Reviewer: worse_than_death
Date: 10/24/07 18:57
Chapter: Resignation and Refusal

I like it so far. I'm really picky, so you must be good.

Author's Response: That means a lot to me! I only hope I can continue to satisfy you with my story and that you'll keep reading. :)

Reviewer: Misdemeanor1331
Date: 10/22/07 21:35
Chapter: Dreams of Dungeons

Ah, new story. Where to start, where to start?
The plot, perhaps. It's a very intriguing idea, to be sure. Draco's love for Hermione equaling Harry's death? I'm already anxious to see how you pull it together.

Your vocabulary, by the way, is stunning. "heinously impossible", "shrimp-like stature", and (taking a page from your reviews), my favorite line: "The scowl itself was not unusual, but there was a certain pensiveness in his cold grey eyes that would have been unnerving to anyone who knew the now sixteen-year-old boy well." Very JKR-esque, my friend. Very JKR-esque. :)

I liked the dream - lighthouses are awesome (both literally and symbolically) and it's interesting that the steak turned into Hermione. Interesting indeed...

Everyone seems in character so far (and Blaise all hyped up about someone who can turn into a puddle at will? what good would that do *anyone*, might I ask? hahaha).

One suggestion: break up your sentences a little more. You'd be surprised how much power a short sentence can have in the midst of a few long ones.

Aaaanyways, that's all for now. Good work so far - keep it up! :)

Author's Response: Haha, my beta reader said the same thing about my rather long sentences. =D I'll definitely keep that in mind. Blaise getting all hyped up about the Naturagus thing...well, it might pop in another time in the story. ;) Oh God I am saying too much...-.- Scratch all references to leaking details! xD Thanks for the review (which I asked for, being a little petty)!! :)

Reviewer: primagirl89
Date: 10/19/07 0:54
Chapter: Dreams of Dungeons

Sounds like a promising start. I like how you didn't jump in to all the details as well.

Author's Response: I'm glad you think I've made a promising start, and I hope you will continue to read further chapters! :) Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Suika07
Date: 10/18/07 14:08
Chapter: Dreams of Dungeons

this story is very intriguing so far. you've set it up well, an excellent first chapter!
i love your writing style and descriptions. its all done in a believable, easy to read but not over-the-top way. (if that makes any sense)
keep it up, i look forward to seeing where you will take this! i look forward to reading more. :)

Author's Response: Why thank you for your many compliments. :) "believable, easy to read" That's very important to me, so thanks a lot. I can only hope you'll like the coming chapters as much!

Reviewer: ginerva9
Date: 10/18/07 0:06
Chapter: Dreams of Dungeons

wow.......interesting. will be fun to read pls pls pls update soon!!!!!!!!!


Author's Response: Thanks for your support...! :) I'll add a new chapter ASAP.

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