That was amazing. Even knowing what happens next, what she becomes, I wanted to run into the story and pull the knife away from her. I was actually glad that Voldemort stopped her.
Author's Response: Thanks so much.
Beautifully written, and gives new light to Bellatrix's decision and early life. I've never thought about her this way, with sympathy. It
has always been apathy, or worse, pity. Wonderful.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D *hugs Bella*
nice although i didnt really think of bella as the weepy type but i still love it
Author's Response: I think everyone is the weepy type at one time or another. Thanks for the review. :D
Wow. A very sad slternative to suicide but anything is better than offing yourself don't you agree?
Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
This one-shot really gets under your skin. You did a wonderful job of showing just how far some totured souls will go when they are ignored completely. Every person, I'm sure, has gone through a period like you show Bellatrix - wondering just how much their life matters on this earth.
The way you wrote this lonely girl was better than I have ever seen young Bellatrix. The way she assumes no one even cares enough to notice her is very gripping, to the point where we can feel horribly for one of the most hated characters throughout the series. Briefly, she wondered if there was anyone who would care. She wondered if there was one person in the world who would truly care if she froze to death. No one came to mind. This bit sent a tingle up my spine, for how many of us wondert who really does care about us out there?
Of course, she could just use her wand to end it all. That idea had been in her mind for years, but she never wanted to go through with it. A simple Killing Curse would make her death as quick and pointless as her life. This again reminds me of how much I myself have thought about just how mediocre my life feels at times. But then, I think of my plans for the future, and how much of an impact I might have. This goes for Bellatrix as well, and though she did not have a good impact on the world, it was a large one none the less.
Rushing down the stairs, she felt tears stinging her eyes for the first time. She fought them back. Tears would not get the best of her. This was what had to be done. There was no use crying about it. The bluntness of her thoughts is surprisingly good - perfect for what she thought would come. I have never felt more sympathy for Bellatrix than I did right here. Her mindset shows that what should be done will be done, even if it is the death of her.
All around, wonderful story. This shows a surprisingly refreshing side of Bellatrix, and you have a wonderful way of writing her. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Wow, this was a really interesting story...! I can only hope that you will add more chapters...Here are my favorite descriptions, and why. :)
That revelation did not sadden her. It was a simple fact. It was the way things had to be.
The bluntness of these sentences are poetic at the same time.
the peace of the grave.
Wow..you make death sound so poetic...apologize for describing your sentences with the same word, but it's totally true. :)
The dagger’s absence would be detected long before her own and mourned with more passion and honesty.
You really get a sense of the kind of relationship (or lack of) that Bellatrix has with her family. Really, really good!
I can only assume that this man who offers an opportunity is Lord Voldemort himself. YEAH!!! I'm a major Bellatrix/Voldy shipper, so excuse my disgusting excitement. :) I love this story so far...keep going!
The only criticism I have is to maintain Bellatrix as a strong, sadistic character...in this part, she is in despair...but please do not keep her like this for all of the story, because that would be OOC. However, her despair in this part is reasonable, don't get me wrong...anybody would be if they were attempting suicide, wouldn't they?
And I have to ask...was that dagger in any way inspired by the "silver knife" she used to kill Dobby in Deathly Hallows??
Author's Response: I'm sorry to say, there won't be anymore chapters. This was a one-shot. And no, the dagger was not inspired by the dagger used to kill Dobby. I never even thought of that, actually. Thanks for the review!
Your descriptions in this one shot are really good. It gave a mysterious edge to it. However, I think the ending was a little rushed. I don't want to tell you how to write your own fanfiction but I just thought everything was flowing really well and then there was just a sudden stop. Overall though, I totally enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
I liek this, but I din't expect Bellatrix to be so sad and emotianal I guess there was mroe to her than just hate and anger and evil
Author's Response: *hugs Bella* I think there is a lot more to her than that. Thanks for the review.
Recently I was wondering if I feel bad for Bellatrix because there must have been something that drove her to the person she became. I did pity Voldemort after all for his inability to love. After this I'm positive there was a reason, possibly like the one in your story, and I do feel sad that she chose that route to overcome it. You wrote this wonderfully.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I've always felt for Bella. I think there's a lot more to her than we got to see in the HP books. Thanks for leaving a review.
Creepy, but brilliant!
Author's Response: Thank you!