You almost have to feel sorry for Severus, except he's causing all of his own problems. At least he's honest with himself about wanting power. Anne is such a sweetie. I can't wait to see how this story evolves. Great chapter.
When you said the Potters might be complacent did you mean they might have let James and Lily have a bit of freedom on purpose? I hope they used protective charms:D It's too bad Severus isn't giving Anne's reactions more than a passing thought. He thinks he knows better. Great chapter.
My favorite part was Wormtail riding around in Prongs' antlers. The thought of them all running through Hogsmeade is adorable and hilarious. Sirius was trying to be so cool telling Remus he had the wolf under control. Great chapter.
That's horrible. Kind of funny but horrible to think what Remus put up with trying to stay away from a relationship. You really have to feel sorry for the guy. And how rude of Alexandra. Great chapter though.
That was a lovely toast. I would think that Severus would be giving his actions a second thought after Anne gave her opinion. I suppose he's just being stubborn and it will lead him down the wrong path. The Halloween costumes sound cute. I can imagine Sirius in a tux. I love the toast. Great chapter.
Poor Severus--he's as protective of Anne as she is of him. Very brave of Sirius to go into the Slytherin common room. He could've been severely hexed for that. I was surprised they were snogging to that extent in an enemy area. Great chapter.
One of the things I like about your chapters is that they're short and to the point. A lot of times when I'm reading fan fiction I don't have time to read a chapter that's 6,000 to 8,000 words. Of even higher priority to me is that your chapters are well written. Poor Severus--he lost out all the way around. Great chapter.
You'd think that if Sirius wanted Anne back that much, he'd give up his issues with Severus. I thought for a moment that Remus was going to ask Anne out. It seemed like a good thing to do since she knew what he was but hadn't said anything. Great chapter.
Aww, that was sweet. I can just imagine James and Sirius suggesting that Lily just stay in James' room during her visit. What were they thinking:D Aren't wizarding families a bit more conservative? I think Anne and Severus are slowly drifting apart. Sad, but it happens. We all grow up and sometimes apart. Great chapter.
Wow--that was like a tornado hitting and then twirling off, never to be seen again. And wow, you've explained why James and Lily didn't date for so long. To keep Severus quiet, James had to promise not to date her. Great chapter.
I love your interpretation on this incident. How Remus wasn't let in on what was going on; how Sirius didn't really care but just wanted Severus out of the way; how Peter didn't want to be involved but just went along with the group; and, most importantly, how and why James got involved in stopping Snape and saving his life. Great chapter.
That is an odd relationship between a Slytherin and a Gryffindor. It's interesting to get an inside look at one of Sirius' relationships. We're always told that he was quite the ladies' man and handsome but JKR left a lot of space for the rest of us to fantasize about. Great chapter.
If someone brought me breakfast on my birthday I would think that was enough of a gift. I live with five dogs. They'd probably eat the breakfast before they brought it in. I can feel Severus' excitement at hanging out with the older guys. He's trying hard to fit in but with the wrong people. Great chapter.
I'm not sure if Severus is out of the woods yet. There's something about "I care about you" and "I care about you too" that could be construed as a statement of friendship rather than romance. Great chapter. You make me want to keep reading and reading although I have many othe things to do.
Aw, that was really sweet. I thought she was going to get mad at Sirius when he said "Snivellus" but I'm glad she didn't. Now I'm real curious to see if their companionship continues. Are you going to tell us how Peter's data went? Great chapter.
Anne was so cool. I'm glad she said yes to going to Hogsmeade with Sirius. I kind of expected her to say no and for Lily to say yes. I loved your description of the three animagi after they'd transformed. Whenever I read about Snuffles it reminds me of my Newfoundland, Mecca. He's big and furry and likes to communicate with people by giving them nice licks--not drooly ones but nice ones. It makes me laugh. Great chapter.
I'll bet James never ever had a clue that the Mauraders' Map would some day fall into his son's hands. Peter doesn't have much time to perfect his transformation techniques. I like this version of how they developed the Map. Great chapter.
Maybe Severus would've had a very different life if he really did have a cousin to cheer him up and defend him all the time. I wonder if it is an omen that Anne was sorted into Slytherin. She may be going somewhere but it might not be somewhere good. Great chapter.
What a great chapter. I think Peter's in for another disappointment when he finds out he can only turn into a rat. I guess that's something but since it's such a difficult bit of magic you'd think he'd do a little better:D Anyway, I really loved this chapter. I think it's one of the best so far in this story.
I loved the discussion over whether the three boys should become Animagi. I guess Sirius wasn't very clear about what he was getting at. I chuckled thinking about a poodle or McGogagall as a cat keeping Remus company. Great chapter.