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Name: dirty_little_secret (Signed) · Date: 07/18/06 22:41 · For: Chapter 35
update soon!!

Name: Pheonix__Fire (Signed) · Date: 07/18/06 16:02 · For: Chapter 17
Wow. I do not believe there are any words in the known English Dictionary that can suffiecently describe just how crafty this story is! I can't stop reading it! Damn you! Definitly a favourite. If you don't keep writing I will hunt you down!

Name: xenophiliac (Signed) · Date: 07/17/06 23:14 · For: Chapter 35
Ha! So Lucius is dead. I don't believe Snape is, it is impossible for him to be dead unless Hermione sees it. I think Lucius lied to Hermione to instigate the fight he wanted. Lucius lied about everything he said about Severus, even that Severus sent him. That would be unlike Snape to send a man who repeatedly tried to rape and harm Hermione. It would be unlike any lover to do that.

Name: xenophiliac (Signed) · Date: 07/17/06 23:00 · For: Chapter 34
Ah, the letter of truth. Many a thing he said was already known, but there was one glitch. Snape has proven time and time again that he hates heroism and cowardice. Putting Hermione in such a position which she cannot help I would say is his cowardice at the thought of losing her when she would be a great help to voldemorts defeat. Or call it love.

As for the man who unlocks the door, I believe it is probably someone sent by Snape to retrieve her after some time or fight. I shall read on......

Name: kar_amazing (Signed) · Date: 07/17/06 20:13 · For: Chapter 35
k, ive been reading this for a while, i just didnt have an account so i couldnt review, etc, whatever. The thing is i really hate the premises of the story but i cannot stop reading, well that sounds wrong but what i mean is that i love the story but i cant allow myself to love the whole Snape/Hermione thing, and how Harrys such a weak character, but i love the story and i would be ecstatic to see a new chapter!

sorry this is such a mixed up review, if you didnt get what i said- I LOVE the story updates!

Name: rbgrimma (Signed) · Date: 07/16/06 23:50 · For: Chapter 35
WOW! Please keep going, this story is excellent. I'd love there to be a twist where Snape is really alive and really good, but happy endings are not very realalistic i suppose! Thankyou

Name: b_reeger (Signed) · Date: 07/16/06 19:51 · For: Chapter 35
{ Applauding } I've finally finished reading all 35 chapters after 2 days reading. This story is awesome, I can't wait to see how it ends !!!

Name: cenedra (Signed) · Date: 07/16/06 7:10 · For: Chapter 35
i like this chapter alot, the way you've show hermione as just boiling over and killing him is very good, he'd gone on tormenting her for too long and she just snapped,
i also am really glad you didn't decide to completely turn snape to good, he's a much more interesting character this way
can't wait to read more, plleeeeeeeeeeeasssssssssee update soon :-)

Name: ktaggart (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 19:59 · For: Chapter 35
woow i love submit the next one please

Name: woomama (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 17:08 · For: Chapter 35
Wow! Amazing chapter. I like the way you have pictured Malfoy coming up to her in the hotel knowing that he has the upper hand. “There is a score to be settled between him and me, one that he is eager to pursue. There is confidence in his stride, and rightfully so, considering that he has gained victory in the battle.” This is his moment to play cat to her mouse, batting her around before eating her. (so to speak )
Knowing that he wants nothing more than to see her in agony over her past actions against him, it is so anti-climactic for him.

“Funnily enough, they are still clean, not sullied by any mud or blood from the battlefield.” Lucius showing up with no mud or blood on his robes makes me think that he hasn't been to battle. Possibly, that it hasn't happened yet, maybe there is more we don’t know in this little sentence. A giveaway perhaps?

“I could be sat here now, sobbing my heart out, believing that he died loving me. But I know that he didn’t. Does that make it easier?” How very sad, to be told the truth and then be faced with death. I can easily see how this would take the fight out of her. She knows now that not only does/did Snape not care for her, but also believes the baby to be a mistake. The letter was very eloquent in it’s denial of her and the child while still explaining and making you want to understand why he is the way he is. However, that doesn’t make this confrontation with Malfoy any less painful.

