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Name: Gamma Orionis (Signed) · Date: 11/04/07 17:28 · For: Chapter Seven
Oh, I've been waiting for another chapter for EONS, so i was happy to get an e-mail update for this! :)

Lee shook his head. "Not sure there is one," he said. "It's to do with laws of magic, or something - if an object's destroyed by one of the four elements you can't -"

Really nice touch there that you made up about magic. I love the idea of the four elements being permanently destructive to an object---it's very clever and I wish I'd thought of the idea!

The only personal irk about this chapter (and I think ones before?) is how Angelina is alternately referred to as "the girl". I understand a need for variety, but it's really not necessary, seeing as how George knows Angelina very well and since it is from George's PoV, he would think of Angelina as Angelina, and not as "the girl".

Another nice chapter, and the only mystery FF I'm reading! (And have read). :)

Author's Response: Thank you - I'm glad you liked the 'elements' thing, I got the idea from the part in DH when Hermione explains not being able to conjure food, and then when the special fire-spell-thing destroys the horcrux. About "the girl" thing - that's not really meant to be demeaning to Angelina, and I absolutely take your point that George knows her well enough to not to refer to her as that. That's really just me - it's something I do in all my fics just, as you said, for variation. In my Draco fics, Draco is referred to as "the boy", even though he's the main character and the story is told from his perspective. But I take your point, and I'll try and keep it to a minimum in future. Thanks again ;o)

Name: I_solemnly_swear (Signed) · Date: 11/04/07 16:13 · For: Chapter Seven
Aww, I like this one. I was somehow hoping that one of the other Weasleys could see Fred but that wouldn't be very exciting, now would it? Anyway, keep up the story, it's great!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Name: JustLikeHermione77 (Signed) · Date: 11/04/07 15:51 · For: Chapter Seven
good chapter!! isn't fred going to tell george who the intruder was though? update soon!!

Author's Response: Well, you'll just have to read on and find out... thank you ;o)

Name: KaileeA42 (Signed) · Date: 11/04/07 12:56 · For: Chapter Seven
I love this story. Its getting really interesting and I can't wait to see what Fred does when he's with the rest of the family. Please Update soon!

Author's Response: Never fear, the next chapter is written and ready to go - thanks for the review!

Name: lovely_witch (Signed) · Date: 11/04/07 11:58 · For: Chapter Seven
Woohoo, first review! I'm so excited for next chapter, I can't wait to find out about the book and the people downstairs. And where was Fred when Ginny came upstairs? He seemed to be MIA...

Author's Response: Don't worry, Fred is around - you'll find out where in the very first line of the next chapter in fact! Glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the review ;o)

Name: Phia Phoenix (Signed) · Date: 10/12/07 6:38 · For: Chapter Six
Ah, what can I say? Your writing style is beautiful, your characterisatoin is perfect, your dialogue is funny, and your plot is fascinating. Though I think anyone who's read DH will figure out the link between Dumbledore, the Ministry and the importance of Snitches...

I am getting to the point where I'm resenting George's treatment of Fred. I mean, the way he doesn't seem to mind taking the credit for stuff Fred does, and leaving Fred all alone in the top of the shop - I mean, his dead twin's come back to life, couldn't he take a short vacation? - and the way he's falling for Angelina. I mean, poor Fred!

And the thing about King's Cross utterly confused me. I could make neither head nor tail of it. Plus, I was under the impression that while it was King's Cross for Harry, it's be something different for everyone? And that the only reason Dumbledore was there with Harry was because he was Harry's mentor.

I wish I spoke Latin. None of the schools I've ever been to have offered it.

I'm not sure whether I've ever left you a review, but this story is in my favourites and I'm always eagerly awaiting an update. I do wish that the chapters were bigger, I've started waiting for every second chapter in order to have two at once. I can't stand reading one and then going, "Damn, no more up yet!"

Yeah. And, may I add, you are one of my favourite authors. The first story I ever read on MNFF was the Blood-Spattered Bathroom, and I remember reading it and getting really really worried! I thought, if that's the standard they expect here, I'll never get a fic validated!

Yeah. Sorry for this rambling and confused review. Your story rocks, and I can't wait for the next update!


Author's Response: Thank you very much! Ok, I'll just answer a couple of things for clarification purposes: I know what you mean about George, but the way I see it, he's already moved on with his life without Fred. Although it's upsetting, he's not even 100% sure that Fred's really there, so he's not quite ready to believe it yet. Plus, he kind of has to take credit for what Fred does because he can't tell anyone else about him or they'll think he's mad. And the Angelina thing - I hope I've made it clear that George really doesn't want to like her, but he just can't help it. In the next couple of chapters (which are already written) this becomes more clear. Kings Cross. Right. I was wondering when someone might say something about how weird that was. I decided to just keep it that everyone goes to Kings Cross when they die, largely because I thought it would be easy for people to comprehend where Fred was meant to be, without actually having to say "Fred was sitting in the place where he went when he died." And Dumbledore is there to talk to Fred about Bandersnatch's death. It says in the chapter that he was not the person who met Fred the first time he died (unlike Harry), so he's not there because he is of any special importance to Fred, but solely to give him advice about the murder. Whew. I hope that's helped. Thanks again for the review, I'm really glad you're enjoying it ;o)

Name: marvelousmeg (Signed) · Date: 10/10/07 15:55 · For: Chapter Six
good story keep going !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

Author's Response: Thank you.

