All right. This review shall be deemed useless, because I simply liked it. Now I am enjoying their good ol' characteristics, because the focus is on learning how to change old patterns. Lovely. Good job!
I cannot think of much con. crit for this chapter, except that- and I've never said this before- it's a little TOO canon. I would have liked to see a bit more development in their personalities. Ron has not matured at all, or taken a clue in a few years. Also, it's a tad too short. I would adore a longer chapter, but that is because it is excellent.
For one, your characters are spot on. You couldn't have gotten closer to the characters we've known in book 5. Your sentence structure flows well and I didn't spot any syntax errors.
I would suggest that you add a few newer elements to the story. I didn't check the catagory on this story, and suspect it is a romance. If it is, new items are not necessary, but would really add to the plot.
In sum, I think the story has a great start. I'd like to see more length, some newer elements, and some maturity gains on Ron's part. However, that's all. I think you've got a great writing style. I can tell you put effort into creating realistic scenes. I'll be reading the rest right now!
this story is excellent, you are vvv talented.
i wasnt familiar with it either, but, yeah, i get it. lol. tsk tsk tsk.lol. ive just read the whole story through, and i really like it! good job! I like the idea that ron was made quidditch capt. will there be any harry/ginny romance in this story? that would make it perfect :) you did an awsome job so far! keep it up!
Author's Response: On that matter we shall just have to wait and see. I'm taking it a bit at a time so ANYTHING could happen. Although I'm shying away from making Snape nice...
Heheh. Yeah, I'm unfamiliar of "school bike" too. Oh... wait... I think I get it. Heheh.
Very good! Keep writing. I've never heard that expression "school bike" before. Did you make it up, or am I out of it?
Author's Response: Umm...it's kind of an English thing. Without going into too much detail, I'll just say that everyone gets a ride on the school bike, if you see what I mean. Sorry to anyone who finds this offensive, I had hoped it would be a well-known enough expression not to warrant an explanation.
*peers around the corner* Heloooo? Anyone in here? No? Cool so I'm the first to review... *sits down and gets comfy* Great chapter, good for Ron, Malfoy's had it comming for ages. Hope you enjoy your holiday come back soon and update please. Thanks for such a great fan fic, at least you've kept the characters IN character (many people have a lot of trouble with that)
Hi, this story is great!!!please update soon!!:D I love the way you captured the characters of Ron, Harry and Hermione!
Please update soon, it was a really great chapter! :)
I HATE MALFOY!!!!!!! I love this story, it's Great! I hope the next chapter coes soon! I like how you switch so smoothly between times.
This is great! I really love it when Fanfic's stay true to the characters and don't change the way they relate to each other. This is a quality piece of writing! And to anyone who likes this, you'll probably like 'Tangled', 'Weddings' and 'His Hermione'!
Ah ok. Got it. I take Latin in school and could venture a guess that it was, at least, *in* Latin, but it's only my first year and we have a bunch of really slow-witted people in my class so... needless to say, we haven't gotten all that far. I'll just accept it as it is:-D
Update SOON!! That is a cliffhanger. And I hate cliffhangers. But that was so cute, that little scene when Ron wasn't feelig so hot. Group awwww now. I'm a sucker for cute scenes like that.
This is the most FANTASTIC thing i have ever read, EVER!!!! (except MAYBE the actual harry potter books...and that story about the cats that go around killing each other). I am potty about potter ahahaha. getit??!! anyway, u MUST update soon. the more days u leave updating the more chronically depressed i become. so UPDATE!!!! loads of smoochie woochies!! XXXXXXXX;););)
Thank god you updated!!! Good writing!!keep going!! And FAST!!!
Loverly, Im so happy you updated, please give me another chapter, I shall impatiently await its arrival;-) Smooches ~bri
Also, out of curiosity, what does the title mean?
Author's Response: The title is latin, roughly translated to mean "Time for changes". Please bear in mind that I don't speak latin, so it's probably full of errors!
Agh. Totally relate with Harry. And Ron. And Hermione. Seen all sides. It's VERY realistic, not only to what a typical fight of these sorts are like but everyone's in character, which is GREAT. You better be updating soon ;-)
You better update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!