“With a huge sigh, I fall back on the bed and cover myself with the large duvet, burying my face into the pillow.” I completely love this line. Because the imagery that it suggests is so very clear. She is neither goading him nor denying what is about to happen, she is merely accepting. She is doing what any other girl would want to do in her position and that is to hide under the covers until it was over. I am amazed at Lucius’ reaction to this. It is almost caring, in a way. “He sits down beside me, shifting the weight of the bed so that I am sloping slightly towards him. He does not touch me; although I cannot see him, I feel him watching me.” I never once thought “sexual assault” in this, it was almost as if he was incredulous as to her actions, how could she just give in to fate. At least fate the way he saw it, and again he was almost caring in his response to her, but, not so in a loving way.

“Finally, she retaliates. I knew that you would eventually,” he mocks. I like that you didn’t have him incapacitated by the kick. Usually a story will indicate an action like this and then have him rolling on the floor in pain, when in actuality it may or may not. He sees this as her finally reacting to him, not as her gut instinct in protecting her child.

“The glass shatters, creating millions of white, crystal fragments. They fly out at me, hitting my face and cutting my skin so that I have to shield my eyes.” He can’t control his anger while being ignored, which is true Lucius style. I was waiting for something like this to happen. But I was under the same misconception that Hermione was, that the magical barriers were now dropped.

“Severus told me where to find you. He told me how to disable the charm,” he says with great amusement in his voice. He has enjoys providing me with that answer. Now I am confused as to why he would tell Lucius how to get into the hotel room as well as about her being in love with him but him not with her. My gut says the Dark Lord may have taken this information from him, possibly, before they killed Snape, if he is indeed dead at this point. Hermione’s internal struggle is so very true to life. Having just read the letter and knowing now that the father of her child not only doesn't love her, but also holds no affection for the child within her must be terribly deflating (for lack of a better word). Either anger is going to flow or defeat, defeat is so much easier when you are tired and emotionally rung out.

“He’s dead now, isn’t he?” I ask, almost hoping that he is. Malfoy remains silent. “Please, tell me he is dead.” It’s funny how she doesn’t really seem to believe it until Lucius tells her aloud. Then, she truly knows the sadness of her situation.

I love the battle between them at the end, as well as the outcome. It was something that needed to happen and now the other questions can be asked. Has the final battle actually been fought? Is Snape really dead? How did Lucius come upon the information of Hermione’s whereabouts and how to get past the charms?

It’s actually quite sad to think that Snape doesn’t care for her. I want him to love her and the child. But not everything has a happy ending.

Now for the nitpicks.

“I shudder as he reminds me of the growing foetus in my womb”

Foetus - is that like a combination of Foe and Fetus. It is Snape's child, after all.

He has enjoys providing me with that answer.

enjoyed??? Or remove the - has

“I watch as the water races down to the plughole and them churns around and becomes sucked down into the drains.”


“I have come too far for their not to be a”


Overall, another fabulous chapter, in a magnificent story, keep up the good work, I want to see those questions answered and Snape to really be in love with her but merely trying to protect her. *giggles*

Name: Magical Maeve (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 13:17 · For: Chapter 35
Argh!!! Typo alert.

I raise my hand without even realising, now burning with despise for Malfoy.

Despise needs to be hatred or some other grammatically correct word. Bad beta!

In other news, I just spent Ł55 on a Zidane replica shirt... you think hubby will kill me? *stops spamming Laura's reviews**giggles*

Author's Response: *snorts* My grandma wants to know why I am laughing. Will she understand? Probably not. I've been throwing invisible darts at invisible customers since I clocked off at 8, and so to have me suddenly burst into laughter was strange. Anyhoo - no, your husband tolerated the bible, the zillion AR CD's, and the shipping order of MNff merchandise. Chances are, he'll tolerate this. Thanks for caring so much about my grammar. *huggles* You're a brilliant beta!

