pretty good line about the trendsetters thing...overall an awesome chapter...!!
I like how Marty is all weird and sort of casual-observer-type uninvolved person, kind of like me =D
i recognized the fantastic beasts reference she was hilarios
Author's Response: Was there a Fantastic Beasts reference? This story feels so old now, I don't remember a lot of smaller details like that! But I would like to take the opportunity to thank you so much for reading and reviewing, it means so much that people are still taking the time! I am glad you seemed to enjoy it. :)
is marty luna's mum she seems to have the same sort of personality and one of her "causes" could be one of the projects Luna's mum died doing
Author's Response: People do always ask me this, but the answer is no - although I can see why you would think that! I just think Hogwarts is the kind of place that attracts misfits and the particularly nutty. :D What happens to Marty has actually been published now in the sequel I said I wouldn't write, called 'The Final Cause' - if you're interested you should be able to find it somewhere, but I warn you it was written two years later and it's a very different style! :)
aww I love her. I would totally join the cause. We would be cause buddies!!!
Author's Response: :D Thank you! I love her too, I sure she would be happy to have some helping hands! :D
did you know this story was one of the top favorite stories on facebook? this is hilarious :) i have a feeling remus and marty have a blooming romance!!!
Author's Response: I didn't know that at all, where is this fabulous information? I feel so honoured! *Blushes*
great story :) loved it. The relationship between james and luanne is hilarious and brilliant
Author's Response: Ha, I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the review! :D
Author's Response: I'm sorry!
:O marty is so much like luna and i
Author's Response: :D There are definitely some Luna similarities, I know!
Ok, so I already left a review but now I feel like I should give a more in-depth one now that I'm done with the story.
First off, great job! You're a wonderful, wonderful writer. At times the story was hilarious, other times depressing. Your take on all of the characters is original, but still true to the few traits JK Rowling has provided us with.
Well, honestly I have to say that I liked the exchanges between James and Luanne the best. If you ever come back to writing fanfics, you need to have something about them in there. I swear, whenever I need to laugh I'll just find the chapter with James and Keith Robertson in it and read it.
I also really liked how Marty developed as a character. You could slowly see how she was coming out of her shell, and becoming more comfortable with herself and the Marauders. (Remus's thing about the pumpkin juice was hilarious).
Again, amazing job! ~Olivia
Author's Response: Again, thank you for a brilliant review! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story and everything I was trying to do with it, always makes a writer happy! =) Coincidentally, you may be interested to know that I am currently posting a short sequel to this fic, the first chapter of which was put up last week - so if you want to read more, then that is currently happening! You'll be unique in that most people read this when it came out a couple of years ago, so I hope you enjoy it (if you decide to read it of course). Thanks again for a great review!
Wonderful story!! My favorite parts of this chapter would have to be "It's called pride. We all have a little too much of it." For some reason, I just really liked that line. And then, of course "Pie good." was a winner as well. I like Marty. She's a little creeperish, but she has an interesting character. I also like your take on Remus, he's very original. I like how Marty is discovering the more negative parts of the marauders now. Good job! ~Olivia :)
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoyed it! I like Marty a lot too, out of all my original characters she has definitely remained one of my favourites. =)
I read this all in one go -- it was brilliant! A really, really well written fic.
In general, I "hmm" at fics with OCs as main characters, but not this time! Marty was so likeable, what with her way of speaking the truth, however awkward it might have been. Having her as a stalkerish girl with a clipboard who simply wanted to make a difference was such a sweet, sweet thing.
Remus was also portrayed nicely, too. No longer a bookworm with a chocolate fetish, eh? One of my favourite things about your Remus was when he didn't stop James and Sirius being arseholes to Snape -- the way you wrote it was canon to the letter.
James was great. Him as the 'father figure' to Luanne was hilarious. Also liked your Peter, mainly because he existed -- you didn't cut him out like so many authors do. Sirius was good too, but I think there was a splash of OOCness when he arrived at the Potters, just because I see him as the person who would tell the others what had happened, but try to pass it off as casual. Maybe I'm just swayed by too much fanfiction. You can ignore that comment :P
Lily was great, and, as a huge L/J shipper, I liked watching her relationship with James develop. I would love to read a sequel about Marty trying to get the two together, but, reading the comments below, I see you've told others that won't be happening *sigh*
As a Ravenclaw of the Beta Boards, I totally got the turnips joke! Turnips forever, eh?
Speaking of the Beta Boards, I read this fic because Equinox Chick recommended it in the Marauder Era Recommendations. Kudos to her!
This was so, so well done! Pussycat123, my dear, you will go far.
Before I finish this ridiculously long review, I'm just wondering: what happens, in the end, to Remus/Marty? Please, please, please don't say Marty dies, or anything!
