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Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 04/20/08 20:06 · For: one-shot
This sounds so much like it would fit into DH, it's brilliantly written. However it has left me with an uneasy feeling, I mean the sorts of things that the dark side get up to. Does Theo really like Daphne or is this his way of convincing her to join the death eaters? Perhaps he's just extremely good at reading people and knowing how to play individuals like violins. Great fic though.


Name: Fantasium (Signed) · Date: 09/29/07 10:17 · For: one-shot
Oh, Ilka! What a lovely gem of a story you have here! Your writing is as nice as ever, althoughÖ I canít quite put my finger on it, but thereís something unusually mature and well-developed about your language in this piece, as if youíve put extra effort and thought into all your sentences and word choices. Speaking of which, I couldnít find a single typo or grammar error! So if you find this review to be sadly lacking in constructive criticism, well, I daresay itís your own fault. ;)

Theodore Nott is an interesting character to work with, isnít he? We know of his familyís connections within the Wizarding world and that heís a Slytherin, but very little about his personality or beliefs. As such heís in a perfect position to play with, to develop, and I must say that you have done this very well. Daphne Greengrass is a similar person, I think, although youíve had even more space to make up her character and, again, youíve done that so well!

Iím slightly in awe over the conversation youíve written between Pansy and Theodore; it flows so well and naturally, and you express their feelings so accurately. Pansyís character is spot on, and you make me dislike her just as much as I do when reading the canon works.

Now, what I find most interesting about this one-shot is that it focuses (at least enough for you to put it in a Romance category) on a relationship, and Theodoreís feelings for Daphne. It becomes very difficult to put him down as a good or a bad character; he does belong to Voldemort, but heís so gentle and patient with Daphne. It doesnít seem like heís thought about opposing Voldemort, but I get a feeling that heís mostly suggesting that Daphne should join his ranks for her own protection. Somehow, it reminds me of what Jenna does with Lucius Malfoyís character in Sins of the Father - heís one of the bad guys, but he has still got feelings and is more than just a mindless monster. And that, I think, is absolutely fascinating to read about, especially when itís as well-written as this one-shot!

Thank you, Ilka, for sharing this story with us. It is beautifully written and leaves me thoughtful, in a good way. I daresay that this is the best Iíve read of your work! =)

Author's Response: No typos or grammar mistakes? Wow, that must be a first! Theodore was indeed a lovely character to play with. At first he was just supposed to pretend to like Daphne to get her to join Voldemort, but he ended up having actual feelings for her and then he just couldn't be a completely evil character anymore. I definitely have to read Sins one of these days, I hate it when people make Lucius cold and without feelings, so I will most likely enjoy Jenna's Lucius very much. *huggles Anna* Thanks for the wonderful review!


Name: choling (Signed) · Date: 09/06/07 10:42 · For: one-shot
wow that was amazing i really liked that from a deatheaters p.o.v very good!

xoxo
choling

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked the POV, it was very interesting to write, too.


Name: sam_1034_lily (Signed) · Date: 09/03/07 15:27 · For: one-shot
gud job

Author's Response: Thanks!


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