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Reviews For Diamonds of Glass

Name: DontSayImpossible (Signed) · Date: 07/21/11 7:45 · For: Diamonds of Glass
Just beautiful.

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 06/12/08 20:47 · For: Diamonds of Glass
I have the Dubliners on CD, it's brilliant isn't it? Ij loved this, it's funny what we treasure when we're children, anything shiney or colourful or that took hard work, it doesn't matter that nobody else would want it. One man's trash is another man's treasure after all. Snape seemed to go through life breaking the rules, all of them, but I guess in a way it was all for Lily Evan's. When he was a child he broke the rules, as you've shown here, when he joined Voldemort he broke the rules to impress her with the inevitable power, and when he was reallied with Dumbledore he broke the rules to make up for his mistakes and save Lily's son. Sorry, I've got carried away again, I just love this on so many levels, the face value, something that even a non-potterverse fan would get out of it, and the deep symbolism too.

Name: Pondering (Signed) · Date: 01/21/08 8:38 · For: Diamonds of Glass
I like how you've played with the contrast in things here. First of all, you don't go into the stereotype of 'it was a dark and stormy night', instead you start with the sun shining brightly which really makes the upcoming angst more vibrant.

Then you go onto to describing the rich people and then compare them to the poorer houses.

I really like your descriptive prose, by the way. I usually don't like overly descriptive pieces but you do it very well and every line has meaning and isn't there for the purpose of making the story longer, although I think that sometimes you could have varied your paragraph a little bit, as sometimes you can make things more powerful by isolating them.

Take this line for example:

He runs away, glancing over his shoulder, pockets full of his diamonds, mind full of fantastic daydreams.

I think this is one of the most beautiful and emotion evoking lines in the story. You can just feel Severus's desperate hope coming out of that one sentence--and also, it was easy to spot and didn't accidently blend into other sentences. Just thought I'd point that out.

The diamond idea was very well implented throughout, I think that you have some brilliant metaphor going on, and I really liked your characterisation of Eilleen and Tobias, they felt realistic, the dynamics seemed appropiate of the relationship they have with each other.

I also like how Snape doesn't give up, as he's really not that sort of person. And even though it's a D/A fic, it ends off with that hope, continuing the contrast.

All in all, I really enjoyed this fic, and thankyou for writing it.


Name: Mem_Marie (Signed) · Date: 12/27/07 1:32 · For: Diamonds of Glass
I absolutely love your writing style. Symbolism is a powerful, powerful thing, and you use it wonderfully :)

Case in point:

He runs away, glancing over his shoulder, pockets full of his diamonds, mind full of fantastic daydreams.

Love that sentence. Itís short, not-quite-sweet, and full of meaning.

Also, I loved how you described Severus as the boy with the cryptic eyes. That just sounded gorgeous.

All in all, I adored it. Severus/Lily pieces have such potential for fanfiction. Glad you took advantage of that :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reading and reviewing my story. Of course, I don't think it's as good as yours, but I'm sort of proud of this one. :)

Name: lilyevans91 (Signed) · Date: 12/08/07 8:38 · For: Diamonds of Glass
wow, this was wonderful! the blunt storytelling was really effective at setting a tone and a mood, and poor severus' life and hopefulness and then heartbreak were so sad! it made me want to cry, really. this was really well written, very emotional, great job!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it, really!

Name: A H (Signed) · Date: 12/06/07 2:51 · For: Diamonds of Glass
"hope is as fragile as pieces of glass." Reading that, it felt like the whole story was based around the one quote. This is amazingly written, and gives a very realistic insight to what Severus' childhood might have been like.

Author's Response: That was one of the main qutoes I worked on. Nicely spotted! And I'm really glad you liked this.

Name: Trucker (Signed) · Date: 12/05/07 22:44 · For: Diamonds of Glass
Don't ever stop writing! You're getting better each time at capturing and revealing the secrets of the human heart.

Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I love the way you put that.

Name: OdileW (Signed) · Date: 12/05/07 21:39 · For: Diamonds of Glass
What was that crashing noise? Oh, just my heart breaking from your AMAZING story. After reading this, I almost wish Lily hadn't ended up with James because of how sad Severus' life is. Almost. ;)

Author's Response: I ALMOST feel that way too. Thanks very much, I'm flattered!

Name: betsy (Signed) · Date: 12/05/07 20:00 · For: Diamonds of Glass
Oh, that was heartwrenching! Well written and absolutely stunning, thank you. :)betsy

Author's Response: You're welcome! :-)

Name: Prongsies_Girl_93 (Signed) · Date: 12/05/07 18:07 · For: Diamonds of Glass
OMGsh this is so sad! Poor Sev... That's a really cool perspective... Seeing glass as diamonds... Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks! There's actually a ton of glass on my street, and I pick them up sometimes and scatter them along the road...that's where the idea comes from.

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