I really, really liked this one; I loved how you wrote it using the italics and I could really feel like I was Rose in that situation.
Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad. That's what I wanted you to feel. I think that anyone who has been spurned for another can relate to what she (Rose) is feeling.
Thank you for the review. =)
Wow, that was suprisingly good. This is the first slash fic I've read and you did a great job(I think, i dont have anything to compare it to...), it almost made me cry. Your a really talented writer.
Author's Response: Oh, wonderful! (Not that it made you cry, but that it made an impression at all.) I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Slash is one of my favourite categories and I was surprised when I discovered that. o.O *giggles*
You should check out "Tarnished" by TheVault; it's a wonderful example of femmeslash and there are several other slashy fics out there that are superb. My favourites have some within their shadowy depths. *grins*
And thank you for the review/compliments. You made my day.
I enjoyed that.
Author's Response: I'm glad. =)
Awww....i feel so sorry for Rose...but it was a good story nonetheless =^_^=
Author's Response: Thank you, Michi. I'm glad you enjoyed it. As one of the major/main points of the story was to make the reader feel sorry for Rose, I'm glad it did. =P
Once again, thanks for the review.
This was wonderfully written, Julia! I loved it, it was so different. I feel so sad for Rose. Excellent! 10/10!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you, Viri. =) I'm so glad you liked it; yes, it was different than my usual writing. More like a snapshot than a story.
I'm glad the story made you feel sad for Rose, though. That was the point. *giggles*
That was really. really good. I also loved your writing syle. It was awesome. You should definately write more fics in this style. I would difinately read( and review )them.=Sammy
Author's Response: *grins happily* Thank you so much, Sammy. I'm thrilled that you liked it. It turned out very well, in my opinion, even though I was shaky about it at first.
Once again, thank you for the vote of confidence and for the compliments. *hugs*
loved it update soon!
Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad. Thank you! Unfortunately, this is only going to be a one-shot, but I 'ship ASS, so hopefully I'll be writing more of it in the future. =)
I never leave reviews, but in this case, I needed to. I thought this story was amazing. Truly amazing. I loved *this* much. And you were right, having it in 3rd person would've ruined it.
Bekkie xx (yes that's right- you even get kisses!)
Author's Response: *gasps* Thank you so much. I cannot even begin to tell you how happy you've made me. And I'm thrilled that you agree about the perspective; I was a little miffed when this was turned down in the contest submissions category, but I'm glad I didn't change it.
Oh and one more thing
That is a beautiful name!!!!!
Author's Response: *grins* Thank you; I'm sure my mum would be grateful for the compliment. I like my name; it's not common. =)
I would review this ANYDAY
and i review only the special ones!
I read it OVER and OVER again
and i never get bored
not THAT shows the lines of a GREAT story
THANK YOU to me for writng a review
THANK YOU to YOU for writing the freaking story in the first place!
WELL DONE XD
please write some more thingssss
your talent needs to be used
Author's Response: *giggles* Oh, but it is 'Thank You' for the review because you took time to do this for me. =)
I'm also unbelievably thrilled that you've enjoyed this story so much; I find that my favourite stories are those which I can discover new things each time I read them, too. I love that about my favourites. (Which, really, you should check out; some fantastic work there. *grins*)
And I will certainly try to write some more stories like this, although I will most likely be updating "Black as Snow" the soonest.
This is a great story. I rarely venture into the category (though I do browse it from time to time) and only rarely do I find stories as well written as this fic. Great job.
I think the second person POV worked very well here. Because you made it more personal for the reader, as if they themselves were Rose, and her falling in love with her cousin needed less explanation than it normally would have, simply because the reader knows they can’t help whom they fall in love with. If it had been told in third person POV, I would have definitely wanted more information on the whys and howcomes of their relationship (platonic and as unrequited as it is). If any of that makes sense. Basically, because of the second person POV, I didn’t need any serious explanation, simply because I was Rose and I knew exactly how she felt (because she was me).
Whew. I is confusing today.
But anyway. The way this story was written is simple, personal, and powerful – amazing job. This experiment was successful, I’d say.
But, phew, those him-s and him-s were sort of confusing at first. They made sense soon enough, however. I do think having a separate way to define who was who would have been better, though I know you didn’t want to use names until the end, and I have no idea how else you could have done this.
Author's Response: *stares* Kate ... thank you! What a wonderful review. And not confusing at all; convoluted, yes, in a delightful way! I understand, though, how you feel. I was trying to take the reader and put her/him into Rose's shoes. The fact that you tell me that I've succeeded only makes me happier.
I'm so glad, too, that you ventured into Slash. There are some real gems here. ("Tarnished" by, I believe, The_Vault is a wonderful example; 'tis in my favourites if you would like to check it out.)
Also, I feel that defining Albus Severus and Scorpius in a different manner than italicized!Albus and normal-font!Scorpius would have been better, but what can I say? The vagueness, I think, worked in this case.
But thank you, once again, for this well-thought out and thoroughly marvelous review. You've made my day. =)
It's fairly well written, but unless I'm misreading (which I don't think I am, but very well could be) it sounds like Rose loves Albus.
Which is somewhat awkward, considering they're cousins.
Oh well. Still fairly well written, if potentially a tad confusing (you're right, you DO need to read it carefully).
Author's Response: Thank you for your well-thought out, critical review, Steven. =) I really appreciate that you took the time to do this. *smiles*
And you're not misreading, actually. Rose does indeed love her cousin: "... and you started eying him even though he was your best friend and your cousin."
So, yes, I suppose it could be termed "incest," but for the fact that this is unrequited love. Like Rose says, you can't help whom you love. It just happens. And if you happen to love your cousin--1st, 2nd, it doesn't even matter--then so be it. You are simply physically and emotionally attracted to that other person.
And this was meant to be vague, so I'm glad you found that to be true. Again, thanks so much.
this is reallllly good
it has been favourited XD
Author's Response: Hurrah! *hugs* Thank you so much for the review. I am thrilled that you liked this enough to favourite it, Cecilia. =)
Reviews definitely make my day, and I'm thrilled that I saw this ... (as I didn't get an email about it. *is confused* Usually they send me an email and... never mind. *grins*)
Thank you once again!
Very lovely. I loved the perspective.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Kristina. I really appreciate that you took the time to leave a review. *hugs* Reviews definitely make my day. =)
And I'm thrilled that you loved the method of perspective. I think that this is something all people feel at one time or another, so telling it in a rather "preachy" style contributed, rather than detracted from the story.