That was very well written. I especially liked the ending:
Or did you simply, coldly, willingly
Not care at all?
That was very powerful, especially because you split the question into two lines. This is a technique that you use throughout the poem, and for me it is what gives it such strength. The little pauses and like someone who is hurt, more than hurt, gasping for breath, trying to get out what they wanted to say. It really was very good indeed. :D
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much. You can't imagine how happy this comment made me.:)
Nice. I want to inagine that someday, Sirius or James will ask him these questions. Also I don't think he deserves the kiss, no that will be taking away all the pain. He deserves to live with his guilt.=Sammy
Author's Response: I agree that he doesn't deserve the Kiss.In a way,I don't think there's someone who deserves something that...I don't know...Thanks for reading and reviewing!:)
*sniff* great poem!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much:)