Reviews For Ashes
Reviewer: solemnlyswear_x
Date: 11/15/07 19:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, the ending was a surprise. I wasn't sure who was telling the story. Anyway, I really liked this. It was very different and original, and some of the lines were just so chilling. The bit about the bird being caught was - I don't know if lovely is the right word - haunting or fitting, I think. Great job.

Author's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to respond! I'm glad you were surprised by the ending -- I was sort of going for the shock factor. I'm not quite sure where the idea came from for this story, but I was feeling sort of down when I wrote it -- looking back, it seems very dark. Glad you liked it! ~Nadia

Reviewer: emmaholloway
Date: 09/10/07 14:47
Chapter: Chapter 1

I thought thats what it was. That was really good. The structure with the short sentances made it feel really... kinda creepy. I just cant think of the right word. Like it made the hairs on your skin stand on end. Kind of chilling.
I think it would have been interesting to have left the last line out. It would have added to the mystery and make the reader think and pick out who the narrator is.
emma x x x

Author's Response: Thanks! I 'm glad you thought it was creepy, that was kind of the feel I was going for. Oh, and I'm glad someone appriciates my incurably short sentances! ~Elizabeth

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