This is odd, a funny take on teen pregnancy, and i love to read a story from Scorpius's perspective
Interesting, and the way you used Scorpios was very good.
:) Molly
lol! I loved the ending, it was so qute and added a nice touch to the whole thing.You did an excellent job, especially with the characterizations. Thanks for a lovely read!
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hahahaha
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Wow....that story had me sitting on edge the whole time. You should definitely consider suspense writing. Please keep writing more.
xoxo
Author's Response: :) Thanks! I'll definitely keep writing, but I think this story is pretty much done. Thanks for the review!
aaw, i loved it! so sweet... is Scorpius in the same house as Victoire? and what house is that? anyways... 10/10!
~Padfoot
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aaw, i loved it! so sweet... is Scorpius in the same house as Victoire? and what house is that? anyways... 10/10!
~Padfoot
Author's Response: Yeah, I had them both in the same house. I'm considering posting another fic explaining that... hmmm... In any case, thanks for the review!
awwwwwwwwwwwww i love it
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I loved this story! Just one question: When Ted and Victoire get married, will Scorpius babysit the cub? :D
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Hello there, Valentinia! I have just finished reading your story and thought it was very enjoyable! I can only imagine the sort of pressure and stress one would be under after learning that she was pregnant, or gotten someone pregnant (in a guy’s case), while still being in school. “I never meant for that to happen.” Yes, that would be the case, without any doubts.
I liked, in the beginning paragraph, how you started to characterize Scorpius, telling us about how he is disregarding some of his father’s advice and making up his own mind. I know this is only a one-shot, but I would have liked to see some more development of his personality. I think some of shows through the way we witness the story through his eyes. However, it leaves the reader hungry for more. I’m not suggesting you turn this one-shot into a novel. I just think you can add some more characterization in a few more paragraphs, that’s all.
And, to echo something another reviewer asked, what house is Scorpius in?
I think you did the dialogue well. It flowed naturally and, to me, didn’t seem forced anywhere. Overall all, you have done a nice job on this story. Good luck in the challenge.
Author's Response: :D Thanks! Yeah, I think I might try to put some more info on Scorpius into this fic... It's more Vicky and Ted's story, I guess, though. Hmm... In any case, thanks for the review, the praise (*basks*) and the useful advice!
Very cute! I really enjoyed reading this story.
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LOL! good story!
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i like it how the story gradually gets emotional or something, then scorpius just gets mad that all of that was about a baby. it just cuts off the emotional moment and brings us back to who is carrying the story. i mean, the way you wrote it, to me, it seemed as though the narration was transferring from scorpius to an unknown character, or a camera. i liked it though.. and i love the vicky/teddy ship. its great..
continue writing..
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. This was intended as a one-shot, but I'm working on a different Scorpius-centric fic... :D
This is a good story
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Ohh....how cool. I think this is a very great idea for the challenge, and good luck on it! I'm hoping for more soon. It's good, and I like Scorpius' character the way you show him...just one question...they're in the same house? What house is this? Just wondering.:-)
Author's Response: Hmm... I may post something soon to clarify that... We'll see, I suppose... Thanks for the review!
Awwwww, Ted and Vicky are sweet. Also I liked how you showed the whole thing from Scorpius's POV.=Sammy
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