Reviewer: AliKt716
Date: 10/30/07 15:53
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

good writing, but I thought the plot was cheesy

Author's Response: lol...this plot was my first, so it's not that great--but I think I have the good beginnings of some ideas. I'm glad you thought the writing was good; thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: mugglechicka5565
Date: 09/28/07 17:01
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prince Charmingly Gallant

Cute!!!!

Reviewer: Hermione Clone
Date: 09/28/07 16:38
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

"James sat there, watching silent tears flow unchecked now from her green eyes, wishing he could help her feel better. Part of him, however, was elated that he was not such an awful kisser that he caused her to no longer speak to him."

I loved that part! The timing's not too bad, I mean, something had to keep them apart until seventh year. It didn't really matter, this still was a great story.

Author's Response: I'm glad the timing didn't bother you too much; like you said, I had to keep them apart until 7th year. And I'm pleasantly surprised that that's your favorite line. :)

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 09/28/07 2:16
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

Ah don't worry it is a sweet story. A little fluffy perhaps, but still good. Your reasons for Lily's reluctance are very understandable though. I think you might have used muscled torso a bit too many times :D

Author's Response: Thank you! And you're right; I think I'll fix that.

Reviewer: Prongsies_Girl_93
Date: 09/26/07 22:03
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

Aw, it was lovely! Great job! Poor Lily and James... ;-;

Reviewer: siriusrox26
Date: 09/22/07 21:47
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

I REALLY REALLY THINK IT SHOUD BE LONGER!! CONTINUE IT PLEASE CONTINUE IT PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!!! IT IS SUCH AN AWESOME STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: I'm not sure where to take the story from here--I've already written my original idea. But I'll think about adding on to it if I get another brainwave, and I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it!

Reviewer: ginny_weasly123890
Date: 09/22/07 19:44
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

TWO CHAPTERS? YOU CALL THAT A STORY?

Author's Response: ummm...the reason it's two chapters is that the part of their relationship I wanted to explore was how it would be possible for Lily to maintain her independence and go out with James, which it only took me two chapters to do. I'm going to take this as a compliment, since you seemed to want more chapters.

Reviewer: tonksosme
Date: 09/20/07 21:14
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

its okay that it was a year and a half, you exaggerated to prove your point, poets do it all the time. it did make the story seem oddly rushed and sudden though.all in all, a good ficlet.

Author's Response: Thanks! (and I really like the word "ficlet"!)

Reviewer: dancingwithneville
Date: 09/19/07 14:38
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

I love it! You wrote the story so well!

Reviewer: fawkesfeathers
Date: 09/18/07 21:19
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

awesome!!!!!! it was a blast to read

Reviewer: cyt_potter
Date: 09/18/07 20:27
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

*Chuckles as images of this very determined Lily dance through my head* I think that was wonderful! I like the references to Cinderella as I can't for the life of me see Lily as a wall flower or someone who wants to be 'looked after'. Poor James though! I felt really sorry for him! But I think that he would of matured alot in that year and a half, maybe he needed that time too truly appreciate Lily, well just a thought! Really loved the storey. Great job!

Author's Response: It always bugs me when I read a fanfic where Lily is a helpless maiden or whatever...so I'm glad you liked how I portrayed her. You make a very good point about James needing to mature to appreciate her--maybe I'll revise the story to work that in.

Reviewer: HogwartsGirly124
Date: 09/18/07 19:30
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

i loved it good job! :) really really spectacular!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it :)

Reviewer: HogwartsGirly124
Date: 09/18/07 19:15
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prince Charmingly Gallant

aww. Prince Charming without his Cinderella. that was a great sentence! i loved this please please update... QUICKLY! this story is different in its own way i loved it! more more! your very talented! i hope ppl tell you that!

SoPhIa


Author's Response: Thank you, that's so sweet! And the story is actually finished; it's two chapters.

Reviewer: NeLLyRaE
Date: 09/17/07 22:42
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

it's a cute srory, but this is moving WAY too fast!!! the first chapter i would've stretche out a ton! an di deinitely wouldn't have covered a year and a hlaf in two chapters. it just seems kinda rushed 2 me. but it's stilla great story!

Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism...maybe someday I'll fix it so the timing makes better sense.

Reviewer: harrypotterprincess
Date: 09/16/07 23:29
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prince Charmingly Gallant

aww that was cute =)

Reviewer: ravenclawslostdiadem
Date: 09/16/07 20:01
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

i'm just surprised that you put a year and a half into a paragraph, then spent a whole chapter on twenty minutes haha. the timing got me a little confused.

Reviewer: ravenclawslostdiadem
Date: 09/16/07 19:53
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prince Charmingly Gallant

if this is your first fic, then i'm impressed. keep up the good work! and update, update, update!

Author's Response: I'm glad it's my first fic, then!

Reviewer: i_hart_wheezys
Date: 09/16/07 19:08
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

the timing was kinda interesting...the first chapter almost could have been like a long prolouge or something that would set the stage for the story...well anyways i like how you got the characters together but lily kinda changed her mind abt being cinderella to being willing to date james really fast so you never really saw her transistion. otherwise this was a really good chapter and it was really well written! you really identify how each character is feeling and you can easily see where ther emotions are coming from! ggreat job!!!!! :)

Author's Response: The point was kind of that James was showing her she didn't have to depend on him if they went out, that he didn't want her to be entirely dependent on him, and that he would still love her even if she wasn't Cinderella. But the timing is definitely something I would fix if I were to do a major overhaul of the story.

Reviewer: chocklit
Date: 09/16/07 18:55
Chapter: Chapter 2: I'd Rather Have You

CUUUUUTE!

Author's Response: :)

Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 09/16/07 18:20
Chapter: Chapter 1: Prince Charmingly Gallant

Well this was a good chapter. I don't remember if I have reviewed or not so I'll do it this time. Now on to chapter two!

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