heyyy, i really love this story and hope you do find some time (in the near future) to finish this fic. I reckon if you made the chapters slightly longer it would be a positive and if you're feeling un-inspired then you should re-watch or re-read the harry potter series to give you some ideas. Obviously you have some idea about the story line sine the first chapter was set 9 months after the rest of the story. I think you need to work out when you have some free time and write the next chapter during that time.
Maybe something happens to ron on his mission with harry or maybe he falls in love with some one else on this mission and leaves harry and hermione on their own. Then when hermione finds out this information she tells draco about (because they have built up a friendship during this time) and he comforts her, slowly falling in love with each other
I really hope this has given you some ideas and inspiration to write a new chapter and hopefully finish the fic soon.
All the best of luck
your doing an amazing job with this story. i have to stop on this page im afraid because i have to go to bed now. your a great writer.
haha got to love Moody. great writing! i love the way Draco is starting to change in his thinking. let's hope he ca ncatch Hermione soon. waiting for you to post next chapter diligently
I love it. It was soo well written!
was wondering if you post this story elsewhere?
Yes it is on harrypotterfanfiction.com and on Wizardtales.net where I am now a mod. However, it is the same on all 3 sites, I update each of them when I finish a chapter. Unfortunately I have not been able to work on it because I opend a small sandwich shop in January and me and my mom are the only employees. When I get home I have to do the mom stuff so I have very little free time to work on this.
well that was a random interlude by moody lol, looking forward to what happens next! please take less than a year to update this time please :P
thank you for updating. so they are talking again huh? i love all yr 80's references. i like how you point out, even in the most evil or most kind person, were not so different after all.
omg. i am soooOOo excited to find out youve updated! but i will have to reread some parts to refresh my memory. :) thanx!
Hahaha Gotta love Mad-Eye! Great chapter, Love reading each one, Please update as soon as you can :-)
Wow, talk about giving Draco a shock...LOL Poor Hermione she certainly is having a rough time with everthing that is going on :-(
OHHH SHYT! wow that was unexpected.
i mean i thought it was mainly gonna be about draco finishing up the rubiks cube and throwin it to miones face and how he twas soo easy.
didnt expect that heartfelt confession. :]
hehe. loved it though! udpate! :D
please post more please
I have a chapter ready for my beta right now. give it about 2 weeks.
ahem, erm, sorry about that, should probably explain first...
I was a fan of Snape's_Talon & her CotH series. I knew that it was moving away from this site, but I foolish didn't bookmark the new locations... and now, coming back from a term at Uni, I can't find it :'(. I remembered your penname from the reviews... Could you be nice enough to tell me where this wonderful story has gone? Please?
when oh when will you update this amazing story? i'm so captivated, i think i've read this 3 times so far.
I'm working on it, I have the next chapter almost finished I just had to figure out to move it along. I'm glad you like it, and I promise I will update as soon as I get the chapter nice and tidy.
Hey Kristy! Here's your treat~
I'm intrigued. Lots of little questions are sprouting in my mind now. I don't normally read Dramione, not that I have anything against it, I just don't read it, lol. But this is very good and I think I shall keep reading~
A small nitpick:
After pushing her tangled hair out of her face, she dips a torn piece of his robe into the small pool of water forming in the corner from the rain. Returning to his side, she runs the cool cloth over his face, and the droplets of water trace little lines in the dirt and grime.
This part was a bit confusing to me, as I didn't realise she'd left his side, and then I was confused about how there was water and Draco in the corner...
That's it. :p
The smell not unpleasant, but it reminds her too much of a tomb, and she fears this place will become one.
I love this line. It's holds so much power and fear and sadness.
His lank, blonde hair is matted to his head, and his pale complexion is red with the heat of the raging fever.
I can see a very sick Draco on his deathbed. It's sad. :(
..fourteen days with no food, no wands, and no idea where they are.
I love the repetition of 'no' here.
The sight and smell of the rotting flesh forces Harry to turn away, and he swallows the bile that has risen to the back of his throat.
This line adds so much to the scene! It's wonderful. It really helps to set the tone/mood. If Harry's repulsed by it, then it *must* be bad.
It was meant to be a promise, but she is afraid it is going to be the only thing she ever receives from him.
Awww. That's so sweet and sad. And O.o They're engaged? Or promised?
“They may find us, but what condition will he be in – will we be in?” They both look down at Draco, afraid to voice their fears, knowing that he will not survive much longer.
These last two lines gave me chills. -shivers-
This is such a perfect prologue I almost don't know where to begin, lol. It really sets the scene and makes me ask myself so many questions and really makes me want to read on and find out what happens.
I love the first few paragraphs about Hermione. The way it gives a brief shot of the scenery and then snaps into the action. It reminds me a lot of a movie (that's how vivid the picture you painted is!), there's a flash of the setting and then it cuts right to one of the main characters in motion. lol. I've been thinking about books becoming movies a lot lately, which is probably where that came from, ha.
I like how you kept Draco's identity hidden for a while. I was hanging for a little while there...until the blonde hair part. ha.
The present tense of the story makes it seem more real. Like it's actually happening. It's scarier too. I tend to write in past tense, and most things are written in past tense, so this was refreshing and like a little jolt in the stomach. Not in a bad way though, just....-purses lips- I don't know how to explain it.
Ooh, it's very intense and strong and dark. I love Hermione's emotions and how you showed them. I could feel them. I didn't just read them and see them, I actually felt and understood them.
Gah! I've got tons of questions~ Why are they there? How did they get there? How/why are Hermione and Draco engaged? And why the hell is Harry there too, trying to save Draco's life? And-- most importantly, -cues dramatic music-, will Draco survive? Will they all survive?
Brilliant prologue, Kristy! I'll definitely be reading more! (and hopefully reviewing!)
I hope you like your treat!
This was a wonderful halloween treat! I'm glad you are hooked. I HATE Dramoine (beleive it or not) but was challanged to write one so I decided it was going to be very realistic. There was another twist to the challange but I won't revele it. >.> <.<! All your questions are answered as the story progresses so keep reading. I'm glad you saw it and felt it, that is what I set out to do. I love stories where you feel like you are standing there, you can smell the food, feel the breeze and understand the fear of what is going on. I too saw this playing out like a movie and I am trying to write every chapter that way.
~ Thanks again, Kristy
interesting, kinda short, but interesting :)
hmmm thats strange that malfoy doest know of riddle.
interesting.... maybe malfoy will learn somethin new when readin teh book,
maybe enlighten him in someway,, who knows?
hmm .. so finally one of his own knows his secret .. he-who-must-not-be-named will not be pleased. so glad u updated .. finally! :) (wondering what happens next ..)