Reviews For Unrequited
Reviewer: LilyPotter65
Date: 07/03/08 13:45
Chapter: Barrier

Uh huh. Sure. I'm SO sure Lily or James will not read that letter Sirius poured his heart out into (yes, my calmness is gone! Thank heavens! It was horrible!). I'm being sarcastic in case you can't tell. You know, you should make Sirius send her the letter and see if she figures out who wrote it (like she won't know from the dating girls but not caring thing.) In case you can't tell, I love your story.

Reviewer: LilyPotter65
Date: 07/03/08 13:28
Chapter: Identity

Very nice, very nice. I've gotten a little camler, so if I wasn't, I would say,"That was AWESOME! I LOVE how Sirius defends Lily and that he puts 'removed from the family' as 'blasted off the family tree'!" ButI would not because I am calm and proper. Your story is wonderful.

Reviewer: LilyPotter65
Date: 07/03/08 13:16
Chapter: Mudblood

Hey! It's exactly like what Harry saw in the Order of the Phoenix! That is so cool!

You know, you really are a good writer! Love the story!

Reviewer: LilyPotter65
Date: 07/03/08 13:02
Chapter: Jealousy

By the way, the laughing on my last "review" or comments, was not sarcastic, it may sound like it I heed you not (I have no idea what the means), but it is not, in fact, what you people call sarcastic.

Reviewer: LilyPotter65
Date: 07/03/08 13:00
Chapter: Jealousy

Hey! This is just like, oh where is it from, I think it was from one of the books, anyways, it was from the book, you recreated the story and James is gonna save Snivellus from Remus, the bad, bad werewolf, which unfortunately, Snivellus doesn't know about. Haha! You're relly clever!!!!Ha ha ha ha!

Reviewer: LilyPotter65
Date: 07/03/08 12:51
Chapter: Falling

Wow! Sirius Black falling for Lily Evans? That's shocking, surprising, questioning, and...........absolutely ADORABLE! Sorry, I'm being a little girly here, but still, it's ADORABLE!! Wait, no it's not adorable, it's, oh what's the word, WEIRD! But not in the bad or offending way, it's a good weird, oh what's the use...?

Reviewer: beatlemanial
Date: 06/22/08 17:39
Chapter: Barrier

I really like the chapter "Snape's Worst Memory" in Sirius' point of view... especially with the added twist of his being in love with Lily!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 03/31/08 18:20
Chapter: Barrier

Amazing chapter!! I can not wait to read the next one :-)

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: Afifa
Date: 03/31/08 15:34
Chapter: Barrier

I feel so frigging sorry for poor Sirius. You're actually making me love Sirius/Lily more than James/Lily, and that's saying something. In fact, that's saying a lot! I felt really bad when I was reading the letter. Sirius is a bit mature with Lily in this fic, and that's quite a refreshing change, as other writers tend to make him a 'womaniser', and that, i hate. Anyways, the chapter was very well written. Loved it. Can't wait to read the next one. =)

Author's Response: I know, I feel terrible for Sirius too. It seems like I'm converted a lot of Lily/James shippers—I would really love to see more Sirius/Lily stories out there, so I hope this might convince someone to write one! I'm glad you like Sirius, since by now I'm struggling with not making him seem too mature, but since the reader only sees him around Lily, that's pretty difficult. Anyway, next chapter is about half-way written, and I'm glad you left such a lovely review! :D

Reviewer: Lioness06
Date: 03/29/08 10:01
Chapter: Barrier

Awww...the letter was really touching. Especially the end part about Lily dating James for security and that dating Sirius would feel like a risk at first.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: lostinside1
Date: 03/29/08 9:32
Chapter: Barrier

touching letter.

lol i almost thought i said "pranking girls, snogging snape" when i first read that line. very very funny

Author's Response: LOL! XD Thanks for the review and making me laugh!

Reviewer: kittykat
Date: 03/28/08 22:52
Chapter: Barrier

i absolutely love it...i have tears in my eyes!.you're such a wonderful writer....i love your story.update when you can

Author's Response: Thanks so much, and I'm sorry I made you cry! *hands tissue*

Reviewer: lily_death_flower
Date: 03/28/08 20:57
Chapter: Barrier

wow great chapter. i loved it. it was beautiful. i like how you added Sirius kind of getting jealous of James because he thinks Lily is falling for James.

I also like how you put Lily liking things being stable. it is her, somthing i think she would be worried about.

I also loved the letter. it was so beautiful and sweet. it was also sad. poor Sirius.

