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Reviews For As Shadows Fall

Name: marauderlove3 (Signed) · Date: 10/11/09 9:04 · For: Prologue
Why can't you finish this story??? I really like it!!!

Name: Leahr (Signed) · Date: 01/30/08 23:11 · For: Prologue
This is an absolutely amazing prologue. Please, resolve the cliffhanger! Who is his wife? How'd he kill her? Who is the hat-dropping girl? This was a really well written and amazing opener. Can you update soon?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm doing me best to finish the next chapter! Sorry for the wait. :)

Name: kritchen (Signed) · Date: 01/05/08 19:42 · For: Prologue
[pokes] I want to know the rest! No fair to leave us hanging like that!

Author's Response: Next chapter is almost ready!

Name: padfootsgirl1981 (Signed) · Date: 10/28/07 15:29 · For: Prologue
Wow! I absolutely adored this, it is beautifully written and you've managed to captivate me already. I love Sirius to pieces and you described him perfectly. I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks! :D

Name: solemnlyswear_x (Signed) · Date: 10/28/07 15:17 · For: Prologue
Well, you’ve got my attention! =D

It was a really good start. Your narrator seems very interesting, and Sirius was intriguingly mysterious. I can’t wait to see where you’re going with the plot.

One thing - in this paragraph:

‘You see, I’m a murder,’ he said, smiling slightly at the look I was giving him, as he got to his feet and dusted off his robes.

‘A murderer?’ I said, amazed. He looked nothing like a murder. Murders didn’t have straight noses and aristocratic good-looks — they had club feet!

You ‘murder’ instead of ‘murderer’ a couple of times. Just a minor thing.

Great job - I’ll be looking for your next update! =)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for picking out the mistakes! I fixed them. :) And thanks for the review, glad you liked the chapter.

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