Author's Response: Aw, this is such a beautifully heart-warming review, thank you so much, really - you picked up on so many of the things I was trying to achieve, which always makes me happy, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Now, as for sequels and what happens next... the truth is I HAVE actually written something, set after they leave Hogwarts, but I've been unsure about putting it up for several reasons - it's been a long time since I wrote this, so I always imagined that a lot of people had moved on, and it's also very different in tone and style, which does make me unsure of how people will respond. But it's there, waiting, and your review has actually encouraged me to just go for it - so maybe keep your eyes peeled and something might turn up?
I stumbled upon this little gem and fell in love. While the plot lagged at times the entire 'tale' was quite enjoyable.
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for reviewing! :)
I'm re-reading - and liking it just as much the second time round - and my curiosity has gotten the better of me: what was the "obscure Ravenclaw reference"?
To make this a less pointless review, can I just say again how much I love your characterizations in this? I love love Marty (and purely because of my own tendency to look for Luna's mum in Marauder fics, I've been wondering if the reason she isn't in Remus' life later because she up and married Xeno Lovegood). That last bit actually is to the point, because part of the reason I love Marty is that she's just such a Hogwarts person. Does that make any sense at all? She's the crazy girl, but she's Hogwarts crazy.
Also I love how you showed here Remus' trouble with stopping his friends from some of their crueler moments...and the fact that the boys can be cruel, which is something you don't see In a lot of Marauder fics but which canon tells us was true of them at times.
Also, I really feel bad for Marty here. She really is a girl who's not used to friendship - I love that she doesn't really get why the making up thing is hard for them, because she generally has not been in that kind of situation. But then you see that just because she's used not having it doesn't mean she doesn't need it.
Author's Response: Ah - the obscure Ravenclaw reference is because on the MNFF forums, Ravenclaws (of which I was one at the time, and I suppose still am, though I haven't been on in a very long time) referred to themselves as "turnips". And Marty found a turnip when tidying up the Common Room. That's all - like I said, obscure. :) Many people have asked if Marty is Luna's mum, and while this would be good, I'm afraid the answer is no, she's not. You explained it perfectly though - she's Hogwarts crazy. Hogwarts attracts characters who are a bit loopy, and I'm sure Luna's mum was one of those people. Having said that, Marty and Luna would have got on brilliantly though, had they gone to school at the same time! Thank you for your comments about characterisation too - it's one of my favourite parts of writing, so I'm always so glad when people pick up on it, and it seems like you understand what I was trying to do perfectly! =)
I have now read about three of your stories in a row (not all at once mind...I did sleep at least once in there, and eat several times...) and I have come to the conclusion that I freaking love you. xD
This story in particular was just really really good. You have the Marauders down pat. They aren't cliche - even Peter is definitely a Marauder, while still remaining Peter, dunno how to describe it...basically he's not completely stupid and wimpy? And of course I spent most of the story laughing like a hyena. And I love the OCs! Especially Marty, of course. She's wacky and new and awesome, without being...well, too OC-ish, if you know what I mean. She fits at Hogwarts. More than that, I just love her and her Causes and her family and her weirdness. And Luanne. Because I love Luanne and James's weirdo father/daughter relationship.
I could go on and on with awesome stuff about this...but I won't because you know about it already. Just know that seriously, everything about this story rocked.
Not a very coherent/professional review, but there you go. I love it. It's now on my favorites list. (Which like, rarely rarely happens because with most stories I just can't be bothered to stick them on there).
Anyway. Weird rambling review over with. Bye. =)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! And hey, I thought it was an awesome review, not weird or incoherent at all, it really made me smile! I'm so glad you like my writing, particularly this fic as it's one of my favourites too! :) And also the characters - writing and developing them has always been the best bit about writing for me, so I'm always so happy when it pays off! Basically, thank you - I'm really glad you liked it. =)
Just wow. Your writing skills are amazing. I really loved this. It's one of my favourites. I'm probably going to read it again. Anyway, I'm not really reviewing now so I'll stop blathering.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you, and hey - I don't mind blathering. :) I'm really pleased you enjoyed it, I hope it's as good the second time around!
i was sad when i read this (not the story it was great!) your authors note. you are my favorite author on here and i wanted to let you know that. i'm working on my first story and you're kinda an insperation for me. which is kinda weird since i don't know you. anyway, thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, that's one of the nicest reviews I've ever had! :) Good luck with your story, I hope you do well - the important thing is to just keep going! :D And you never know, one day I might come back and post something else ...
Im reading this for the third time, but I didnt have an account before so now I can review!
This is one of my favourite chapters. I really like how Remus noticed that Marty was looking at them and then you switched to her POV.
i have to go so Ill review the rest later.
Author's Response: Well wahey, first of all welcome to MNFF as an official member! Secondly, thank you very much for the support, I'm so glad you like this fic. I hope you have fun re-reading ... =)
this chapter was fun to read, remus eating a girls face off, lol
Author's Response: It was fun to write too ... I hope you enjoy the rest!