Its weird but i think that im starting to like Sirius and Lily together instead of James and Lily. lol!

please update soon!!

Author's Response: Yep, Sirius is getting more and more jealous of James the more paranoid he gets. :D One of the main obstacles Sirius does have to go through — besides the whole James thing — is the fact that Lily loves to be safe, but everyone sees Sirius as a reckless sort of guy. Anyway, I'm pleased everyone seems to like the letter… I was afraid it might come off as pathetic, even though I meant it to be seen as sad and desperate — poor Sirius, he has no one to talk to. I'm very glad to hear you like Sirius/Lily more than Lily/James (at least in this fic). That's become one of my goals in writing this fic! XD I'll try to update soon!

Reviewer: Wicked Wench
Date: 03/28/08 20:25
Chapter: Barrier

I really enjoyed this chapter. The letter has melted my heart...

Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's such an endearing letter, isn't it? Poor Sirius!

Reviewer: Lioness06
Date: 03/24/08 9:54
Chapter: Burn

I'm glad I re-found this story again. I am really enjoying it. I loved this line in the chapter,' "Well, that was obviously where the hopeless optimism came from."

Your best written chapter, IMO, was 'Mudblood'.

The only slight criticism I have, which really isn't a criticism (more a difference of opinions) is your characterization of James being so oblivious of things in regard to Sirius. I see how it is necessary for this story, so James doesn't notice Sirius' growing feelings for Lily. I just feel it takes a bit from the close brotherly-bond between Sirius and James.

well keep up the great work and i can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for the great compliment. Now, as for my opinion, James IS oblivious. But it isn't so much that he's oblivious but that Sirius is freakishly good at hiding things. I guess the reader doesn't see it much because the fic is in his mind, after all, but he had to be good at covering up all those years. He's good at grinning when he's hurting, not showing Lily he loves her, not showing James he loves Lily. I don't think the real danger is James figuring out Sirius is in love with Lily – because, come on, James would obviously not expect his best friend to fall for his love – but the entirely un-oblivious Lily to realise he's in love with her. So unless she does, I'd say he's doing a pretty great job at hiding it. :D Now, I personally also think that Sirius not doing anything about Lily shows just how much of a bond he and James have. I mean, Sirius has always had so much, and now the thing he wants more than anything, he refuses to take because James 'got' her first. It does take away from the bond a bit, yeah. But just remember that there ARE a lot of perfectly normal brotherly things going on the background that I'm not writing about. Being an angst-loving sort of person, I have a tendency to just focus on the bad. >.< Thanks so much for the review, and sorry if I sounded harsh in my response. I adore reviews, and concrit is great to have! ^_^ The next chapter is in queue, and will be up soon!

Reviewer: leighpotter
Date: 02/22/08 8:54
Chapter: Burn

Grrrr....Sirius and Lily!!!!! Well, I have to admit I'm a strong James/Lily shipper - I love writing fanfics about them - but I have to say the idea of Sirius maybe liking Lily a little more than he let on had occured to me...and you've just made it really believable! I like how Sirius has all these little internal conversations - very funny - especially when he's feeling jealous! Just one question - in the prologue you start with Sirius's seventh year right? Will you return to that at some point or will it just go through the summer and sixth year???

Author's Response: It will go past that point, up to seventh year and perhaps farther… I wish I could tell you more, but it would give away the ending! The next chapter is finally written and with my beta, so hopefully it will be up fairly soon (providing our lovely mods get the site fixed properly). Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: MerrryD
Date: 01/26/08 7:59
Chapter: Burn

this is really good. poor sirius. i like how you worked everything in like him daring snape to go under the whomping willow and snape's worst memory. keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Yep, I'm keeping it canon. (I can't say what'll happen in the future, though *cue evil laugh*) Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: linnealovegood
Date: 01/24/08 11:09
Chapter: Burn

this is awesome!!! this is the kind of story that makes me want to write fanfics!!!!!i totally love it.

Author's Response: That's such a high compliment! Thank you!

Reviewer: dobbyXkreacher
Date: 01/13/08 19:42
Chapter: Burn

this whole story was really good. i loved it.. and you made sirius be such a good friend to james

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: lily_death_flower
Date: 01/09/08 14:57
Chapter: Burn

great chappie! I love James but i want it to be Lily and Sirius. but if they are together then there is no Harry Potter! its so ahrd to decide. update soon pleaseeee?

Author's Response: three… Anyway, I can't tell you how it ends! I'm glad you like Lily/Sirius though. And I guess I should say that this fic is going on a temporary, month-long hiatus, but will be back in February! Check my author's page if you want to know why.

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