Reviewer: Glittering_Pheonix
Date: 03/22/08 1:47
Chapter: Chapter 9- "Girls, We Have a Problem"

Haha, leave it to James to find a way into the girls' dormitory! :P
I really love this story! It is officially my favourite Mauraders era fanfiction ever.
James, Sirius, and Pettigrew seem absolutley in character! And I really like how you are portraying Lily, though I never really imagined her as much of a trouble maker, myself :) It fits well with the story, though!
I can't wait until the next chapter! :D

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you thought it was good and in character; before I submitted it I read it over and made a lot of changes that way, so I'm happy it worked!

Reviewer: harryandginnyrock
Date: 02/24/08 18:33
Chapter: Chapter 9- "Girls, We Have a Problem"

I like it alot. can u submit sum more chapters pleeeeeez!!!!!!! i luv it!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 12:28
Chapter: Chapter 9- "Girls, We Have a Problem"

Beware of those boys who can ride brooms...Another brilliant chapter.
Lily defends Snape, but yet can't stand him. It was a slow piece, but pretty cool...I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
God luck!

Author's Response: Not only can brooms be used to break into your dormitory, but they also make great blunt weapons! I thought that chapter was slow too, more of filler than anything really important. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 12:15
Chapter: Chapter 8- Discovery

I was about to mention the timing if the marauders finding out about Remus' lycanthropy too, but I figured it was all part of the chapter. As a writero f stories myself, I understand the continuality of a storiy's plotlines. You as the author, have the right to change a timeline ias you see fit. I have no problem with it and it's a brilliant story!

Author's Response: Yeah, it never really said in the books when they find out, only when they finally work out the Animagus thing. It does seem fast, I know, but I can't see the other marauders being fooled by some fake story every full moon. They're too good of friends.

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 12:06
Chapter: Chapter 7- Snape's Revenge

Hmmm, Pringle? Is he a professor or is he like Filch? Just curious.
All the best made plans go ary at some point.
It is kind of weird, to see Snape as Lily, but it was a nice try.
Great chapter, though, can't wait to read the next one!

Author's Response: It was mentioned (in GOF I think) that Apollyon Pringle was the old caretaker, before Filch came. A few other people have pointed that out. I didn't mean to cause confusion.

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 11:48
Chapter: Chapter 6- Lupin's Secret

I have no guacamole, but I do have a review...Great! You've mentioned Lupin's mysterious absentism and his battered appearence. I like Lupin, he seems like a kind soul in the story, and the one with a good head on his shoulders.
Shame on James and Sirus for being too nosy. I have no complaints about this chapter, I am quite pleased with it!

Author's Response: Thank you! This chapter is not one of my ultimate favorites, but I was reasonably pleased with it, and I'm glad you liked it! And Remus is awesome!!

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 11:39
Chapter: Chapter 5- The Dare

Excellent chapter! It seems the first year's coming to an end, and James has'nt gone out with Lily yet.
And now, Snape's in the picture. Oh well, I just ove the plotlines. I'm sure Lupin's 'furry little problem' will pop up soon.

Author's Response: Yup, I couldn't keep dear little Sev out, what kind of story would that make? Ha ha--James is so pathetic that it's rather funny.

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 11:26
Chapter: Chapter 4- Dear Diary #1

Well, nice try Potter!!! I think it's a brilliant idea to have James and Lily's diary entries as a part of the story.
And Sirius should keep his nose out of James' diary.
I know some readers will think the diaries are boring, I think you have the right idea.

Author's Response: I'm glad you think it's the right idea. They're absolute torture to write and they take me more than twice as long as normal chapters do, even though they're shorter. And James told me to tell you that it's a JOURNAL, thank you very much!

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 11:19
Chapter: Chapter 3- Honourary Marauder

Geez! these are 11 year olds and already James is flirting with LilY???
Getting a jump start I guess.
At least Lily has the good sense to turn him down.
As for Lily being a Marauder, it sounds interesting and fun, but I bet she shies away from the pranks, or some of them anyway.
Great chapter, kind of short in my opinion, but it was fun!

Author's Response: I guess James is just getting his hormones pretty darn early! And Lily doesn't entirely lose her morals; she only really enjoys pranking when it's relatively harmless and the victim did something to her or one of her friends.

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/19/08 11:12
Chapter: Chapter 2- The Road to Hogwarts

Very cute chapter. All of them in Gryffindor, even Sirius. And Lily's fitting in nicely.


