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Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 10/29/07 9:29 · For: Of Words and Winesses
I have finally made it to your stories, *hugs*.
First, I would like to say Rhianna is a great character. She is tough, and a match for the Malfoy arrogance. She is very well written and I can see her clearly in my mind as I read.
Lucius is as contemptible as ever. He is condescending to the nth degree, but seems to know when and where he can show it. I love his analogy on Hagrid’s hut and Azkaban, and his entire demeanour shows his ‘desperation’ to be set free.
Rita Skeeter, the woman all of us love to hate. Perfectly written, and I liked Rhianna’s thoughts on what she could be writing and thinking.
It’s nice to see someone else who has seen the parallels between Percy and Ernie MacMillan.
Having Harry testify for Lucius’ defense is wonderful, and I loved Kingsley’s reaction to it. Threatening Rhianna with Azkaban if she exploited Harry was perfectly done.
The closing arguments were powerful, and I can’t see any court allowing the accused to be sent to prison after that.
Harry talking to Lucius afterward was great. Ron would want Draco to know he owes his life to him. However, technically he owes Harry once and Ron once. Doing it for Narcissa was exactly right, and the mention of Lily was just what was needed in that situation.
I love the ending, and Lucius’ remarks on not needing her services in future.
I have to tell you, I loved this trial, and what you did with the characters. Your Rhianna was a wonderful addition to the Wizarding world and I hope to see her in more stories. Considering all of the trials needed after DH, I can only hope you will write more.
Excellent job, and I am off to read another.

Author's Response: Oh, Wendy ~ What a spectacular review - the kind every writer dreams of! *squishes* I appreciate that you liked Harry testifying and Kingsley's response to it - I really wanted a surprise witness and felt Harry would be the most surprising. I truly take to heart your words about Rhianna - I thoroughly enjoyed writing her, and hope to write more with her in the future. You have completely blessed and humbled me with such an incredible review! Thank you again! *cries* *hugs* ~Andi

Name: FaunaCaritas (Signed) · Date: 10/01/07 3:17 · For: Of Words and Winesses
Great work. I thought you did an excellent job 'painting' the character of Rhianna Burke in a few deft brushstrokes. One or two lines only, but the reader gets a very good picture of her. She is perfectly Slytherin... I like the idea of her toasting her victory. She makes the perfect lawyer for Lucius.

I thought you did a great job with the 'closing in for the kill' argument. I confess it would not have convinced me, had I been on the jury, but I think it would have had a good chance of swaying most of the crowd. I think Malfoy should have served his time. I mean, among other things, he tried to get muggle-borns exterminated by giving Ginny Lord V's diary.

That leads me to my criticism. I highly doubt Harry would have forgotten to mention this. Harry would have insisted on giving the whole story... but is a point of opinion, not of fact. You did a great job offering Harry the 'gratitude' motive. Personally I think Narcissa and Draco would be better off without the scheming head of the Malfoy family... :-) But there I go giving my opinion again.

Excellent work! Hugs from a fellow Ravenclaw.


Author's Response: Wow Fauna! Thank you so much for leaving such an excellent review! I appreciate that you gave good, solid con-crit regarding Harry. Your comments and suggestions all help me know what to focus on in my fics in the future and they all help make me a better writer. Thank you for the time and thoughtfulness you put into first reading my fic, then leaving a very helpful review. It means so much so much to me!! *hugs* ~Andrea

Name: kutekat528 (Signed) · Date: 09/28/07 1:11 · For: Of Words and Winesses
Great piece. I really liked that you used the template of the previous trials that we've seen in the books. It made it seem much more canon. Harry testifying? I must admit, I was surprised by that one, but it proved a powerful point about Harry's character once again and fit in nicely. I found it believable and well written. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely and thoughtful review, kutekat! I appreciate that you thought it was believable and well-written - you have made my day!! *hugs* ~Andrea

Name: laceymoibella (Signed) · Date: 09/04/07 20:14 · For: Of Words and Winesses
Brilliant piece of writing, Andrea! *huggles my twin* Your talents shine once again with this story.

Your descriptions brought this to life superbly.

I loved Rhianna. She is quite the piece of work! No messing with her!

I thought the way you had Harry speak in favor of Lucius was amazing. It was genuine and heartfelt.

You made Lucius appear more of human being than we have ever seen him portrayed. Excellent!

*tight squishes*

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Author's Response: TWIN!! *squishes* Thank you for reading my Lucius fic and for leaving such a sweet, thoughtful review! I apreciate your comments about Lucius seeming more a human being, and that you love Rhianna. I had such a great time creating that character! You are wonderful - thanks again for all your encouragement and support! *huggles* ~Andi

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 09/04/07 12:45 · For: Of Words and Winesses
I love it!! I love what you did with your new witness, it works even better! And given all that happened, giving Lucius the chance to actually appreciate what Harry has just done for him was a great decision. I thought it was perfectly in character for a man who was beaten soundly in DH. Great connection to Harry's mom. And the last line is as brilliant as it was before.
I'm glad I was able to help out a bit. Great job, and good luck in the challenge!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hi Gina!!! I am so glad that you like the change in witnesses, and I truly appreciate all you did. It would have been a month's worth of work down the drain if you hadn't been there to guide me in the right direction. All your time and help were such a blessing! :-) Thank you for the lovely review, Gina - you're the best! *squishes* ~Andi

Name: Snapes_secret (Anonymous) · Date: 09/04/07 8:53 · For: Of Words and Winesses
Very nice parallel - Lily's actions in saving her son and Narcissa's for Draco.

As usual, you did an impeccable job with Lucius. Makes me quite thirsty for some Diet Coke. *smirk*

Author's Response: Sandy! Thank you so much for giving some love to my Lucius fic! I appreciate you saying I did an impeccable job with Lucius - if I can write him half as well as you can, I consider myself lucky. And, oh yes, I do feel a thirst coming on that can only be slaked by Diet Coke. LOL! Thanks again for your review, friend! ~Andi

Name: rambkowalczyk (Signed) · Date: 09/04/07 8:51 · For: Of Words and Winesses
Good story. Matches canon well. I like the distinction that Lucius in and of himself may not be worthy of mercy but for the sake of his wife and family might be. I also like that you chose to make him grateful.

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for reading my story and taking the time to leave such wonderful comments! I tried to stick to canon as close as I could, and felt Lucius needed to ackowledge all that had been done on his behalf, believing in my mind that the final battle would open his eyes to what was truly important in life. Your review completely made my day! *hugs* ~Andrea

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