Reviewer: moira_patronus
Date: 02/21/11 15:12
Chapter: Chapter 7: The Secret Sharer

this is really cool, i love the last bit! I can't help laughing at the way they all speak, especially lily and cecily, they are all so formal. Keep going you're doing great.

Author's Response: haha, thank you! :] and yes, they are indeed very formal, but with Lily and Cecily I'm trying to convey the sense that they grew up in very proper, structured type households. I hope that's coming across without seeming silly or out of character [in Lily's case] or something.

Reviewer: Artemis of Light
Date: 08/03/09 19:20
Chapter: Chapter 6: Alone in a Crowd

Where do I start? Well, first of all I love your writing. There's loads of wonderful humor ("What sort of oblivious wanker do you take me for?" "The standard kind" LOL), the more emotional parts are just right, and your characters act like everyday, easy to relate to teenagers.

This last chapter is brilliant. It's interesting to look at Lily, Alice, and Marlene from another character's perspective. I like how you've made Mary McDonald a very observant wallflower. I hope we get another chapter here and there with her first person take on things.

Really, you're an awesome writer. I can't wait for your next update!

Author's Response: oh, thank you so much! I love getting reviews; it makes me feel all warm and fuzzy on the inside. :] and I'm trying to update more quickly, but unfortunately I'm a bit slow at writing; I put so much into my story, and I just want everything to turn out perfect, so it all ends up taking a rather long time. which frustrates me. but I do hope you'll keep reading! things are going to get a bit more eventful soon.

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 07/23/09 19:11
Chapter: Chapter 6: Alone in a Crowd

I really like this chapter. I like Mary. I like her personality. I love this story. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: dedequeen
Date: 07/10/09 19:43
Chapter: Chapter 5: One for the Road

hey dont think us this story is great now just keep writing

Reviewer: dedequeen
Date: 07/10/09 18:31
Chapter: Prologue: Just Sand and Water

hey love da begininin realli sad hope it gets happier

Reviewer: teddyvictoirefreak
Date: 06/18/09 19:54
Chapter: Chapter 5: One for the Road

It was good so far better than most but why did Lilys mother die?So far so good I really am hoping for James and Lily to hook up...

Reviewer: siilly_bookworm_28
Date: 06/15/09 21:38
Chapter: Chapter 5: One for the Road

Please please please update quickly!!! I usually look only in the recently updated, and J/L stories are my favorite, and this is quite possibly the best of ALL that I've seen!!!! Please please please please update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm sorry you're upset about graduating, but just remember that your true friends will stay in touch in this new chapter of your life. Hope its the best! -Lainie

Author's Response: awh, thanks. :] and I am definitely trying to be quicker with the whole updating process; with this particular chapter, I hit a sort of mental roadblock, because I was trying to figure out the best way to do things. but now that the gang has actually reached Hogwarts again, I'm hoping I'll be able to get things done quicker. and I'm not really upset at the prospect of finishing high school. it's more of a "all right...now what?" kind of mood. :]

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 06/15/09 16:23
Chapter: Chapter 5: One for the Road

This is a good chapter. It wasn't too boring to stop reading it. I really like this story and you're a great job!

Author's Response: oh, wow, really?? that's pretty funny. soup seems a bit odd to have for breakfast; I'm more of an ice cream person myself. ;]

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 04/25/09 20:48
Chapter: Chapter 3: Two Ships

I like this chapter but I thought it was funny because my sister eats soup for breakfast and i make fun of her for it.

Author's Response: all right, the response for the above review was meant for this one. I accidentally clicked on the wrong button.

Reviewer: Essence of Potter
Date: 11/15/08 13:27
Chapter: Prologue: Just Sand and Water

wow.......
Amazing your a fantastic writer!
I loved tvery thing about this story it's not rushed or too slow........all the caracters and their relationships are perfect.
One thing I dont lik though.....you dont update enough!Please write more because I want to read more!

Reviewer: Essence of Potter
Date: 11/15/08 13:27
Chapter: Prologue: Just Sand and Water

wow.......
Amazing your a fantastic writer!
I loved tvery thing about this story it's not rushed or too slow........all the caracters and their relationships are perfect.
One thing I dont lik though.....you dont update enough!Please write more because I want to read more!

Reviewer: Essence of Potter
Date: 11/15/08 13:27
Chapter: Prologue: Just Sand and Water

wow.......
Amazing your a fantastic writer!
I loved tvery thing about this story it's not rushed or too slow........all the caracters and their relationships are perfect.
One thing I dont lik though.....you dont update enough!Please write more because I want to read more!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! That really makes me feel special. :] I am also very displeased with my lack of updates, but honestly, I cannot write any faster than my current pace. Unfortunately, I have too much else [school mostly] going on to allow that.

Reviewer: eaglette with wheels
Date: 04/11/08 22:27
Chapter: Chapter 3: Two Ships

rrr. evil evil high school - I should now, I started 9e this year. Remus is so sweet- i'm surprised a bit of it hasn't rubbe doff onto Sirius. Great job!

Author's Response: Awww...poor Sirius. He's not as bad as he seems at first glance. He is a bit rougher around the edges, but I think that is mainly due to his upbringing, and his family. He understands more than he gives off...

Reviewer: marvelousmeg
Date: 04/06/08 13:04
Chapter: Prologue: Just Sand and Water

That is beautiful. Lily really hates the muggle world. I like the way you described her family but it feels like she has no connection with anyone. where are her firends during this sad time????????

Author's Response: well, personally, I like to think of Lily as being the type to keep things to herself. in my story, she lets those she is closest to know about her mother's funeral [meaning Marley and Remus]; Marley attends, whereas Remus is, unfortunately, otherwise occupied. I'm writing Lily as one of those suffers-in-silence types [which fits in with how I've described her mother - she wouldn't want to world to know they're struggling], but that's just my opinion.

Reviewer: quarter moon
Date: 03/25/08 15:44
Chapter: Chapter 2: A Little Help From My Friends

this is a very good story please update i am hoping that since it wasn't deleted its still being written, you never know which can be slightly annoying, but i will im patiently be awaiting the next chapter, and paticients which i cannot spell is not in my vocabulary, cant wait

Author's Response: Don't worry, it is definitely still being written...just very slowly. I'm attempting to put a lot of thought into this story, which is what delays me so much in actually writing everything out.

Reviewer: darknessofnight
Date: 02/12/08 19:36
Chapter: Prologue: Just Sand and Water

. . . . . .wahhhhhh. That was one of the best that I have ever read.

Reviewer: alice pheonix
Date: 01/19/08 5:55
Chapter: Chapter 2: A Little Help From My Friends

It's a really great story I just wish the next chapter was done

Reviewer: dobbyXkreacher
Date: 01/13/08 19:29
Chapter: Prologue: Just Sand and Water

this is really good the whole stroy! keep writing more

Reviewer: Osced
Date: 01/10/08 15:24
Chapter: Chapter 1: A Saint in the City

Great chapter, I think you write James personality relly good, especially his dream with Lily, it was fantastic how you describe the war! Keep up the great work!

Reviewer: Minna_Black
Date: 01/06/08 17:48
Chapter: Chapter 2: A Little Help From My Friends

Name a character after me !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please?!!!!!!!!!!-Minna

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