Reviews For Heartbroken
Reviewer: Cwiddy
Date: 08/11/07 12:51
Chapter: Heartbroken

I like where you took this story, and the view you took with it! Guess that sometimes having someone to bounce ideas off can start the plot bunnies going! 8)

Author's Response: You are a great one for me to bounce my plot bunnies off of! :) I had fun writing it. I'm not sure if this is how I originally saw it coming out, but I'm happy with it! Cyns

Reviewer: FeatherTrader
Date: 08/10/07 20:23
Chapter: Heartbroken

*squees* I loved this story. Your style of writing is grabs the reader and refuses to let go.

I really felt like you tied everything up quite nicely. Especially the bit with Odysseus.

Well, one of my favourite things about this piece of writing was Circe and Picus’s final argument where Picus accused Circe of poisoning him. I think the main reason I like this section so much is because it shows the two sides of the story. Circe doesn’t see how she could have poisoned him; she felt like she was only bringing out his true emotions. However, Picus knows he’s in love with his fiancee.

I love the emotion invoked in this one-shot. When I really think about it, I feel like I should feel bad for Picus. He, after all, was the one who unknowingly drank the love potion and quite possibly had his whole marriage arrangement screwed up by Circe. However, from the way you portrayed the characters and wrote the story, my sympathy lies with Circe. That takes a good deal of talent to convince the reader to feel more sympathy for one character than the victim.

Overall, all I can say is you did a wonderful job! Keep up the fantastic writing.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your help with betaing this story! I'm glad that you really enjoyed the story and I am really happy that I was able to make you feel for Circe. I have taken a liking to her, for some reason. I have my History of Magicians class to thank for me even knowing about her. :) Cyns

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