Name: BlondieFangurl (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 13:12 · For: Chapter 35
Hermione should have kept him alive and instead use him for housework. I love this story, but when is it going to end? I NEED TO KNOW WHO WINS ALREADY!!!

Author's Response: Use him as a house-elf? That would be ironic! It's going to end in approx two chapters - a scary thought for me. I've been writing it for nearly two years now. But I'm ready to move onto other stuff, perhaps even original stuff. And you will find out who wins. *giggles* Thanks for the review.

Name: Cheshlin (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 11:46 · For: Chapter 35
I'm actually impressed that Lucius gave her the chance to protect herself. It is hard to know how much of what he told her is the truth. He doesn't owe her the truth, so it is very hard to say how much he told her that was real. I'm surprised Hermione was actually able to do the killing curse, even if it was unintentional. I wouldn't picture that. I look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: *nods* I was debating over her using the killing curse myself, but I think when a person is *that* cruel they can tip them over the edge. She loved Severus and Lucius really destroyed that love in the most heartless way. And he likes to play with her... by refusing to fight she was refusing to play his game... I thought him just killing her would be too easy. Thanks for the review.

Name: Her My Own EE (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 11:09 · For: Chapter 35
Oh no! Hermione has tainted her wand. Still she is safe for the moment. Will she finally come-up with a proper way to leave & fight or at least leave. Oh I hope so. Is Severus really dead or did Malfoy tell her what he thought would be the most painful for her to hear? Please update soon!

Author's Response: You ask too many questions! But a lot of answers come in the next chapter so don't worry. Thank you for the review and being a very dedicated reader. Laura xxx

Name: Cateria (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 8:03 · For: Chapter 35
Wow, that was certainly captivating. I really can't wait any longer to see the outcome. Update soon.

Author's Response: Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it. I will be updating once I have all my other outstanding little projects done that are nibbling away at my time. We're two chapters off the end now.

Name: dirty_little_secret (Signed) · Date: 07/12/06 13:29 · For: Chapter 34
hurry and update

Author's Response: Next chapter's up!

Name: Her My Own EE (Signed) · Date: 06/25/06 0:28 · For: Chapter 34
I had written a review & then my computer stopped working. Then I was going to skip it. But I realized I like this fic way too much for that. Great chapter! I think of all the cruel things Severus did in this chapter turning Hermione's refuge into a prison cell is probably the worst. There is nothing for he to do there except wallow in self pity. (She called it self loathing.) But honestly what was he thinking? Hermione is not one to let go. She never actually let go of her part in the war though she did put it on hold for a while. Unless Harry were to die in the Battle, at which point she might grab her children & flee to the continent to regroup, she would continue to fight. Especially now that she has a new almost definitely magical baby in her belly. Oh & I hate cliffhangers!!!! ;-) Please don't make me wait to long to know the wizard that goes with the voice.

Name: dnd_lady (Signed) · Date: 06/24/06 10:26 · For: Chapter 22
Ah, those strange canon shippers and their strange ways. I always handwrite; Its not easy to lug around a computer, and I never know where inspiration will strike me, so I carry around bits of paper like a dork. Well, I am a dork, so it fits. ;)

I always thought that Colin would give up the location, but only after much torture. He seemed a character determined to prove his worth. I won't say it's entirely a bad thing though, for all I know Colin isn't actually "Colin", or if he gave it away on purpose, or what. This tale keeps me guessing.

Name: dnd_lady (Signed) · Date: 06/24/06 1:42 · For: Chapter 15
*cough* good *cough*


Author's Response: *giggles* Glad you're still reading it.

Name: dnd_lady (Signed) · Date: 06/23/06 1:04 · For: Chapter 1
Do not fear the comma! Fear the harshness!


Author's Response: Congratulations - this is the most random review I have ever received!

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