Reviews For The Cause
Reviewer: jenny b
Date: 01/18/08 21:30
Chapter: The King of Diamonds

The chapter title was very interesting. It caught my eye before the chapter had even been validated, and made me keep checking back to see when it would be up!

I love the interviews. They always make me crack up laughing. Usually I would point out my favourite line in it, but they all made me laugh, so I canít. :] Youíre wonderful at writing humour, though. You always manage to capture the characters funny sides without making them OOC, which can be hard.

Marty cleaning the window was great. She doesnít want to seem rude, so she cleans the windows. She couldnít do the dishes like anyone else would, could she? She has to clean the windows. I love Marty. Sheís so Ö unpredictable.

Iím just some random waif they pretty much found on the streets.

I loved that. I think if it was anyone other than Marty they found, it would be weird. But itís her, so itís different. :]

ďJames giggles from down on the floor.

I think giggling sounds a bit too girly for a teenage boy. I donít think they really giggle. They laugh and chuckle and snicker, but I donít think giggling sounds quite right.

Marty seemed a lot different in this chapter. I donít know whether itís because of her mum dying, or getting away from her aunt, or making new friends, but she does seem a bit different. Sheís almost becoming a normal person!

I really loved this chapter. Long ones are great. I canít wait for the next one!

Jennifer


Author's Response: Thanks! Marty is changing, but don't worry, because she'll still be herself ... and I'm really glad you like her that way! You're probably right about the giggling thing ... I've been brainwashed by my own male friends, who are sometimes a little more effeminate than your average teenage guy. Thanks for reviewing, anyway, I always look forward to yours!

Reviewer: shewolf2000
Date: 01/18/08 16:31
Chapter: The King of Diamonds

Great chapter! My favorite line was, "Oooh, tingly" I laughed a lot at that. And I totally agree with Remus that his mother's "meticulous organisation skills" are rather cursed. He should probably find a better place to keep those books...

Anyway, loved the chapter. Things are most definitely looking up. I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Yes ... or maybe just distribute them evenly so they're not quite so obvious ... who knows? Thanks for reviewing, I'll try and update soon!

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 01/18/08 16:16
Chapter: The King of Diamonds

Wonderful, wonderful chapter. I really love how Marty's hanging out with them. its cool. i laughed a couple of times, but mostly i just enjoyed the happy chapter. keep writing and update soon!!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! A happy chapter was long overdue, I think, so hooray!

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 01/18/08 15:27
Chapter: The King of Diamonds

Wow! This was amazing chapter. Unfotunately I have to leave a quickie review because I'm in a rush, but this was such a nice read. It's good to see Marty making friends, and Remus's nervousness. You've got yourself an un-cliched Marauder story here, my friend. *claps*
~Padfoot

Author's Response: Wow, thanks, that's getting harder and harder to do ... I'm glad you enjoyed it, and hey - any review is a good review, quickie or not!

Reviewer: shewolf2000
Date: 01/13/08 15:40
Chapter: Pastimes

I love this story! I was worried Marty might be annoying when I read your summary, but she's not at all. She's one of the best OCs I've read about, actually. She reminds me a little of Luna (like when she states openly that she has no friends), but she really is a one of a kind character. And yes, she is a stalker, but it's in a funny way and not a creepy way. I look forward to seeing where this story goes. I'd tell you to update soon, but it seems you already have and we're just waiting on the mods. Anyway, fantastic story!

Author's Response: Thanks, what a great review! Totally what I wanted to acheive with Marty, so that's good news. Thanks so much for reviewing, and let's hope it gets accepted soon! Although I think there are some problems at the minute so we might have to wait a bit longer than usual ...

Reviewer: Dreameth
Date: 01/05/08 16:08
Chapter: Pastimes

Great story! I love Marty, she's a wonderful character. So Marty-ish. Update soon, and keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll definitely try!

Reviewer: Osced
Date: 12/30/07 13:05
Chapter: Pastimes

Funny chapter, Remus and Marty alone, interesting, keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Interesting indeed ... thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: LunaTheLoony
Date: 12/26/07 11:15
Chapter: Pastimes

I love this story. It's such a good one.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much!

Reviewer: jenny b
Date: 12/25/07 21:17
Chapter: Pastimes

Aww! That was such a great chapter. Iím glad it was a happy chapter, because I think Iíll cry if you make any more sad ones. And itís Christmas! You canít have sad chapters. Merry Christmas, by the way! :]

Iím so happy that Marty is beginning to make friends.

