WRITE MORE!!! The best part is how the format is understandable which doesn't happen alot.
okay that was great. :]
i totally loved it andits realness.
if that is even a word.
that made me all happy.
Well, hello. I figured since this was here, it was about time I reviewed it. So here I am.
I love the idea of a comforter. I'm freezing at the moment, and your opening lines radiate warmth.
Something I've recently learned (it's a common error) is that all two-word adjectives are hyphenated. You need to say 'living-room sofa' because living room describes the sofa.
The simple note from Ron, "Malfoy has been released," is a marvelously crafty way to introduce your topic. What's Ginny's relationship with him? Why is Ron telling her he's free? Where was he being held captive? I love stories that inspire me to wonder things like this.
The next section answers a few questions and provides the reader with an interesting passel of mixed feelings: the hope of the future, the abandonment of the past.
When the two meet in Diagon Alley, it seems like you're giving us that hopeful tone again, but at the same time the fact that the two haven't seen each other since Draco's release is saddening. I love the conflicts you're using, however subtle. They work quite well with the relationship.
As though sensed her stare, Draco turned and met Ginny’s gaze.
Just a typo there. You need 'he sensed' or 'sensing' instead of just 'sensed.'
Everyone had been proven right. Still he stayed....
Oh, look at that, the conflict again! It's starting to become clearer that neither Draco nor Ginny knows why their relationship is the way it is. It's as though the reader, knowing little, discovers it as they remember. You did a good job with that, my dear.
You know, you really captured the bitterness part of the prompt in their meeting at the end, but the underlying tension is much deeper than that. It almost goes as far as being bittersweet, the frustration and love that never really wore out. Of course, it makes me happy to know their divorce was a misunderstanding, and that they're now butting heads continuously, as ever. I really like the way you have Draco and Ginny themselves lead the reader to your conclusion, and simply end with dialogue. Where I tend to whack my readers on the head with philosophical conclusions, you simply make it evident what happens without actually saying so. I admire it. So much.
And I clearly enjoyed this. Thank you endlessly for this lovely little story.
Author's Response: I love your reviews. Thank you so much for your feedback and constructive criticism. I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
Very well done, though it could do with a good introduction.
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Aw, that was cute.
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The thing I liked best about this fic is your characterization of Draco and Ginny. They bith sound very realistic and I really liked how you made Draco's real character come through when he was mad at Ginny.=Sammy
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