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Name: Dracoisbeast (Signed) · Date: 08/31/12 6:18 · For: Bad History
I wish that Hermione had had more of a personality i the 1st chapter. And Rose is 17 now. She needs a bit more charisma. Some sass. Anything. Right now, she is like vanilla ice cream. Everyone likes her, but there is nothing uniqueabout her. Yet. I have high hopes for this fanfic because I was going to write one about the same couple. And I want something to compete against. I await the rest of the story...

Name: wonderingbutnotlost (Signed) · Date: 12/23/09 9:31 · For: Bad History
I really like this story so far. I hope that the next chapter is up soon. Thank you for sharing your gift of writing.

Name: mathgirl365 (Signed) · Date: 07/27/08 10:57 · For: Prologue
i like it so far

Name: MerrryD (Signed) · Date: 07/14/08 17:03 · For: Prologue
Mavis! -hugs- This is my slow start at an attempt to pay you back for being an amazing beta.

I have one little nitpick-y thing here:

When Albus and Malfoy joined their respective Quidditch teams later, he and the other Gryffindor Quidditch players (which included my brother, and Albus’ brother and sister) were at times mocked by the Slytherin Quidditch team.

This sentence was kind of hard for me to follow. I think that it was mostly because you mentioned Lily and Hugo in it and I was like 'Wha--? They're younger... OH! She seems in the future.' So maybe you could clear that up a bit.

/of nitpicks

That slap, knowing James, was probably not very gentle.

ahahahaha. I really like how you sneak a bit of James's characterization here.

Ravenclaw! It hadn’t occurred to me that I might be Sorted into this house.

She's not incredibly smart or anything. And the hat didn't consider putting her mum in their. -rolls eyes at Rose- I really like the way you snuck in a little bit of Hermione that shone through in Rose.

He quite suddenly entered my world, and it was unknown whether he was to stay…

You know, this would have been a fine ending all on it's own. But I love the last line too. lol. You give us a little bit of cliffie here...

It was also the year my world was turned upside down.

And then it's BANG! Big cliffie here. -pouts-
-then realises you have the next chapter up-

I really like how you start out with Malfoy being sorted. It sets the scene for the rest of the prolouge, and I guess the rest of the story. ;) I also like the nervousness about being sorted. It was really cute.

That whole exchange between Albus and Rose about Albus being cunning was hilarous and adorable too. lol. It made me just want to give Albus a hug and then walk away and laugh at him behind his back. lol. Do I sound evil or what?

Oh! I also really liked Neville being the Meet-And-Greet-the-First-Years Professor. :) And I wanted to say that I am incredibly impressed with your ability to make up names. lol. I hate doing it, personally, and I always get worried that the end sounding extremely ridiculous. All of your names sounded quite real and like actual people.

Overall, it was a really interestring and intriguing prolouge!

Great job, kid!


Peace out.


Name: hproxmysox36 (Signed) · Date: 06/24/08 21:13 · For: Bad History
Hey, this is alot like the idea that i have 4 a fanfic xcept that its Lilly Potter/Malfoy instead of Rose/Malfoy and Malfoy's first name is Logan instead of Scorpius and Logan Malfoy is really sweet....well this story is really good so far cant wait till the next update im gunna add this to my favs! :)

Name: HarperLee (Signed) · Date: 06/23/08 19:36 · For: Bad History
Oh, poor Rose! She is certainly a lot like her mother, though you have sharpened and elaborated on many of her traits. Scorpius is a fascinating character too, a lot like his father, but he also reminds me in many ways of young Tom Riddle (this is a compliment, I used to have a huge crush on Tom Riddle- there's something attractive about someone so dangerous!)
The story is flowing very smoothly, so please update soon! (very soon!)

Name: cat and otter (Signed) · Date: 05/21/08 2:35 · For: Bad History
I really enjoyed that, even though there was a long wait. Keep up the good work, and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you'll continue reading this fic! :D And I'm really sorry for the long wait. I promise the wait for the second chapter won't be as long. (Pauses) Well, that's not really saying something, because the wait for the first chapter was more than half a year. Okay, I'll try to get it up ASAP!

