This sounds so much like it would fit into DH, it's brilliantly written. However it has left me with an uneasy feeling, I mean the sorts of things that the dark side get up to. Does Theo really like Daphne or is this his way of convincing her to join the death eaters? Perhaps he's just extremely good at reading people and knowing how to play individuals like violins. Great fic though.
Oh, Ilka! What a lovely gem of a story you have here! Your writing is as nice as ever, although… I can’t quite put my finger on it, but there’s something unusually mature and well-developed about your language in this piece, as if you’ve put extra effort and thought into all your sentences and word choices. Speaking of which, I couldn’t find a single typo or grammar error! So if you find this review to be sadly lacking in constructive criticism, well, I daresay it’s your own fault. ;)
Theodore Nott is an interesting character to work with, isn’t he? We know of his family’s connections within the Wizarding world and that he’s a Slytherin, but very little about his personality or beliefs. As such he’s in a perfect position to play with, to develop, and I must say that you have done this very well. Daphne Greengrass is a similar person, I think, although you’ve had even more space to make up her character and, again, you’ve done that so well!
I’m slightly in awe over the conversation you’ve written between Pansy and Theodore; it flows so well and naturally, and you express their feelings so accurately. Pansy’s character is spot on, and you make me dislike her just as much as I do when reading the canon works.
Now, what I find most interesting about this one-shot is that it focuses (at least enough for you to put it in a Romance category) on a relationship, and Theodore’s feelings for Daphne. It becomes very difficult to put him down as a good or a bad character; he does belong to Voldemort, but he’s so gentle and patient with Daphne. It doesn’t seem like he’s thought about opposing Voldemort, but I get a feeling that he’s mostly suggesting that Daphne should join his ranks for her own protection. Somehow, it reminds me of what Jenna does with Lucius Malfoy’s character in Sins of the Father - he’s one of the bad guys, but he has still got feelings and is more than just a mindless monster. And that, I think, is absolutely fascinating to read about, especially when it’s as well-written as this one-shot!
Thank you, Ilka, for sharing this story with us. It is beautifully written and leaves me thoughtful, in a good way. I daresay that this is the best I’ve read of your work! =)
Author's Response: No typos or grammar mistakes? Wow, that must be a first! Theodore was indeed a lovely character to play with. At first he was just supposed to pretend to like Daphne to get her to join Voldemort, but he ended up having actual feelings for her and then he just couldn't be a completely evil character anymore. I definitely have to read Sins one of these days, I hate it when people make Lucius cold and without feelings, so I will most likely enjoy Jenna's Lucius very much. *huggles Anna* Thanks for the wonderful review!
wow that was amazing i really liked that from a deatheaters p.o.v very good!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked the POV, it was very interesting to write, too.
Author's Response: Thanks!