Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 01/22/08 16:42
Chapter: Chapter 2: Professor Trues

I'm not surprised to see that the rotten reporter put out a fully fictional biography of Harry. I only hope it's not selling well, after all, everyone must know Harry fought and destroyed Voldemort by now. I like the little snippets about how Harry was cleared after breaking into the bank, and how Hermione's writing a real biography of him. I know the story is about Angela really, but the odd comment dropped in here and there hurts no one. It kind of links the story to the books. I wonder why Olivander had a Veela hair wand, I seem to recall he disliked them, said they were temperamental. And Trues is a very interesting man isn't he? I wonder why he rushed them then decided they had time to browse in the book store? Maybe he saw someone he wanted to avoid. I always wondered if the trio, Ginny and the other students from the time of the final battle got their NEWTS, maybe they did a home study course. I can't wait to see who Angela meets on the train, and what she thinks of Hogwarts. Despite reading many fics, and JK's books and encountering many first impressions, each one is always fresh and different. I wonder if Angela will be bookish like Hermione was, or more outgoing. Oh no, what will she think of Quidditch? I'm really hoping she'll find new secrets about the castle, as well as treading old paths. Sorry, this is getting far too long. suffice to say that I'm very impressed and can't wait to read on.

Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 01/22/08 15:55
Chapter: Chapter 1: The Last of the Forgotten

I've only read the first chapter and I'm already fully engroced. Professor McGonagall is brilliant! The way she handled the minister, the way she passed into the house as a stray, yes, I think she's much like Dumbledore in her intelligence and strength, however more direct and stern. It was a surprise when Alan turned into a girl, when the effects of the potion deminish as he grows up, will he revert to being male? And I love this idea of the forgotten, did Voldemort want them to blow up and cause chaos, or just keep muggle borns out of Hogwarts? And how is that untrained muggle borns can explode, while some pure bloods in training aren't able to master simple spells and yet stay safe? Oh, and Hermione's revised Hogwarts a History was a great insert. XLNT!

Reviewer: stark40763
Date: 08/23/07 22:22
Chapter: Chapter 2: Professor Trues

A wonderful story so far. Though I was wondering why you changed Allen into a girl? Was it to make it more interesting, cause I think it would be pretty good even if Allen was still a boy. Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: This question is definitely a valid one. I bet others are asking the same thing. I wanted to have a female protagonist, but I also wanted her to face a hard internal conflict. There's other roads I could have taken, naturally, but I chose this one mainly because like the gender-bender thing.

Reviewer: shaggy_muggle
Date: 08/21/07 18:25
Chapter: Chapter 2: Professor Trues

again, i enjoyed this. i cant wait for the next chapter. i must commend you on your writing skill. also, the bit with the wand was very interesting. we who happen to know the backstory know that muggleborns have their powers because they have at least one witch or wizard in their distant ancestry. i wonder if an ancestor may have been a veela, given your description of barbara rongwood, and angela's wand's core. i look forward to the rest of the story!

Author's Response: Thank you for your praise. I will be releasing the third chapter soon, so be patient.

Author's Response: The third chapter is now out.

Reviewer: shaggy_muggle
Date: 08/21/07 17:37
Chapter: Chapter 1: The Last of the Forgotten

this story seems very promising. im very interested to see where it goes. for example, will allen's/angela's magical instability result in unusual powers? will he/she take an interest in girls, boys, or perhaps both?

there are some points that i disagree with, however (but please keep in mind that i intend all my criticisms to be constructive, and i realize that this is your story, not mine). for example, there is no way in hell that a 13 year old boy could be perfectly calm about being changed into an 11 year old girl. i am an 18 year old male, and although i have some feminine qualities, i would certainly be flipping out for a bare minimum of about a day.

also, the ending struck me as somewhat rushed. i doubt he/she would fall asleep quickly after an unexpected magical sex-change. he/she would probably not get a wink of sleep, trying to wrap his/her brain around what had just happened. however, i concede the fact that allen has already had a presumably wacked-out life until this point, and this may be a smaller issue to him than it would be to someone else. another possibility is that he is so desperate to escape his previous existence up to this point that he's willing to accept whatever he has to. but this is all speculation on my part, and i know that this is your story and you have your own reasons for writing what you do.

when all is said and done, i think this will be an awesome story, and i really look forward to reading the rest of it.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the critique. I'll keep that in mind for the final version.

Author's Response: Like I said in a previous response, the part about him reacting too calmly to his gender being changed has been revised. Also, how he falls asleep is different now, too.

Reviewer: water_polo_08
Date: 08/21/07 16:22
Chapter: Chapter 2: Professor Trues

I think that its an interesting story. Sort of odd. I'm not sure how I feel about the Ministry marking these 'Forgotten' It reminded me of the Dark Mark.
Also, I dont think that the Ministry would bring a muggle into Diagon Alley. Even if her daughter is a witch. Also most of the store clerks in Diagon Alley were saying how late it was to be getting school things, but its two weeks before the start of the term, and comparitive to when Harry got his school things thats quite early.

I dont think that just because a witch or wizard has not attented school and has not learned to controll their powers makes them unstable and dangerous. And even if it did they wouldnt need to take a special potion to make them safe. I think that Ariana was unstable because of her experiance with the muggle boys that tormented her not because she didnt go to school.

Other than that it is a very interesting story.

Somehow I think that Rita Skeeter wouldnt wait two years to come out with her biography of Harry Potter. The way Trues was talking it sounded as if the book had just come out.

Author's Response: Muggles do get access to Diagon Alley. If you remember, Hermione's parents went to Diagon Alley in the second book. And maybe I do need to make the time a little sooner than just two weeks. Thank you for your thoughts and I will consider it when I go back for final revisions.

Author's Response: In the new revision, it has been knocked down to the day Angela needs to leave.

Reviewer: K_S
Date: 08/21/07 13:19
Chapter: Chapter 1: The Last of the Forgotten

Hey, loved the first chapter!
Thought that Allen reactd a bit too calmly to his whole change of sex situation, but Im really interested to see where you take this; will be reading the next chapter as soon as I have time! Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Yes, I know what you mean. I have updated it now with a better response. Be sure to go back and read it.

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