Name: snaperocks (Signed) · Date: 05/20/08 23:22 · For: Bad History
i think this chp is reallyyyyy good
but like ok i shudnt be tokin bcuz im not 17
but rose sounded like she was younger thn 17 in th beginning
but thn i thot u kno mother-daughter relationships r diffrnt always
n she sounded 17 thru th rest of th chp in th compartmnt n stuff so yeah
ok i like th story n u really write very well
i like ur similes n ur writing style so its really cool
n i think daniel will turn out hot yo!
im ok scorpius is rude which is cool bcuz its like th draco n hermione tht nvr hapnd u kno?
i like scorpius in this really
n im sure hes hot 2 considering dracos his dad
so yeah
im excited for th nxt chp really its a really good story
diffrnt frm th othr rose/scorpius storys
n this really pullld me into th story frm th summary n prologue so i kno its gonna be good
keep it up n i cant wait for th chp2 i hope itll be up here sooner thn chp 1

Author's Response: Hmmm... yes, Rose does seem slightly younger than seventeen in the front part. I'll see what I can do to modify it. It's good that Scorpius is quite likeable, LOL. Thanks for the review and I hope you'll read on! (:

Name: snaperocks (Signed) · Date: 05/20/08 22:42 · For: Bad History
dont u mean from draco malfoy? thts his dad right?
sorry anyways lemme go read th story now

Author's Response: Haha yes, thanks for telling me, I've corrected that mistake already. (:

Name: Brunette Lily (Signed) · Date: 05/20/08 21:04 · For: Bad History
I like this story, it seems promising. You're characterization of Rose and Hermoine is very good. However, the letter at the beginning was described as being from Lucius, but the closing said, "your father". Lucius is Scorpius's grandfather, so you should change it to be from Draco or say it's from "your grandfather".

Author's Response: I've changed that mistake, thanks for telling me. (: I'm very glad that you thought my characterisation was all right, and I hope you're interested in the story enough to keep reading it. (:

Name: the ink slinger (Signed) · Date: 05/20/08 20:40 · For: Bad History
Oh, bravo! I like Scorpius. I would hate him if I were Rose, but as a spectator, he's great. I mean, who knew a Malfoy could be so intelligent and competent? Your characterization is brilliant. You have fleshed out everyone beautifully.

Author's Response: Wow. Thanks! I'm really really glad that you like Scorpius as a spectator, and I'm also happy that you thought I'd given him a sort of character. I hope I'll continue to characterise everyone properly, and that you'll continue reading this fic. (:

Name: Sly One (Signed) · Date: 05/20/08 14:39 · For: Bad History

Good so far...who am I to critici ze? Glad someone writing good stuff is getting published LOL!


Keep it up!


Author's Response: I'm really flattered! :D Thanks so much for thinking so highly of me, but I really do need a lot more work before my writing can actually be considered good. Thanks for the review, and I hope you continue reading this fic.

Name: MissHufflepuff (Signed) · Date: 05/20/08 13:01 · For: Prologue
I really liked this chapter and was so glad you've updated.

My only criticism is that the letter at the beginning you said was from Lucius Malfoy when due to the content it appears to be from Draco. It took me a moment to sort it all out.

Other than that, excellent chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: I've gotten the Lucius-Draco thing sorted out. It was a mistake on my part, sorry! Thanks for telling me that! I hope you continue reading this fic. (:

Name: Lucky_13_Girl (Signed) · Date: 05/14/08 18:21 · For: Prologue
Okay, this is interesting. Keep writing.

Author's Response: I hope you'll continue reading this. :D

Name: lily_death_flower (Signed) · Date: 01/11/08 14:30 · For: Prologue
i love how yous tarted it and i love the pairing. good job!! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! (:

Name: Elocin13 (Signed) · Date: 01/05/08 18:25 · For: Prologue
Very neat. I got on today looking for a Rose/Scorpius pairing or something similar, and look what I found! =) Very nice job so far, please update!

Author's Response: Thanks! Haha I'm sure there'll be more, better Scorpius/Rose fanfics up on Mugglenet Fanfiction soon! I look forward to reading those. (: Yeah, I'll try to update soon. Thank you for your review.

Name: Elocin13 (Signed) · Date: 01/05/08 18:24 · For: Prologue
Very neat. I got on today looking for a Rose/Scorpius pairing or something similar, and look what I found! =) Very nice job so far, please update!

Name: KASK (Signed) · Date: 12/27/07 16:44 · For: Prologue
Wow! I really loved that! I really like the way you began with a little intro to the relationship between Scorpius and Rose. I hope you update soon!

Author's Response: Heehee, it's going to take quite a while though. I'm glad you loved the prologue, and I really hope you continue reading this fanfic! Thanks for your review! (:

Name: Lily_n_James (Signed) · Date: 12/26/07 19:51 · For: Prologue
That was brilliant! I do hope you update soon, if you get too stuck, just gimme a call ;)


Author's Response: I'll try to crank out the first chapter soon, but it's going to take quite a while. Thanks for the review!

Name: book babe (Signed) · Date: 11/26/07 10:32 · For: Prologue
i think its a really good idea and so cute
please carry on

Author's Response: Haha, thanks. I'll try, really, I will. Thanks for the review!

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