Name: Hermione Clone (Signed) · Date: 10/09/07 18:14 · For: Chapter Six
Great chapter! Interesting with all of the snitches being gone.
Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you.

Name: lovely_witch (Signed) · Date: 10/09/07 8:54 · For: Chapter Six
Awesome that this chapter didn't have to wait in the que at all. I can't wait to find out about the snitches, I have no idea what they might have to do with the case. Maybe the necklace was supposed to be hidden inside one of them? Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you - and yes, I was quite surprised at how fast it went through the queue as well!

Name: KaileeA42 (Signed) · Date: 10/08/07 23:28 · For: Chapter Six
Really good can't wait to read more I love this story. The twins rock and you write them very well.

Author's Response: The twins do rock - I heartily agree. Thank you ;o)

Name: luv4harryginny (Signed) · Date: 10/08/07 22:28 · For: Chapter Six
Really enjoying the mystery and romance.

Author's Response: Good stuff - thanks ;o)

Name: I_solemnly_swear (Signed) · Date: 10/08/07 20:26 · For: Chapter Six
This just keeps getting stranger and stranger. I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Name: Gamma Orionis (Signed) · Date: 10/08/07 20:24 · For: Chapter Six
Like all previous chapters, this was another good one! The only spelling mistakes I have to point out are "principal" (it's principle) and "summersault" (it's somersault). More canon-wise, I have to wonder about the "angry shade of brown" vis a vis the Bludgers, which are black. Although occasionally HP characters speak in brackets, it happens rarely, and I don't think it should happen too frequently in your story.

More positively, Fred & George's communication together is so much fun to read! You've really got everybody's favorite twins down in characterization, it's very impressive. Angelina's spell was also pretty wicked...care to tell me where you got the Latin inspiration? (Or do you know Latin fluently??)

Author's Response: Thanks for such a detailed review! Sorry about the spelling mistakes; for some reason, the word 'summersault' isn't picked up by my spell check. Odd.) I've changed it now, however, and thanks for pointing out the bludger thing (I couldn't remember what colour they were so I went with brown). I'm also very glad you think my characterisation is good! Angelina's spell is rather cool, isn't it? I don't know Latin fluently but I'm currently studying it as part of my Classics degree. Latin rocks. Thanks again ;o)

Name: Hermione Clone (Signed) · Date: 09/26/07 19:57 · For: Chapter Five
The necklace is like the resurrection stone-wait. I bet the beads are made from it. I just hope that the necklace doesn't have the same affect of the stone when used too long.
Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you ;o)

Name: luv4harryginny (Signed) · Date: 09/25/07 20:55 · For: Chapter Five
A wonderfully different story and great mystery! Keep up the good writing!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Name: black_ink (Signed) · Date: 09/24/07 8:49 · For: Chapter Five
Very nice chapter!! Things are getting clearer in some ways, but becoming mysterious in others. I like it! I'm glad Dumbledore was there. That was a nice touch! ~Sara

Author's Response: Thank you ;o)

Name: Gamma Orionis (Signed) · Date: 09/24/07 0:04 · For: Chapter Five
This is getting so good! The twist with the necklace really took me by surprise, and I love Fred's encounter with Dumbledore at King's Cross...!

"You haven't showered for five days?"

"Shut up - that's not the point -"

"Certainly explains the smell…"

LOVED that...no flaws I can think of...:)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I really enjoyed writing that bit ;o)

Name: Everlasting (Signed) · Date: 09/23/07 20:54 · For: Chapter Five
This is my current favorite story on MNFF :] and it'll probably stay that way for a while. You're such an amazing author and I'm always so excited when I hear there's more. The mystery is just filling in on all sides - it's great! I thought I had figured it out, but jeez, you got me again haha I'm telling all my friends about this story, it's too great.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm so glad you like it as much as I'm enjoying writing it ;o)

Name: KaileeA42 (Signed) · Date: 09/23/07 19:54 · For: Chapter Five
Update soon!! It is getting very interesting! I hope that they go somewhere else soon, like seeing some of the other weasleys or something.

Author's Response: Funny you should say that... thank you ;o)

Name: JustLikeHermione77 (Signed) · Date: 09/23/07 15:56 · For: Chapter Five
dum de dum dum DUM................. update soooooon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks.

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