Reviewer: marvelousmeg
Date: 10/21/07 20:57
Chapter: A Dissolute Mind

Wow!!!!!!!1 Really great! I love it!

Author's Response: Thank you! We're glad you enjoyed it! :D

Reviewer: marvelousmeg
Date: 10/21/07 20:50
Chapter: An Ego Scorned

Whoo-hoo!!!
i love it already!!!!!!!!! Great strory!!!!!!!!!:)

Author's Response: Thanks! We (Audrey & I) love writing about the Marauder Era.

Reviewer: Raven_in_Lion_House
Date: 08/28/07 12:28
Chapter: An Ego Scorned

Very well written. I can't wait to read your next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks! Hopefully your wait won't be too long!

Reviewer: to_the_stage93
Date: 08/28/07 8:33
Chapter: An Ego Scorned

Wow, this is a really good start and kudos to you for that!!! However, I have some small bits of constructive criticism for you, that I hope help:
1. Your formatting- Here on MNFF, we don't indent the first line of our paragraphs. Don't ask my why, it's just not done.
2. Chapter Unity- This chapter seems more like a series of small vignettes and less of one unified chapter. Chapters should be unified; the different unifications are what diffrentiates chapter from chapter.
3. Remus's reaction to full moon- We all know that Remus gets tired/ill before full moon. You should incorporate that into this fic.

You may have noticed that I only had a lfew pieces of con crit, that's because you're doing so well already that I didn't have much to correct! I hope this review hasn't been to harsh, I love your story and since this is your first story here, you do have room to improve! It has lots of potential so kudos to you!

Author's Response: We (yes, there are two of us; though sometimes I do feel like a split personality :) ) don't think your review was too harsh. We'll be editing after we add a new chapter. Thanks!

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