

Reviewer: Hogwarts Alumni
Date: 11/04/07 23:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

aww, this was so cute! I think you captured James well

Reviewer: daffy
Date: 11/04/07 22:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

dat was sooooooo beautiful!!! truly cute
wash he had sed somethin though

Reviewer: ebonydawnpotter
Date: 11/04/07 18:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

Well done! I definitely enjoyed seeing things from James' perspective. The attention to detail in this story is remarkable =) ! Hope to see more from you in the future!

Author's Response: Thanks! And I hope I'll be free to put up more stories too.

Reviewer: RonandMioneForever
Date: 11/04/07 18:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww. This was so irresistiby sweet. If only all guys were like James.
Amazing work =D

Author's Response: Haha... Thanks!

Author's Response: Haha... Thanks!

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