Reviews For Fortune Foretold
Reviewer: Seer_Witch
Date: 07/04/08 23:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

Haha. I loved Myrtle's POV. It's weird that she got the same fortune twice. Just thought it should be acknowledged, because in the story you didn't ;D

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 01/28/08 20:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

lol that was good!

Author's Response: hehe... thanks

Reviewer: Phia Phoenix
Date: 10/23/07 2:08
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aw, that's awesome. Sweet.

I loved the bit about Sirius and his book about Charming Wizards, and all the smart retorts, insults, and professions of love that passed between L & J.

The one place your humous let you down was with the joke about that girl defeating Voldemort. Tha was macabre and unfunny.

Tehe.. nah, 'twasn't that bad. I was jerst jokin' around. It was the least funny joke, but that is not necessarily an insult, since all the other jokes are so good.

I liked Myrtle's POV at the end, and the idea that she has a crush on Sirius. Cute. And the way the rest of the fic was in past tense but that part was present - really brings out the "stream of consciousness" thing you were obviously going for. Well done.

One thing: I would've thought Lil'd like cats. I mean, in her letter to Sirius in DH, she did mention that they had a cat.

Oh, poor Sev! I loved Lily's interaction with him. Very well done. Made my heart ache for him.

All in all, extremely good! I like this one even better than your other fic!

Love Phia



Author's Response: The cat thing! That's great you've mentioned that! I like to think that Lily had developed her love for cats at this moment. Nobody had noticed this before and thank heavens that you did! I shamelessly stole the idea of Myrtle liking Sirius from a humor fic.

Reviewer: Aura_light
Date: 08/31/07 5:08
Chapter: Chapter 1

its cute

Author's Response: Thank you! *wishes to have more longer reviews* *smiles*

Reviewer: mrsmarauders
Date: 08/27/07 12:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

awesome!! really loved it!
keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Gee... Thanks!

Reviewer: CookieMonsterLovee
Date: 08/26/07 4:04
Chapter: Chapter 1

i love this story :]

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: Tweak
Date: 08/25/07 6:32
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is so cute and funny! Please write more fics you are a really talented author!

Author's Response: Nice username! Thanks for the review! And thank you so much for the nice compliment

Reviewer: Tanya1032
Date: 08/23/07 20:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! This is a really good story! And it's really sweet too. Especially since Lily doesn't realize that she's already found love. This is a great story! You're an amazing author!
-Tanya:)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Wow... that's a really nice compliment

Author's Response: Oh... Lily will find love. =P really soon *hides something (but still obvious)*

Reviewer: purplerose
Date: 08/23/07 13:05
Chapter: Chapter 1

Sweet, James is so romantic you captured him well. Nice story!

Author's Response: By "you captured him well" do I get to have James for myself? Haha! Just kidding! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: I_LUV_MOONY
Date: 08/22/07 18:32
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh, that was very good! Great flow, very well-written. I love Myrtle's POV; definitely added a humor factor to the story. Great job! :D

Author's Response: Thank you! Myrtle's POV wasn't supposed to be there at first, then she popped into my mind all of a sudden... well, she is a ghost. *grins*

Reviewer: PsychedelicPhoenix
Date: 08/21/07 10:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aw, what a great story! I really like how it was written!
By the way, loved the "Friends" reference, even if I didn't realise it until halfway through the part where Lily's friends were introduced!

Author's Response: Thanks! I love Friends, so I thought of using their names... And I love Phoebe, so I portrayed her as a weird person, close to Luna. They will be featured on my next fic, too!

Reviewer: hpfreak101
Date: 08/20/07 15:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

I very much enjoyed this.

Author's Response: Thank you! I enjoyed writing this too.

Reviewer: Prongs92
Date: 08/20/07 13:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really liked this story! I love when James is like, "Or the Chamber of Secrets could be here." haha! I also like when James said, "You have already summoned my heart with your charm," LOL! Great job!

Author's Response: Hahaha! I like those parts too. Though, personally, I loved James's line "in any case you've inserted loving clues beneath your cruel words"

Reviewer: koolio_jollymints
Date: 08/20/07 10:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awww! This is so amazing! It's a great story and you are a great author! You really portrayed each character with great enthusiasm! Great, great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've just realized that Moony and Wormy are not here. I'll include them on my next J/L fic

Reviewer: quick_quotes_quill
Date: 08/20/07 6:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

"or it could be some other stupid reason, like, the entrance to the Chamber of Secrets is in here"
woo james is a bit psychic there! very good story




Author's Response: yeah! though in my other fic (not posted here), he hated Divination. =P Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lillylover77
Date: 08/19/07 21:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

AH! thats so sweet! I love it.

Author's Response: That's Myrtle's line! *laughs* Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: Hermione Clone
Date: 08/19/07 20:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really like this part:
“Well, yes. This place hasn’t been used. They might have put up that sign just to keep us out,” James continued, “but that’s probably just because of Moaning Myrtle, or it could be some other stupid reason, like, the entrance to the Chamber of Secrets is in here, and Myrtle’s the guardian. I wouldn’t know this, since I haven’t met her. I just heard about her.”
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Also, fortune cookies aren't from China; they were actually invented in America.
Other than that, great story. Any plans for a sequel?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Well, fortune cookies are commonly found in China so that's what I have used. No, I don't think I'll write a sequel. If something strikes, though, I might.

Author's Response: Oh! Something did strike! I am writing more than a sequel, it's going to be a series of J/L one-shots! I am currently writing the next ones.

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