Oh, Anna. Lovely. You know how I love Tonks, and you've done her perfectly here. It's so unfair. You're going to beat Tash, Slytherin's going to get first place and Ravenclaw second. Oh well. You'll deserve it.
I liked the way it was a dark house, and a corridor - reminded me of the Black household. Of course, that was what you were aiming for. And I liked the idea of the white and black glows - though perhaps it was influenced a little by Eoin Colfer's The Wish List? Sorry, that was just what it reminded me of.
You seem to have started to get into a Latin title craze, hey? Do you speak it?
And I love the way you've separated the sinners, the sinless, and the people who are both. I mean, it's not like you're the first person to ever have had that idea, but you put it beautifully.
Bellatrix was perfectly in character. Perfectly.
And you did the present tense so well! It is so unfair! Why can't I write like that?
Oh, what more is there to say? I loved this story, I'd grade it Outstanding, and, yes. Very well done, congrats on your first place!!!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much, Phia. :) And I don't know if I'm going to get first place -- I haven't read any of the other entries for this cat, actually, but there are many other talented authors. Stop acting like I've won. :P
Oooh, I love The Wish List!! *pauses for squeeing* Erm, that might've influenced it, but I think I've read several books with the 'glowing soul' idea, actually.
Oh, I WISH I spoke Latin! I've been wanting to learn it forever, I'm still trying to find a class on it. Anyway, yes, I have gone a little Latin crazy with my titles, teehee. I was wondering if anyone was noticing! ;D
I'm glad you enjoyed the characterizations, because I really haven't written much of either Bellatrix or Nymphadora. And Phia, you are still a fabulous writer whether or not you completely understand tenses, so stop degrading yourself! *pretends to be mad* :P
Anywho, thank you again for this lovely review. And, honestly, nobody's won the contest yet, so stop acting like I have. *eyeroll* :)
Fabulously done, what great mood! Excellent piece
Author's Response: Thanks very much! :)
As Glinda asks in "Wicked": Are people born Wicked? Or do they have Wickedness thrust upon them?
We know so very little about Bella, how she became the demented psychopath who killed her own niece. Perhaps you're right, perhaps she still had a few shards of humanity left.
In any case, well done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! And as much as I do still hate her, I do think Bellatrix still retains some pieces of humanity. Actually, I was originally going to end this story by sending her to her own personal hell -- no joke. But as I started writing it, I realized that that wasn't where I wanted to go. Anywho, thanks for the review. And *squee* for quoting Wicked! :D
OMg that made me cry, I am not even lying I actually cried. I never even thought about how Tonks was her niece. This was a really well written piece and it capture their personalities very well. I love Tonks and I HATE Bella but it is still nice to see the human side of her. 5 stars!!!!
Author's Response: Wow, a lot of people are crying over this, I'm not sure whether to feel pleased or happy. Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed this -- Bellatrix is very cruel, but she is still Tonks' aunt. Thanks for the review! :D
You made me well and truluy cry you are The best author since J.K Rowling herself
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much, that is truly high praise. I really doubt that my mediocre writing is the best however, there are many other talented authors that, I think, far pass me. It is still very nice of you to say that though! :)
Always a hope. Beautiful. Made me cry. Great job!!!!
Author's Response: Aww, I'm amazed you found it that touching. Thank you for this sweet review! :)
*sniff* good story, but i STILL HATE BELLATRIX!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: *giggles* You're not the only one who hates her, don't worry. She's always been one of my least favorite characters. But there has to be a *shred* of humanity in her, yeah? I hope the story showed at least that much. ;)Thanks for the review. :D
Wonderful. I loved this story so much, and for so many reasons. Your characterizations are spot-on, it takes Bellatrix the whole story to repent, and even Tonks is less than angelic. They exhibit such humanity -in Tonks's fear for Harry, and Bellatrix worry for her Lord...this is very impressive. Five stars!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much. When Jo announced that Bellatrix killed Tonks, I was shocked, to be honest. Yes, she's a sadistic psychopath, but that was her niece for Salazar's sake! I really wanted more info/closure on that, and, so, this story was born. :) Well anyway, thanks again for the nice review!
i love that!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I'm glad! :)
A truly beautiful peace of writing. It is by far the best piece I have read on Bellatrix showing remorse. I think you captured Bellatrix and Tonks's emotion perfectly. I hope you write something else soon.
Author's Response: Wow, what high praise, I'm a little shocked. Thank you so much, because I really did struggle a lot with Bellatrix's characterization in this piece. As for writing more, I do currently have other stories posted . . . ;) Anyhow, thank you again!