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Name: Cheshlin (Signed) · Date: 06/21/06 22:28 · For: Chapter 34
So much happened in that chapter. Snape is so believable in that letter. He shows how much he cares, but doesn't try to be who he knows Hermione wants him to be. He is totally true to himself. I find it interesting the way he tries to protect Hermione, only to have it come to nothing with whoever it was that found her at the end of the chapter. I hope that he ends up saving her some way. I think he has that much in him. I wait anxiously for your next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you. I can't really respond too well because next chapter explains some things, but you're right, he should rescue her. She deserves more than that letter.

Name: StarryKnight (Signed) · Date: 06/21/06 16:44 · For: Chapter 34
Ouch, what a cliffhanger! Though you know I would have read the next chapter anyway, they are truly worth any waiting for. Hermione didn't react to the letter in the way that I would have expected, but then it was an intensely honest, sad letter. -I- cried towards the end of it, as an insight into Severus's mind - and the hopelessness he sees in their relationship. I don't think Severus is as bad as he makes out in that letter, considering the end of the previous chapter, and he must care enough to leave her behind. I await the next chapter in the "hope that peace will arrive soon", as they deserve it.

Author's Response: Wow.You cried? I am sorry. *huggles* Severus is a pessimist through and through, and so the letter did become a little doom and gloom. The next chapter might even add insult to injury. Thank you for the review.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/21/06 13:42 · For: Chapter 34
I dont like that letter. She loves him. It seems like she loves him enough for the both of them. Who is the voice? Is it Voldemort or mabye Malfoy. Please tell me and update again.

Author's Response: *huggles* You're not supposed to like the letter. It is cruel in its honesty, but Severus insisted that it be that way. Thank you for the review. The update won't be long.

Name: PuppetPal (Signed) · Date: 06/21/06 13:12 · For: Chapter 34
This is the first time I've read this story, and I enjoyed it very much. It has a very different, original plotline. I am very much wondering who the man is, and I hope it is not Draco. Please continue writing so that I'm not left wondering too long. :) Thank you.

Author's Response: Thank you. I am glad you have enjoyed Lacrima so far. It's certainly been a challenge for little old me! You're going to have to remain in suspence for an ickle while longer... but not too long, I assure you!

Name: woomama (Signed) · Date: 06/21/06 12:15 · For: Chapter 34
This story is written in the form of a classic in my opinion. It is thought provoking and leads you away from the normal story line to the inner depths of it's characters. I must say, that being a Snape enthusiast, I don't like the Snape in this chapter. It is not that you have written him badly, but that you have written him so well, and in such a way as I have not seen before that I do not like the amount of depression and inner turmoil that he displays. Of course my desire for Snape and Hermione to fall in love probably plays a large part of that. Your story however, is perfectly in sync with how your characters are reacting. It is definitely dark and angsty. I also want to explain what I mean when I say that I feel that your story is written in the form of a classic. I am an average, average joe (or josephine), and your story has the depth and imagery that my average brain can't just quickly gloss over. I have to read slowly and allow the words to flow in and be processed. Believe me, I offer this as a very high compliment. Your story is beautiful. It is also highly complimentary that you can actually make me dislike a character that I absolutely adore, without sacrificing him to utter OOC-ness.
Ok, so enough of the flowery compliments and on to the errors that I have found. I think these are probably editing errors but you can let me know.

From the lamplight of this single candle, I feel almost brazen mentioning this to you, but, candles don't make "lamplight" only light or "candlelight."

You say that you do will not fight for him, but to shoot out a curse at any man across the battlefield is surely spreading his work. I think this was just a matter of not taking the "do" out of the sentence.

Well, more fool me for wanting it. I think this would flow better if it were Well, more the fool am I for wanting it

But he leaving me isnít going to erase the memories. he should be his in this instance. But his leaving me isn't going to erase the memories.

Ok that is all I have. I love this story. There are only a handful of chaptered stories that are this long that I will stick with, and currently this is the only one of this length. Keep up the good work and I will look for the next chapter.


