Reviewer: Adeyla
Date: 11/11/08 2:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is odd, a funny take on teen pregnancy, and i love to read a story from Scorpius's perspective

Reviewer: CakeorDeath
Date: 09/21/08 3:55
Chapter: Chapter 1

Interesting, and the way you used Scorpios was very good.

:) Molly

Reviewer: MithrilQuill
Date: 11/17/07 23:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

lol! I loved the ending, it was so qute and added a nice touch to the whole thing.You did an excellent job, especially with the characterizations. Thanks for a lovely read!

Author's Response: :) Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked this!

Reviewer: emLILY EVANS
Date: 11/12/07 18:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

hahahaha

Author's Response: Thanks... I think

Reviewer: neongirl101
Date: 11/09/07 17:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow....that story had me sitting on edge the whole time. You should definitely consider suspense writing. Please keep writing more.

xoxo

Author's Response: :) Thanks! I'll definitely keep writing, but I think this story is pretty much done. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 11/06/07 19:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

aaw, i loved it! so sweet... is Scorpius in the same house as Victoire? and what house is that? anyways... 10/10!
~Padfoot

Author's Response: lol

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 11/06/07 19:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

aaw, i loved it! so sweet... is Scorpius in the same house as Victoire? and what house is that? anyways... 10/10!
~Padfoot

Author's Response: Yeah, I had them both in the same house. I'm considering posting another fic explaining that... hmmm... In any case, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: emLILY EVANS
Date: 11/03/07 19:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

awwwwwwwwwwwww i love it

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: shewolf2000
Date: 10/28/07 14:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

I loved this story! Just one question: When Ted and Victoire get married, will Scorpius babysit the cub? :D

Author's Response: lol! Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed this!

Reviewer: Skipper424
Date: 10/25/07 6:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hello there, Valentinia! I have just finished reading your story and thought it was very enjoyable! I can only imagine the sort of pressure and stress one would be under after learning that she was pregnant, or gotten someone pregnant (in a guys case), while still being in school. I never meant for that to happen. Yes, that would be the case, without any doubts.

I liked, in the beginning paragraph, how you started to characterize Scorpius, telling us about how he is disregarding some of his fathers advice and making up his own mind. I know this is only a one-shot, but I would have liked to see some more development of his personality. I think some of shows through the way we witness the story through his eyes. However, it leaves the reader hungry for more. Im not suggesting you turn this one-shot into a novel. I just think you can add some more characterization in a few more paragraphs, thats all.

And, to echo something another reviewer asked, what house is Scorpius in?

I think you did the dialogue well. It flowed naturally and, to me, didnt seem forced anywhere. Overall all, you have done a nice job on this story. Good luck in the challenge.

Author's Response: :D Thanks! Yeah, I think I might try to put some more info on Scorpius into this fic... It's more Vicky and Ted's story, I guess, though. Hmm... In any case, thanks for the review, the praise (*basks*) and the useful advice!

Reviewer: njyecats
Date: 10/22/07 18:20
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very cute! I really enjoyed reading this story.

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 10/22/07 17:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

LOL! good story!

Author's Response: :) Thanks!

Reviewer: Merlin the Weirdster
Date: 10/22/07 9:48
Chapter: Chapter 1

i like it how the story gradually gets emotional or something, then scorpius just gets mad that all of that was about a baby. it just cuts off the emotional moment and brings us back to who is carrying the story. i mean, the way you wrote it, to me, it seemed as though the narration was transferring from scorpius to an unknown character, or a camera. i liked it though.. and i love the vicky/teddy ship. its great..

continue writing..

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. This was intended as a one-shot, but I'm working on a different Scorpius-centric fic... :D

Reviewer: hermy_91
Date: 10/21/07 15:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a good story


Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Gin_Drinka
Date: 10/21/07 14:47
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ohh....how cool. I think this is a very great idea for the challenge, and good luck on it! I'm hoping for more soon. It's good, and I like Scorpius' character the way you show him...just one question...they're in the same house? What house is this? Just wondering.:-)

Author's Response: Hmm... I may post something soon to clarify that... We'll see, I suppose... Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 10/21/07 8:35
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awwwww, Ted and Vicky are sweet. Also I liked how you showed the whole thing from Scorpius's POV.=Sammy

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! :)

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