Reviewer: Stefanie
Date: 09/06/07 21:02
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Hogwarts Express, Again

Good story... The only thing that kinda bugs me is that I don't think that Remus would just come out and say he is a werewolf in a crowded Head's compartment. Other than that, pretty good.. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Well, what I was going for was that he whispered it to Lily, since no one else seemed to care about either of them. I should've made that clearer, thanks for the help!

Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 09/06/07 20:36
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Hogwarts Express, Again

This is getting really good! The only thing I found wrong is that James, Sirius & Peter didn't master the spell until the middle or at least the first full moon of thier fifth year, so they probably wouldn't be The Marauders yet. Otherwise, this is really good!

Author's Response: Thanks for the insight! Glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: goobersam9
Date: 08/28/07 0:38
Chapter: Prologue

Interesting...this story is very unique. I like that a good amount of your focus is on Severus and Lily's friendship, as well as love. I can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Thanks! There should be more soon!

Reviewer: Briel
Date: 08/27/07 15:24
Chapter: Prologue

Great work!! I absolutely love your characterization of Lilly. She feels so natural, so believable, and likeable, which I think is infinitely important. She seems like a real girl, and I can see some bits of Harry in her already! I can't wait for chapter 1 to be validated so I can read on!

Author's Response: Double post, oopsie. =)

Reviewer: Briel
Date: 08/27/07 15:24
Chapter: Prologue

Great work!! I absolutely love your characterization of Lilly. She feels so natural, so believable, and likeable, which I think is infinitely important. She seems like a real girl, and I can see some bits of Harry in her already! I can't wait for chapter 1 to be validated so I can read on!

Author's Response: Thanks! It was my main goal to make Lily as "real" as possible. I see a lot of Fanfics that portray this perfect, good-girl type image of her, and I don't think that's how it was. Everyone has problems and feelings and emotions, even "perfect" people. I'm really trying hard throughout the rest of the Fic to make Lily sound as real and human as possible. (In the next couple of chapters it's very evident!) Chapter 1 should be up soon, I actually have to talk to the Mods about that because it's been more than 10 days.

Reviewer: hpobsessed4ever_23
Date: 08/27/07 9:35
Chapter: Prologue

i like this so far!!
keep up the good work =)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Tweak
Date: 08/25/07 10:40
Chapter: Prologue

Usually prologues are a bit boring, but you made it very interersting so congragulations! *pats on the back* Keep it up, I hope chapter two gets validated soon!!

Author's Response: Thanks! (Chapter 1 will hopefully get validated soon. It's been almost ten days since I submitted, so I may have to contact the Mods in a few days time regarding it.)

Reviewer: HogwartsGirly124
Date: 08/22/07 14:28
Chapter: Prologue

brilliant work

looking forward to more please
update soon thanks so much

Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter 1 is *still* in queue, and I've completed Chapter 2. So once Chapter 1 is up, and I get Chapter 2 edited and Beta-ed, I can submit it. However, I go back to school tomorrow, so my writing time will be limited. I do plan on updating regularly, though.

Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 08/18/07 1:14
Chapter: Prologue

I like how in this one, she loves Severus back, or at least she thinks she does...

Great job! I'll see if I can read more!

Author's Response: Awesome! Thanks!

Reviewer: aussigirl
Date: 08/17/07 23:21
Chapter: Prologue

This looks like a really cool story! keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks! (Trust me, it gets better as it goes...Prologues are hardly ever that interesting...)

Reviewer: N_ReadeR
Date: 08/17/07 10:50
Chapter: Prologue

i like it so far =)

Author's Response: Thanks! Expect Chapter 1 soon!

Reviewer: Osced
Date: 08/16/07 15:52
Chapter: Prologue

Interesting prolog, especially with the Lily love Snape, how would it develop....update soon

Author's Response: Oh, yes, there's definitely going to be some MAJOR development coming up. Especially in the next 4-5 chapters. I updated today, as a matter of fact, so expect a new chapter soon! Thanks!

Reviewer: 001anonymous
Date: 08/16/07 0:49
Chapter: Prologue

Whoa, great start! I cant wait to hear the next! I love how you showed Lily's feelings towards Snape and James. So natural. lol Hope you update soon!

Author's Response: Oh, thanks! I absolutely love the concept of a Lily/James/Snape triangle. I think it allows for some of the most natural writing. I actually submitted Chapter 1 today, so lets hope it gets approved first time around!

Reviewer: heartachin4harry
Date: 08/15/07 11:58
Chapter: Prologue

I like where you are going with this, I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks! I've submitted Chapter 1, so keep your fingers crossed that it gets approved! (There's lots to come, I promise!)

Reviewer: cairyangel
Date: 08/15/07 9:28
Chapter: Prologue

nice beginning! do continue! will try to keep in touch with story, but exams are coming near, may not be on for few weeks... X_X except when studying English, maybe :P

just want to encourage you again!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! I'm definitely continuing. I submitted Chapter 1 today, and am currently writing Chapter 2. Good luck with your exams!

Reviewer: kristeen_jeanne123
Date: 08/15/07 0:05
Chapter: Prologue

YES! someone FINALY got a snape/lilly fic that has DH stuff in it! thank you

Author's Response: You're welcome! I actually toyed with this fic pre-DH, but decided to wait until after it was released to finish the Prologue. I'm SO happy that I did, because it just fit perfectly in my plotline!

Reviewer: Hermione Clone
Date: 08/14/07 21:04
Chapter: Prologue

This sounds interesting. I like how Lily sounds different than most other fics I've read. It's good to mix it up once in a while.
I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying to make Lily sound as "normal teenager-ish" as possible. She was a real person, too, not just some perfect robot student. I'm sure Lily would've had some sort of confusion because of her situation. Thanks, again for reading! The next chapter is in queue, so expect more soon!

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