Poor Ron! He makes the perfect sacrifice, but that doesn't mean I don't always end up feeling sorry for him. It's so sad to see him in this state, but I'm glad there's enough of who Hermione was left that she could save him. I just hope that there's enough of Ron left that it wasn't in vain.
One is without his mind, one is without his identity and one is without her morals.
Like I said before, you've taken these characters down such a dark path and that sums it up perfectly, and it's so like the Hermione of old to boil it down to such an analytically concise concept. There was definitely a glimmer of the girl she used to be too in her attempts to win Ron over with an academic diatribe on fire and healing. It gives me hope that there's more of who she used to be still buried within her.
I'm already hooked by the subtlety of your characterisation - it's the little moments that tell us so much about where the characters have gone in the backstory to this fic.
“I haven’t asked you, by the way,” he interrupts, “was it a girl or boy?”
I lift my head up again slightly; he speaks with such loathing about my first born child.
I love this exchange because the bitterness really shows how far Harry has fallen from the boy we knew. Once, he understood that a parent's love had to transcend all other concerns, but I'm getting the impression that he can't understand or appreciate love in any form any more.
It’s like the role he has to play has become him and he’s now completely comfortable within it.
So Severus has walked an even darker path than Harry then? I wonder just how far gone he is?
Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for the reviews. You've no idea how good the timing is for this - I mean, I have had a terrible weekend so to receive two lovely reviews was very nice. I am glad you're enjoying it, although I do know there are parts I'm unhappy with. Lau x
This story has been on my to-read-list for a fair while because I like Severus and I like dark, and I'd heard you do both very well here, so I've finally got round to reading the first chapter, and you've certainly drawn me in. There's just enough given away to seize my interest, whilst leaving so many questions unanswered. I love the atmosphere you create right from the start, and I can really see the ruined state of Hogwarts.
Somehow, I don't think I'll be getting the early night I was intending to now that I've started reading this...
oh. my. god.
you are amazing! and i am crying!
this story is definatly going in my favorites
Thank you for great story but in my opinion it is still incomplete it looks like you cheat on readers with Chapoter 37 :-) I see two chapters 36 and it is the last one but epilogue has number 38. Maybe a hidden surprise-chapter
wow i'm not going to lie, ur ending kind of upset me. i really wanted them to be a family and u killed her off.
I cried through this entire chapter. Oh, you are evil, you are so deliciously evil. This was a remarkable work. I'm so glad I read it.
Oh! This is... Oh! God...
She killed him. This is so powerful. So amazing.
Oh! The letter was perfect. And the cliff-hanger evil. I'm so glad I'm reading when this has all been written.
I adore this story.
Oh, this was a powerful chapter. I'm so sad that I'm nearing the end...
"I will summarise my criticisms in much fewer but sharper words."
Ha! That's perfect. And the story as a whole is still excellent.
I loved this chapter and what you did with her family. The fact that he wouldn't let her speak to her son was really powerful. Of course, as always, I look forward to more Snape!
Oh my... It's such a delicious thing to return to this story...
"Creevey", not "Creevery". Also, "his", not "hios" - and I noticed quite a few other random typos throughout the chapters.
Having said that: I'm absolutely DELIGHTED that you're giving us bits and pieces of Hermione's Muggle life and only infrequently. I'd thought, originally, that maybe they weren't pertinent, and then I thought perhaps the father was George, but now . . . I'm not so sure on either count! Fantastic interweaving!!!
I actually had this story rec'd to me the other day as part of an unrelated conversation I was having with another writer. She spoke very highly of it so when I went looking for a Dark Story and saw this one come up, I figured I'd give it a shot.
This is interesting, because I'm not sure who the (female?) narrator is. Initally I'd thought it was Snape (he does rather lend himself to darkfic), but then when the narrator said something about (presumably her) husband, I changed my view. Then, because of your comment about June on Ashwinder, I began thinking it's Hermione, but I'm still not sure. Probably more Hermione than Ginny, but I suppose there's always an OC that could be cropping up there.
Just FYI, some of your paragraph breaks didn't double space (I *hate* submitting to multiple archives, that's always such a pain!)
This opens with such amazingly dark imagery. What USED to be the Great Hall is now overrun with weeds, how depressing!
The thing is, I have to wonder if the Dark Lord really would destroy the school that Salazar helped to found. I suppose that would be as much in character for him as killing off so many purebloods - so many have died at his hands, *including his own family*, that I wouldn't put it past him, but it certainly makes his rhetoric hard to believe!
So, this is quite interesting and I look forward to reading more of the story!
Oh, drat it all, you made me cry again...
Not to worry, that was a good cry (shoot, I don't understand myself anymore). I loved this chapter. It's so perfect. Especially Snape's talk of trust directly preceding Harry and Ron's reactions.
God. Just... brilliant.
Oh, dear... brilliant... shoot.
No, definitely not too OOC or strange... Still better than ever.
Gorgeous. You do emotion so well... I love her defiance, too. I wish I could write this well.