Oh my goodness. You did open a Pandora's box. Very dramatic but aguably realistic.
That was so plausible, and so good, and SO chilling! Hugo, being willing to kill his own father, and not a single shred of remorse in the entire conversation, Lily, young and passionate and a lot like Lily Evans, and Scorpius, eavesdropping and unable to intervene on his own, the underdog...wow. I'd love to know what Hermione would have thought of her son joining a radical violent anti-pureblood group.
It was one of the best argument scenes I've ever read, and an amazing one-shot. Terrific job!
Ahhhhh you can't leave us here! I want to know..does Hugo get caught? Does Lilly really like Scorpious? And many other things! Please think about doing more to this great idea.....Deatheathers in reverse is what they are.
I've just read your other reviews and thought I'd add that a long running fic concerning Hugo's joining that group and turning against his family perhaps, would be a really good read. Would you consider writing one?
I think in this fic i agree with Lily's point of view. Hugo's mental! as Ron might say. And Scorpius is a little like a ferret, was that intentional? For some reason this is reminding me of equal rights and diversity that's so focussed on at present. Being disabled I've experienced discrimination in the past, but these days, the pendulum has swung too far the other way. Anyway, great fic, but very scarey how Hugo's nuts.
i liked it! i was mad at Hugo for being mean to Lily... Lily sounds like Harry's mum! i think it was well- written... good job!
... Woah, he's mean! And Hugo is... creepy... This is definitely a very original idea! The entire fic is slightly creepy, actually, but in a good way! I enjoyed reading this fic, it's most certainly well done and a very interesting plot! Good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Thanks! I wanted to make the children different to how everyone else potrayed them, I'm glad you thought it worked!
Good work on the story, Sabby! I really enjoyed reading it. One of my favourite things about participating in the challenges is getting to see all the different ideas people come up with for the same prompt. One thing I can certainly say about yours is that it was very unique, and certainly not what I expected when I started reading it. What you have here is very enjoyable, great work!
I have a couple comments I would like to make, if you don’t mind. First, I absolutely love the idea of Hugo turning out the way you have him cast here. I can certainly see Hermione being a very strict parent, against which there could certainly be some level of rebellion, especially if Hugo discovers any of the awful things that happened to her when she was at school during the war. Perhaps there could have been a little more explanation on why Hugo felt so strongly. I mean, you did write some general examples, but I mean, what has happened to him personally that has caused him to feel that way?
In this sentence: He had the distinctive look of a boy who had been told all his life her was superior, and knew it, I think you meant he where I underlined.
I kind of like the idea that the rivalry and bad blood still exists between the houses. I know a lot of people would like to think that all of that would just go away after the second war. But, why would it? After all, it survived the first war and hundreds or years of history. So, why wouldn’t all of continue on nineteen years later? I like that you have kept it.
In all, this was an enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest!
Wow, that was unexpected! I loved it anyways though. It was dark but everyone was well portrayed. Kinda creepy thinking about Ron and Hermione's son as evil. I hope you keep writing.