00hooOOOooh this is gooooood and i looove the password hunky-dory i love it
Wow that was really good!! one of the best FanFics I've read (and I've read alot) Are you planing a sequel cause you shood. or unless you already have one I dont Know anyway NICE JOB
wait wernt they on day 5?
so... *sniffle* sad.... *wail*
I'm really sad that this story has come to an end, and that James and Lily will still end up being killed. Some of the exam mistakes were really funny, and James' prank on Snape, a muggle prank, probably more effective than any spell. Hope you write more stuff, this was great!
I hope Dumbledore's got a plan for hiring Bellatrix, what a huge mistake! Looks like James and Lily's deaths might still happen, although as we learned from the hall of prophecy, the future isn't set. And bringing a Dementor into a school, what was she thinking?!
Peter is horrid! Maybe he isn't the most popular of people, but none of the others would see harm come to him. What a ...!!! That Christmas morning was lovely, that's how i felt when reading it. I'm glad James and Lily are finally together. Since Peter hexed Lily, maybe the Potters won't use his as secret keeper and won't get killed after all. Hope so. I love what if.
A bit of an abrupt end to the chapter. I got a bit sad when they were watching their possible muggle lives. Wonder what my life would've been if I'd gone to Hogwarts? James and Lily seem to get on a little better now, possibley when the switching is reversed they'll stay that way, hopefully they worn't revert back to arguing. keep writing.
I love this chapter, it seems the mistake has made them closer without realising it. That spell to empty the bladder would be really useful to know, and the one for changing clothes would save loads of time. I like how Lily stopped James punching Snape, so he could show her he would've defended her. Can't wait to click on NEXT
A hilarious start, and making them stay like that until full moon, ingenious!
Great story! i loved it!
ewww!! they kissed themselves!! how could anyone write such vile??
really well done. you did not make it boring and still emphasized on every tiny detail
ooer i like how you ended it!
WOaaaaaaaaaaaaa...love the last paragraph about the dream thingy!
I;m not trying to be harsh, but I can't really finish this fic. It's strange because it feels like two different stories squashed into one. The first half and second half are so different. You started with an original concept, and then it seemed to lose its focus. The author's comments throughout the story or referring to yourself of your characters or your fic really ruin it for me. It breaks the spell of the story and is jarring.
"And you said I'M the most difficult person.." he muttered. Lily stared up at him in shock. - This could have been clearer on how it made James confess. It took me awhile to realize she only told the stag that. I also think you should have explained the curse in more detail. Why is it so bad to use? Why does it react differently? I just wanted more info.
I think you should have stayed with one voice. Switching to first person was strange. I think its better to be consistent. You can write those thoughts he's having from a third person. Switching to first doesn't add anything.
I thought this was going well until you started including all the author's notes in the middle of the chapter. It was jarring. I was also confused about the point of the Muggle-life. What does that have to do with Transfiguration? Even if it did have something to do with it, I don't think McGonagall would embarrass students like that in class by showing really personal stuff to everyone. I don't see what they could learn from it either.
Okay, this ,like totally, rocked! You are on the Fav authors list!
PS, fav quote: Lily gave James a look that said, "You will die."
I cracked up so hard at that! 10/10