Author's Response: Thank you! I try to satisfy (rhyme not intentional).

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 01/19/08 9:50
Chapter: Chapter 9- "Girls, We Have a Problem"

lol. that's so funny, the ending. i loved this chapter. keep writing, and update soon!!!!

Author's Response: thanks! I'll try to.

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 01/18/08 19:54
Chapter: Chapter 1- The Letter

Cool!!! Great beginning to a great story! The excitement in each of them, the anticipation. Already Sirius is planning to party his brains out, at 11 years old, with his pal James.
Two rebels to be dealt with I'm sure...

Author's Response: Oh yes. The teachers at Hogwarts won't know what hit them!

Reviewer: Marvalo Gaunt
Date: 01/17/08 14:16
Chapter: Chapter 9- "Girls, We Have a Problem"

you've got to make another chapter!! you've got me completely hooked! and i like the ending of chapter 9 great idea...

Author's Response: *evil chuckle* Another reader is drawn into my trap... ANYWAY Thanks!

Reviewer: Minna_Black
Date: 01/16/08 19:37
Chapter: Chapter 9- "Girls, We Have a Problem"

WRITE ANOTHER CHAPPIE PLEASE UR STORY IS REALLY REALLY GOOD! * STRESS ON THE REALLY*

Author's Response: Thanks! You're a great reviewer! Stress on the great!

Reviewer: Minna_Black
Date: 01/16/08 18:40
Chapter: Chapter 6- Lupin's Secret

YAY! I LOVE THE FACT U ADDED GARGOYLES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! U WRITE FANTSASTICALLY!
p.s. come read my story when it's out of the mod. please.

Author's Response: You sure use exclamation points liberally! there are starving people in China! LOL Thanks! I'll be sure to check out your story.

Reviewer: Splatteh
Date: 12/07/07 3:02
Chapter: Chapter 8- Discovery

Very creative and nice! I love it!

Only it ended all too quickly for my liking!

thus update soon ;d

Author's Response: Okay, glad you like it! Just so you all know, this will not be ending anytime soon. I'm going all the way through their years at Hogwarts and after too.

Reviewer: ilysirius_4
Date: 12/06/07 6:02
Chapter: Chapter 6- Lupin's Secret

i like the story but its all completely wrong....like james and sirius meet on the train not before... and lily hates james and she is bestfriends with snape and this stuuf does no happen to 11 year olds they should be like 14 in this story

Author's Response: No offense, but you're wrong too. If I want to have James and Sirius have met before the train, I can do that. And I put up the "Book Seven Disregarded" warning for the lily/snape thing. Don't make the mistake of treating other fanfiction like it's canon, even if everyone else does it.

Author's Response: Just looking back on it, that response was kind of rude. Well, algebra sucks. As do Mondays.

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 12/05/07 14:47
Chapter: Chapter 8- Discovery

eh. it was a little too fast for my liking. they shouldnt have thought of it that fast, let alone the animagus thing too! i still love ur story, keep writing!!!!

Author's Response: They don't immediately act on it, they sorta regard it as one of Sirius' more out-there ideas for awhile. It's not like they get everything they need in first year, and then they just inexplicably wait until 5th for the sake of canon. good review, thanks! :)

Reviewer: giftedmessenger
Date: 12/05/07 7:14
Chapter: Chapter 8- Discovery

another excellent chapter! I cant wait to read more. I look forward to seeing what happens next. Plz keep writing and ill keep checking bk. May grace b with u.

Author's Response: yay! a new reviewer! I think it's sorta in second year that the plot picks up and everything, but glad to hear you like it! grace be with you also!

Reviewer: JmIliana
Date: 11/22/07 15:03
Chapter: Chapter 7- Snape's Revenge

Hello! Just dropping by. Nice chapter. I like this chapter especially the ending. I really liked how you had Lily stand up in class and that part. But it's somewhat weird if they are still in first year to be like kissing and stuff don't you think?
Loved the last part.
“See you ‘round, Snivelly. Or rather not,” he added as an afterthought. He walked out of the room, careful to leave the door open. Why not make things easier for Pringle, the dear man, he thought sarcastically This was a very good part in my opinion it was funny.
One suggestion though, I think (yeah, this is my opinion as well) that you should place 'Snape' as 'Severus'.
One question: Whose point of view is this? (The last part) Severus's or James's?
Other than that, Great Chappie!
~JmIliana

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