hehe poor Alice. this is really great! keep writing! i think you have the characters just right!
awesome, but I have one suggestion. UPDATE!!!!
Check your tenses in the first paragraph and the paragraph about spring break; they should be past to match the rest of the story.
I do think it's possible for Lily to notice that James is extremely good-looking and still think he's annoying...she would, I think, be confident enough in her own ability not to like people just based on their looks to acknowledge that James is handsome.
“It’ll be sooner than that,” and with that he ran off with Black.
Ooh, suspense! I like it! Update quickly!
Author's Response: I've already submitted the second chapter, and I'm just waiting for it to be validated. The next chapter has some humor in it, just a little though.
Oh, this is awesome! As a personal thing, it would've been really cool if James turned Snape's hair pink or something like that while hanging him upside down...but that's just an opinion of mine. Great story, I look forward to an update!
Author's Response: I hadn't thought of changing Snape's hair pink, that would be funny. I might do it sometime.
good start! i think you cud hav added a bit more to the end but otherwise it was really great! you introduced the characters nicely. i cant wait to read more! update soon!
Author's Response: I didn't want to add more to the end because I would have to go to much into the second chapter.
i can't wait to see what happens! i'm excited : )
Author's Response: thanks! this is only the first fic I've done and glad you like it.