Is there a word that can sum up Marty Priceís persona? I donít think so.

I loved that line! Itís so true for Marty. Sheís such a great character.

This isnít a very good review, but itís Christmas! Yay!

Jennifer


Author's Response: Merry Christmas to you too! You're right, it would have been HORRIBLE of me to put out a sad chapter right before Christmas, so it's good that the timing worked out that way ... thanks for reviewing, as always! I'll try and update as soon as I can in the new year. =D

Reviewer: Idiot of ravenclaw
Date: 12/23/07 22:51
Chapter: Pastimes

aaawww
i love marty i think sahe is a better tonks than tonks, hehehe i still cant get over crying into his shoulder i think that is one of the cutest things, you should read this book called twilight it is soooo goood, again love the story

Author's Response: Yeah, I've heard, but I'm not really looking for anything too dark at the minute, I'd rather read something a bit more ... uh ... fun. Than, like, vampires. Anyway, glad you like Marty, although I still like Tonks, too.

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 12/23/07 9:38
Chapter: Pastimes

ďItís not that surprising. Itís not like I have any proper friends who would care enough to write, is it?Ē

Ouch! There goes Marty, saying the uncomfortable truth that nobuddy wants to hear. i think that's why so many people thought she was Luna's mum.

"And somehow ó through divine providence, surely ó the Marauders all begin to laugh along with me."

Aww! She's starting to be friends with them! Yaay!

Yes, the story's making sense! And I love it. It's adorable! But why was Remus so awkward? is it cuz of his condition?

Can't wait for the next chappie! And Merry Christmas!
~Padfoot >.

Author's Response: Wow, Merry Christmas to you, too! Yes, I can see why there are a lot of parallells to Luna, but can you really imagine Marty with Xenophilius? Because ... o.0. Remus is probably awkward because of his condition, yes, as he doesn't like the thought of someone he doesn't really know properly get too close, and find out. Also he's just more naturally reserved. But don't worry, because I'm sure once he gets to know her better ... well. =)

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 12/23/07 9:31
Chapter: Pastimes

My God Remus has to be the sweetest and most awesmomest character ever. And Marty is sweet too. There really aren't any words to describe her. i love this story, please update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll have to wait for the queues to open first, though ... Merry Christmas!

Reviewer: Idiot of ravenclaw
Date: 12/15/07 13:53
Chapter: Hide-And-Seek

i hate my email it never told me the story updated, YAY SHEW CRIED INTO HIS SHOULDER thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! see i toldyou it would be cute


Author's Response: =D Well, I knew it all along, so there! =P Kidding. I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: emmie4is
Date: 12/14/07 23:24
Chapter: Hide-And-Seek

Sweet how Marty throws her arms around Remus! Bet he is a little surprised. Sirius's letter was very entertaining, funny how he kept mentioning his mother. Please update soon! :D

Author's Response: Thanks, I think "a little surprised" does JUST about cover it ... =D Glad you liked the letter, too!

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 12/14/07 15:37
Chapter: Hide-And-Seek

Awwwwwwwww, some Marty/ Remus! They make such a nice couple, even if I do love Remus/Tonks.

I like the Marauders' letter. It was very in-character, and I aplaud you on that. *claps*

The cards reminded me of DH when the stuff is written on the plaque in Godric's Hollow. Did you get the idea from that?

This was a good chapter. Can't wait for the next one!

~Padfoot


Author's Response: Actually, I sort of got the idea from when Princess Diana died, and the road was covered with flowers and messages and stuff; only of course, Princess Diana's was a little more extreme than Marty's mum, but it was that sort of thing (after all, they were both mothers who died too young and wanted to make the world a better place). I'm glad you liked the chapter. Thanks for reviewing. I think I just depressed myself ...

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 12/14/07 15:36
Chapter: Hide-And-Seek

Awwwwwwwww, some Marty/ Remus! They make such a nice couple, even if I do love Remus/Tonks.

I like the Marauders' letter. It was very in-character, and I aplaud you on that. *claps*

The cards reminded me of DH when the stuff is written on the plaque in Godric's Hollow. Did you get the idea from that?

This was a good chapter. Can't wait for the next one!

