This was really good. I really liked how you wrote in the part when Remus got bitten, it was really vivid. Only one mistake: you spelled 'afraid' wrong in the summary. Other than that, good job!
Excellent work! Very poignant!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks very much! xx
Poor Remus. I always feel alot of sympathy towards him. Interesting story.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it xx