Reviews For In Black and White
Reviewer: ink_daughter
Date: 06/07/08 11:22
Chapter: Prologue: At What Cost Comes Victory?

This was a very sad, yet beautifully written story that reminds me of real-life situations where people get so depressed about life that they just leave it behind.
I agree with Ghoul In Pajamas- where is Ron and Hermione? Did they die, too?
I'm looking forward to more written by you!

Reviewer: Merlynne
Date: 02/28/08 8:19
Chapter: Prologue: At What Cost Comes Victory?

First of all, I have to congratulate you on so perfectly interweaving the poem at the start with the actual themes in the story. So many people start with a poem that relates very little to the story, or they donít put in the effort to make it fit as well as it could. Youíve accomplished this brilliantly. Itís a beautiful poem, and your story more than does it justice.

The story is very well structured, and your planning is evident. I love the balance youíve struck between rhythm and detail. You manage to put in a short action scene without taking away from the somber, somewhat dark tone of the piece. I enjoyed particularly your descriptions of Ginnyís funeral. The reds and golds you describe on the surroundings made me think of not only Gryffindor house, but of Ginnyís hair. Itís fitting that her funeral day should reflect her a little.

I found phrase, ďGinny died before she hit the ground,Ē a little blunt. I completely respect your to the point writing style (rather than getting lost dithering in the little thigns) but I would have loved a few more details during this bit. Since it keeps with the pace, itís not a major problem. Maybe itís just me being a Ginny fan and wanting to hear more.

The status on this is set to incomplete. If this is true, I look forward to seeing more. Youíve opened with a great premise: Harry quitting magic, and I look forward to reading more in the future. Youíve got a great grasp of Harryís psychology, and Iíd love to see whether or not he succeeds in his goal to find a little peace. Great work!

Reviewer: Ghoul In Pajamas
Date: 10/19/07 21:00
Chapter: Prologue: At What Cost Comes Victory?

This is so sad, Harry would have been mortified if Ginny died. The funeral was really sweet too, but where are Hermoine and Ron? They should be helping Harry... : (

Reviewer: laceymoibella
Date: 09/09/07 16:46
Chapter: Prologue: At What Cost Comes Victory?

What a wonderful, heart wrenching chapter!

Well written and the descriptions were beautiful. It felt like I was experiencing everything first hand.

I cannot wait to read the next chapter. Keep up the amazing work!


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