Author's Response: *huggles Tina* This is a lovely review. Thank you very much! I will go back and change those errors... hmmm... lamps and candles - what's the difference again? *giggles* I am glad you find it worth reading because I sometimes wonder if it's worth writing, lol. My love for imagery has been something that's developed from all my analysis of it in school. It isn't something to gloss over, so I am glad you don't!

Name: cenedra (Signed) · Date: 06/21/06 8:54 · For: Chapter 34
i really liked this chapter, i've been hoping you'd have a chapter like this about snape since the start, i wanted to find out what you were going to show him as. i thought it was really good the way you did it, but i hope we'll see more of him before the end of the story and hermione doesn't give up on him.

can't wait for the next chapter!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you. It's a chapter I've had planned for over six months now and when it came to actually writing it I found it very tough. I knew that I wasn't going to portray him as 'the good guy in the end' but I also didn't want to put him on the same par as some of the other, more evil, characters. So, I am glad you liked it. Update will be soon.

Name: Cateria (Signed) · Date: 06/21/06 7:24 · For: Chapter 34
Why did you leave it like that? It's not very nice...

Still, a great chapter and - what I believe it is - a realistic dive into the complex mind of Severus Snape. And I do wonder who the man is...

All I have left to say, then, is: update soon!

Author's Response: I had to leave it like that so that you'd read the next chapter!!!! You know me by now, surely. You know I like to leave everyone hanging on a thread ;-) I am glad you enjoyed it. Snape is complex and he gave me a headache. Thank you for your patience through this month. Hopefully, next chap will be up soon (it's written and fiesty!)

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 4:25 · For: Chapter 33
I am happy that they both got the time away from azkaban that they deserved. I hope that they dont die in the batte. Is the battle supposed to be the 'Final Battle'? Just wondering. Love the story please update. Good luck on future chapters.

Author's Response: Thank you very very much for the time you have spent reading and reviewing my story. It's helped remind me of previous chapters and some of the problems I've faced/still facing! You've been a tremendous help. Also, I read your reviews on a day before my exams and it cheered me up loads. It helped me build my confidence back up. As for next chapter... I believe it has just been validated ;-)

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 3:53 · For: Chapter 32
I am glad that Snape is able to show a little compasion know or at least it seems like it. Good luck on upcoming chapters i loved this one.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 3:32 · For: Chapter 31
I like the way she tricked him without planning to. I agree with what she said at being good at improvising. Luv the story.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 3:11 · For: Chapter 30
Will they ever figure out she is pregant? Well eventully they will but i mean in the near furture?

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 2:52 · For: Chapter 29
I thought that nothing could deflect unforgivable curses. Oh well good chapter. Good luck on upcoming ones.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 2:34 · For: Chapter 28
Is the term "ashwinder" a couincidence because there is a website that is Hermione and Severus fics called Ashwinder. Just a question. You are right it is kind of hard to comprehend all that happened in this chapter. That is sometimes a good thing though. Luv the story good luck on the rest.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 1:23 · For: Chapter 27
I thought with legimency you had to use the spell legimens. That you just couldnt enter someones mind? Good chapter.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 1:00 · For: Chapter 26
I wonder what Joe and Hermione will come up with. Is Joe a real friend or is he a foe? Great chapter good luck on the next ones.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 0:25 · For: Chapter 24
The Veritusurm was brillant to make Snape confess. You should have asked him more questions though in my opion. Hermione also forgave a little to easily. Good job though and good luck on upcoming chapters.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/19/06 0:01 · For: Chapter 23
That fight was very hurtful to both. I hope that they fix the problem and tell each other that they love one another I think that they do but I could be wrong. Good job and good luck on upcoming chapters.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/18/06 23:45 · For: Chapter 22
The way Hermione slipped out her little secret was...unexpected. Does the Dark Lord have plans for this child? Good job and good luck on upcoming chapters. Oh and the way you described Snapes lying was very much how i would imagine it.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/18/06 23:31 · For: Chapter 21
That was a good description of Voldemort. Good job and good luck on upcoming chapters. I really like this story.

Name: i_luv_snape (Signed) · Date: 06/18/06 23:19 · For: Chapter 20
Makeing Hermione pregant does add a new twist to the story. Good job and good luck on upcoming chapters.

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