~Padfoot


Author's Response: Actually, I sort of got the idea from when Princess Diana died, and the road was covered with flowers and messages and stuff; only of course, Princess Diana's was a little more extreme than Marty's mum, but it was that sort of thing (after all, they were both mothers who died too young and wanted to make the world a better place). I'm glad you liked the chapter. Thanks for reviewing. I think I just depressed myself ...

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 12/13/07 18:27
Chapter: Hide-And-Seek

Poor, poor Marty. I love this story, please update soon!

Peter looks appalled at the mere memories. ďGone, at last. If Iím ever asked how old I am again, Iím joining the Death Eaters. Same goes for whether I have a girlfriend, and any statement referring to how much Iíve grown. So, whatís the plan for the day?Ē
So like relatives....

The subject of the latest attack is forgotten about until much later when we are sitting on the grass in the garden, after a rather unusual game of hide-and-seek. Donít ask how we ended up playing that particular game, because Iím not sure anyone could give a sufficient answer. All I know is that weíre now all looking a little worse for wear, after hiding in various bushes, spidery outhouses and, in Siriusís case, quite a deep pond. In fact, I think there may still be a frog in his hair. Naturally, when told to hide somewhere harder to find than behind a bush, he presumed this meant underwater. I donít want to think about how he managed to breath. One would hope with some kind of straw.
Hahahaha

I stand up, and just as Iím about to go back into the house, Sirius calls, ďAnd Moony? Get a towel, too, wonít you?Ē
LOL

ďUh, this is James, if you were wondering. Sorry about the handwriting. I was really sorry to hear about what happened, too, I used to love that tea shop. My Mum would take me when I was a kid and buy me some pumpkin juice. I know she liked your relatives, sheíd always have a small chat with them, but everyone loved them, as far as I can tell, although you probably know that, itís just that it feels so awful for me to think about what happened, because they didnít deserve it at all, and this sentence has gone on far too long already, but Iím nervous, you see, and have a tendency to ramble, and now I canít seem to stop, even though Iím not saying anything thatís very important at all, I just donít know what else to say, and once you finish one sentence, you have to start another, with a new topic, and I canít think of any other topic right now apart from how very sorry I am about what happened to your family. I just counted the words in that sentence. There were one-hundred and thirty-five. I think I broke some kind of international record. What did Remus say to write about?
Typical James...

Thereís no way I should have said what I did, it was mean horrid nasty Moony says I should put ďdespicableĒ not a good thing to say to you.

ďI apologise for the utter shambles that this letter has turned out to be.

Hahahahahaha

I try not to think about why the Marauders were playing hide-and-seek, particularly when it involved hiding in a pond
Only the Marauders....

Before I know what Iím doing, I have leapt at him, thrown my arms around his neck, buried my head in his shoulder, and burst into tears. Poor Marty, yet so romantic. *marty and remus sitting in a tree*

UPDATE!!!

Author's Response: =D Thanks for your thoughts, I'm glad you seem to be enjoying it!

Reviewer: LunaTheLoony
Date: 12/13/07 18:16
Chapter: Hide-And-Seek

This is the best Marty one yet! You are my favorite writter on Mugglenet!

Author's Response: Really?? Wow! Thanks so much, that's such a wonderful thing to say! Thank you. Really. My horrible day just got a little bit brighter. =)

Reviewer: jenny b
Date: 12/13/07 17:50
Chapter: Hide-And-Seek

What a great chapter!

I loved the beginning with the Marauders. Sirius hiding in a pond? Youíve gotta love him. :]

The letter to Marty was really sweet, and you characterised their different personalities really well. Jamesí long sentence made me laugh so much. Itís probably longer than this review!

Youíre really making me feel sorry for Marty. Itís always sad when strong-willed people like her break down. I hope I can trust you when you say it gets happier, because this is about the third chapter in a row where Iíve almost cried!

I adore this story. Itís definitely one of your best. But not many people seem to read it. :[ They donít know what theyíre missing out on!

Jennifer


Author's Response: Ah, why would I worry about that, when I have you guys? =D Hopefully next chapter I won't make you cry! I feel so horrible, but I promise things will look up. Thanks so much for reviewing, as always, and I'm glad you think this is one of my best, because hey, that means I'm improving still!

Reviewer: Osced
Date: 12/01/07 13:16
Chapter: Trendsetters

Great Chapter, so funny with the petition....

Author's Response: Thanks!

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