Reviews For Turquoise Jealousy
Reviewer: tickled_pink
Date: 11/08/07 4:01
Chapter: Color

Ooh, I really liked this! You really feel for Harry - it must have been so hard for him to have both Ginny and Dean in such close proximinty to him. I love the way you hint at the fact that they both like each other, but never actually come out and say it - this scene could fit perfectly into HPB!

The only criticism I have is that you used the word 'apparently' in quick succession in the first two paragraphs; it just makes it a little jarring. Maybe 'evidently' would work better?

Other than that, a great story! :D

Tickled Pink

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! And thank you so much for your constructive criticism - those are very helpful. Thanks for the great review!

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