Reviewer: eaglette with wheels
Date: 04/30/08 17:52
Chapter: Chapter 3

I love your writing- but I keep noticing spelling and grammatical errors that distract from the plot. I reccomend that you get a beta reader, or, if you have one, a second beta reader to ensure that your story flows smoothly.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot! =)rnrnYeah, I've got a another beta now, so hopefully the next chapters won't have these mistakes. rnrnThanks for the review! =D

Reviewer: Winnyy
Date: 04/30/08 13:21
Chapter: Chapter 3


I love it!:)

Author's Response: Three reviews! Yay! Thanks a lot, dear! =D

Reviewer: Winnyy
Date: 04/30/08 11:21
Chapter: Chapter 2-- Forward eleven years

Aw, I feel so sorry for Sirius and Peter...

Author's Response: Yeah, me too! And thanks for the review! =)

Reviewer: Winnyy
Date: 04/30/08 11:12
Chapter: Chapter 1-- And they were born

Aw! This is so good!:)
The effort was definitely worth it!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you thought so. =)

Reviewer: Nivnami
Date: 04/29/08 23:51
Chapter: Chapter 3

Wow! This chapter was soooo awesome! I loved the way you focussed on every single charater. My favourite character is James- he has a great sense of humour and wit. I personally feel that you have a lot of talent at writing. I am eagerly awaiting the updation of the next chapter. I sincerely request you to update the next chapter as soon as possible for this story is very interesting and well-written (and incidentally I LOVE Marauder era fics) Keep up the great work!!!

ALL THE BEST!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Aww... thank you so much! =DrnYeah, well, I'll try to finish the fourth chapter soon, and then get it beta'd, and in the queue. rnThanks for the compliments, wishes and the review! =) You really made my day! =D

Reviewer: snowey
Date: 02/06/08 16:41
Chapter: Chapter 2-- Forward eleven years

i love this story, pls make another one!!!!
i have been waiting sooooo long!!!!!

Author's Response: Wow! That's great! =D Well, I just sent the 3rd chapter to the beta. Let's hope that by the time she sends it back, the problems at MNFF have been removed. And about the other story... well... I've got a few one-shots, which I have to get beta'd and all, then I'll submit 'em. Let's hope that it happens soon. Oh, and I'm really sorry but I didn't get this: i have been waiting sooooo long!!!!! Like, have you been waiting for the stories like mine or what? Anyways, thanks for taking time and reviewing! =)

Author's Response: Yayy! You favourited my story. Thanks!

Reviewer: Indigoenigma
Date: 12/23/07 18:09
Chapter: Chapter 1-- And they were born

Afifa –

It’s quite interesting how you’ve juxtaposed the births of the Marauders (and Lily). I’m not sure if this was your intention, but it makes it seem as if all of their lives are connected somehow before any of them even meet.

It was rather bittersweet to read about Remus, especially how his mother thought that nothing would ever happen to her son. Of course, we all do know what will happen to the poor boy. Sigh…

One interesting thing that I noticed was the description of Walburga Black. I have never pictured her as someone who took great care in her physical appearance. Also, I would have never thought to have described any part of her as beautiful. But, this may just be my own perceptions.

Anyhow, this is a very thought provoking opening chapter to what I’m sure will be a wonderful fic!


Author's Response: Well, no. That wasn't my intention and it never struck me that the reader would take it like that as well. Yeah, it is. About Mrs. Black's description... I just presumed that as Sirius was supposed to be handsome, he might have inherited his looks from his mother. Thanks for reading and submitting a lovely review! =)

Reviewer: gitgit
Date: 12/03/07 21:44
Chapter: Chapter 2-- Forward eleven years

i didnt realize that i didnt mention it in my other reviews i really like ur title its really creative... and im looking forward to the next chapter prespectives of diagon alley ... adn keep up the great hard work ur putting i enjoyed the chapter alot *continuation of my other review i accidentaly hit submit*

Author's Response: Thanks a lot! =) You just made my day! =D

Author's Response: I just checked out your profile and... wow! You've added my story in your favourite's and you have even added me in the favourite author's list. Thanks a bunch! Sirius-ly! =D

Reviewer: gitgit
Date: 12/03/07 21:40
Chapter: Chapter 2-- Forward eleven years

i like , i like how each character was introduced and a little was told about them :D

And they are all going to diagon alley the same day maybe they will see each other there

cant wait till you update again :D

Author's Response: Thank You! Yeah, may be they will meet. But, even I'm not sure. I haven't completed the third chapter yet. I'll try my best to update soon. =)

Reviewer: moony 4eva
Date: 10/19/07 15:26
Chapter: Chapter 1-- And they were born

in your summary it appears that Remus has married sirius. Remus Black??

Author's Response: Oops! Lol. No, Remus will not be getting married to Sirius. They are straight. Sorry, wrote that by mistake. Thanks for pointing that out! =)

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 09/28/07 5:06
Chapter: Chapter 1-- And they were born

Haha aw that's quite a cute start! I love your title!

Author's Response: Thanks for such a nice review! =)

Reviewer: gitgit
Date: 09/25/07 18:02
Chapter: Chapter 1-- And they were born

i really like how you put the story together introuducing all the characters in the story from birth ... its neat :)

i hope you continue i cant wait till ur second chapter comes out

Author's Response: Thank you! It feels great when the readers review about ones work, especially the nice reviews like yours. =) I have written the second chapter, just have to tune it in a bit.

Reviewer: to_the_stage93
Date: 08/27/07 12:43
Chapter: Chapter 1-- And they were born

Cute job, but you might want to work on your summary, make it more professional.

Author's Response: Thank you! And thanks for the constructive criticism. =)

Author's Response: Thank you! And thanks for the constructive criticism. I am working on it. =)

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 08/22/07 13:23
Chapter: Chapter 1-- And they were born

good story! i like how you started from the VERY beginning.... hmm, maybe the reason peter went bad was because his dad was abusive.....?

Author's Response: Thanks a lot! It is so lovely to hear feedback. Well, yes. That is one of the reason why Peter is like that but trust me, his father is not really bad or abusive, whatever you would prefer. You will find that out in the upcooming chapters. Once again, thanks! =)

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