Oh, this is wonderful. I love her inner struggle and her decision to go through with it. Very powerful.
As you might remember, the sole reason I had for not reading this when I was active before was that it wasn't finished.
And so, now I'm reading. Wonderful. The line "Yes, as low as me" is absolutely perfect. It took my breath away.
Fantastic (the whole chapter, not just that one sentence :) ).
I'd lost this story from a way long time ago... I even thought it had started with S!! However, I've found it again, and started reading it. It feels good to view some of the "inner workings" of Voldemort's "union". Very fun, and sometimes slightly depressing to read. Keep going... If you finish, sequels are appreciated :)
I like how you give bits and pieces of information, willing the reader to find out what exactly is going on without laying it out explicitly. It makes me compelled to read on!
It must have been hard for Severus to ask for her help. He must really need her, because I can't see him willingly ask anyone for help. He just doesn't seem to be the person. I wonder what he wants her to do -is he in touch with the Order again, knowing what he does?
Great writing, I so want to know what happens next!
Author's Response: Ahhh! You have found Lacrima. I wrote this a long time ago and it starts off pre-HBP I am afraid, and some of the details about the Order are a little fuzzy and, dare I say it, inconsistent *blames her 17 year-old self*, Snape is my favourite character as well and he drives this plot as much as Hermione. I hope you enjoy it because it is a love-it-or-hate-it fic.
Yay, Snape!! You do know that he is my all-time favourite character, don't you? I knew he would be in this! I was wondering, he knows she is married yet he calls her 'Miss Granger'. Was this a way to provoke her? Another thing that stood out to me that when he was referring to the Order he was referring to you, rather than to us. Was he really referring to the Order there, or maybe just to Harry's friends? Ah, the enigma that is Severus Snape. I just can't get enough. Off to read more now, want to know what happens!!
Nice beginning! I had to get used to the first person perspective, as it is not something I am used to reading. It is a great way of seeing in someone's mind though, and I think you do pull it off quite nicely.
The beginnings you have here are very interesting, I wonder what has happened between book 6 and where we stand now. There was one thing that particularly needs explaining: Hermione says she's left the Wizarding World but still she urges Harry to 'come home'. Doesn't that seem a bit paradoxal? Or are there things she hasn't told us about that yet?
ummmm......harry has green eyes.
or were you thinking of dan radcliff?
cool story by the way. i've been enjoying it quite a bit.
Author's Response: He was using Polyjuice potion, so looked like Fred. I am glad you're enjoying it
Congrats! I honestly have to say this is the first ending to a story that made me cry.
I know it's taken me forever and a day to finally read this. I'm not going to go into some crazy in-depth review like I normally do because I realize this is your first fiction? (Or at least one you have been writing for a long time) A lot of your "juvenile" mistakes have been corrected with time and have blossomed into beautiful stories like "Emancipation". With that said, that does not mean this story is by any means unreadable or unmemorable just because you started at a younger age. On the contrary I think the idea is quite brilliant.
My only problem with the whole thing is simply the dark nature of it. It just seems that there is no hope at all left in this story, I almost wonder why Hermione and Snape are trying so hard to fix it. The once untied trio sits in shambles of what it used to be. Hermione seems like an entirely different person though with proper reason. Harry actually seems quite real considering everything that has happened to him but combined with Hermione’s hopelessness the pair of them are just depressing. And Ron well, maybe it’s better he is the way he is…it makes you wonder.
However, I am very intrigued to see where this story is going because you have presented us with quite the conflict. When all the hope in the world is gone, can Hermione becoming a Death Eater change the darkness clinging to the Wizarding World? In the end is that move going to be the one that topples Voldemort? While you make it seem unlikely, those of us who hope for a light at the end of the tunnel are intrigued to see what can be made of the situation.
Not to mention, it really is interesting to see how Hermione adapts in such a world, can she continue to live emotionless and hopeless? Is the past and the present going to catch up to her? What exactly is like being in the circle of the Dark Lord? That has never really be examined in-depth before.
In one of your author’s notes you said you were pushing characters to the edge, and that you certainly are, and while you have foundation for their actions no one really wants to see our “heroes” like this. So I guess the draw to this story is, can they find a way out? Or is all hope really gone?
Like I said before, the idea is brilliant, the hook is intense and writing is good. I’m looking forward to reading more, and I’ll review again in a few chapters. Sorry for the long review, I swear I didn’t mean to.
Oh my goodness, Laura. I can't even begin to tell you how touching this final chapter was. I started reading it at work and had to stop to go home. I marked my place as where Remus is in the hospital room with Severus, and reached for a tissue to dry my tear streaked face. When I got home, I had forgotten that I had shut my computer down and would have to wait for it to boot up. Making myself busy, still it never seemed take so long. Now here I sit having finished a magnificent story (because the term "fic" just doesn't do it justice) and I am once again looking for a tissue to dry my extremely wet face. To be constructive and let you know how I felt about the story as a whole is very difficult. My emotions are in upheaval. I feel real sympathy for the fictional character of Severus, having to start his "new" life with his daughter, but without Hermione. Your words, so eloquent and descriptive, have pulled the emotions from me and given them life to feel the same pain that your characters feel. It is as if my own close friend has died, after lingering in a coma for six months, and never truly meeting her own daugther. I cried hoping that somehow things would be different and Hermione would be saved, but knowing that her soul was probably already too damaged to stay any longer. I don't even know if what I am writing is making sense anymore, I hope that it is. Someday, I hope to be recieving an autographed copy of your original works, because you truly have a gift. Thank you for sharing your talent.
I am intrigued by this story. What a bleak picture you have painted. An eloquent one, but bleak nonetheless. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, so this is going to stay a short review. :)
wow. awesome story.
i suck at writingf reviews...
Excellent :tu: Very well written.
That was great with Hermione becoming Snivellus' bride. Love the exchange between Malfoy and Hermione too.
I just want to say, this is addictive stuff, I don't think that I would be able to do any work until I've finished all the chapters. :lol:
*jaw drops* I dont know what I was expecting, but I didn't think Hermione was dead...I actually believed Snape was. I thought Hermione was going to return to her family with a new child, maybe divorcing her husband. But....beautifully done. The unicorn, the little girl in the wood, I'm guessing is Hermione's spirit, to the ghost watching Severus and Remus. Was that an out-of-body experience? Lupin being just the character to introduce during such a morose event. I got the impression that Fred died but I suppose he didn't. I knew snape loved her! I knew it! Unexpected ending, unexpected.
I also wanted to comment on teh story overall. I love your writing, especially plot and those angsty/dark dramatic moments. Humour is not really your strong point, but when things get serious, thats when you love it. I think that's why I liked this fic so much. Plus the rebelion. Classic revolutonary style....I'm so proud of you!
fantastic story, i'm so glad you finished it its so good to get to find out how everyting ends even if its sad, stories that end halfway through drive me crazylol. its definitely one of the best stories i've read here, that last chapter was so sad i was crying for it all, well done on again on writing such a brilliant strory :):):D:D
I can't believe that Hermione is dead! I saw it coming, but it is still very sad. I'm glad that Severus is still alive. One of them has to be around to raise their daughter. It was AWESOME when Remus came in. I was so hoping that he would finally be able to have some peace. Thank you for such a wonderful story! I have loved following it. I am content with the ending, though sad she died.
I am absolutely gobsmacked. So beautifully written, and truly sad at the same time. You have no idea of how much I love this story. Thank you for everything.
I think it's good to have a lot of dialogue. You shouldn't apologise; it shows Hermione's character when she is with other people and not just her own thoughts. A great chapter!