Reviewer: theoyoudreamo
Date: 03/26/11 22:05
Chapter: The Nightmare

i really like this story :) thanks for sharing it.

Reviewer: Unconditional
Date: 11/24/10 14:45
Chapter: The Nightmare

are you going to write any more on this story? It's so sweet, it'd be a shame to give up on it :)

Reviewer: ember
Date: 02/24/08 16:13
Chapter: The Nightmare

awwwwwwwwwww. That was so sweet. cant wait till the next chapter. Hurry up. Please

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 12/01/07 21:27
Chapter: The Nightmare

This was a lovely chapter. You've showed Hermione's emotions very well, and I'm glad Oliver seems to be a very sensitive and understanding guy. I can't wait to see their relationship develop further!

Reviewer: La_Rubinita
Date: 10/20/07 21:00
Chapter: The Nightmare

Ah! Update soon, please. I am seriously loving this. Keep up the good work!

Reviewer: La_Rubinita
Date: 10/20/07 20:46
Chapter: A Not-So-Unwelcome Intruder

Wonderful. I've never read a Hermione/Oliver fic before. I'm looking forward to the rest of this.

Reviewer: joybelle423
Date: 09/30/07 22:59
Chapter: A Not-So-Unwelcome Intruder

Hi there! I was scanning through the Hermione/OC category and saw a potential Hermione/Oliver fic, and woot, I was right! I love that pairing, especially after Nyruserra’s Consequentially Yours. You should check that out, if you haven’t already.

Anyway, I was so pleased to see good writing when I opened the first chapter! So many of the romance fics are just a little immature, but you’ve done a really good job with this. From the very beginning, the chapter grabs the readers’ attention while still giving crucial background information – and all of without being boring. I enjoy the way you’ve characterised Hermione. She’s strong and capable, and yet still human – she gets tired and overwhelmed just like everyone else. And she isn’t being all bossy and obnoxious, but when she discovers Oliver in her room, I can definitely see that part of her personality come through. Except, here, it’s not annoying, because we’re seeing things from her point of view.

One thing I noticed about your writing is your excellent vocabulary and nearly flawless grammar. That’s always such a pleasure to see! It’s so much easier to get involved with the story when it isn’t full of mistakes. I also like the way you’ve imagined the wizarding world post-final-battle. It’s very real. I hadn’t considered other prisoners being held hostage, but wow, that’s so plausible. Aside from wanting more of the Hermione/Oliver, I’m curious to see what else you’ll come up with in regards to the rest of the world and the aftermath of the battle.

And oh, your Oliver is so perfect! It’s really hard to get his accent right, but you’re doing a really good job with it. Your descriptions of him are just wonderful. Hee, I can totally picture him all tousled and sleepy and hot when he’s woken by Hermione. And of course he’s smug for having seen her just out of the shower … lol. He’s so sweet, too, rubbing lotion on her bruises for her. *grins* I sure wouldn’t mind that at all!

There were just a few typos that I caught – “I came from Scotland this afternoon.”

“[…] having little time for things as trivial as Quidditch, and being four years younger than he,”

“Something stirred inside him, something he couldn’t quite put a name to, but which he knew wasn’t all that safe.”

Oh, I think so, yes,” said Oliver.

Also, you really don’t need a comma after ellipses. I know MS Word likes to put them in, but it’s actually incorrect. Aside from that, I’m very impressed with the overall lack of errors here. Good job! I’m really looking forward to reading more of your story. Keep up the good work!

~ Abigail

Reviewer: Razzy_Babe
Date: 09/16/07 21:19
Chapter: The Nightmare

Good, very good. I like a good Oliver/Mione fic. I SHIP O/L.

Reviewer: Razzy_Babe
Date: 09/16/07 21:19
Chapter: The Nightmare

Good, very good. I like a good Oliver/Mione fic. I SHIP O/L.

Reviewer: Her My Own EE
Date: 09/16/07 11:21
Chapter: The Nightmare

Very intriguing!

Reviewer: Hermione Clone
Date: 09/16/07 10:26
Chapter: The Nightmare

This is great! I usually don't like stories that pair Hermione with someone other than Ron, but I really like this. I can't wait to see where it goes.
Update soon!

Reviewer: Jane Granger
Date: 09/06/07 12:27
Chapter: A Not-So-Unwelcome Intruder

Update plz this storie is brill carry it on :D
(if u dont well ill hav 2 make a storie 2 make ma self happy :D)

Reviewer: jodiebaby
Date: 08/29/07 18:13
Chapter: A Not-So-Unwelcome Intruder

i like it. there should be more oliver/hermione stories!

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