Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 08/06/07 9:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! That( in my opinion )was a very fitting tribute to Dumbledore.Great job...yet again.=Sammy

Author's Response: I'm glad you though so. Thanks for the review! ^_^

Author's Response: I meant *thought.* ;)

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 08/05/07 23:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

(Ohhh, crud, I'm so behind on reviewing you...! *So* sorry!)

I love this poem, plain and simple. It flows well, the rhythms good, in some places it rhymed (randomly) but it worked, and that just made it so easy to read. *loves* The only rocky part was this:

It seemed he always knew,
Always knew what to do.


I don't really see why you needed to repeat 'always knew' in the next line, but eh...

Favorite part? The ending. :p Of course. I'm in love with your poems' endings. They're amazing.

~Kate

Author's Response: ^_^ I'm glad you liked the poem and that you thought it flowed well. That was what I wanted- a good flow. Now about your nitpick... hmm... well if I took out the second "always knew" then the line would be too short... Anyways, thanks for the review! =)

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 08/05/07 10:29
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hellloooooo :-)

I liked this. Alot. I love how the whole poem is just so loving to Dumbledore, so thankful, so happy, rejoicing his memory, but then at the very end, it all changes to a darker tone, behind those twinkiling blue eyes, there was a life of lies and things you'd never thought you'd see.

Fav part:

But past the depths
Of faultless blue,
His lies revealed,
His nightmares alive,
There was the man
I never really knew.


Obviously, i like it for reasons stated above. I'd also like to poin out the vvery last sentence, "There was the man I
never really knew", I really, really liked that part, it ends the poem with a sad finality.

Author's Response: Gracias! I'm glad you liked the twist of the tone. ^_^

Reviewer: quick_quotes_quill
Date: 08/03/07 15:09
Chapter: Chapter 1

very good

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Dumbledore Prince
Date: 08/03/07 9:04
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great Dumbledore description. The poem has a nice ring to it. I was mentally reciting it in my head - it's not something I do for every fanfic poem.

The ending makes the situation sound as though Harry never forgave Dumbledore - and that's definitely not true. Perhaps you could tweak the ending a little bit. All in all, great poem!

Author's Response: Hm... I guess it kind of does... but that wasn't my intention. If I tweak it I'll probably add a few more lines, but I kind of like the way it ended. I'll think up different endings and see if I come up with anything better though. Thanks for the review! ^_^

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 08/03/07 5:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, I loved that poem. It was beautifully written and I think it flowed nicely. This was my favorite part: But past the depths
Of faultless blue,
His lies revealed,
His nightmares alive,
There was the man
I never really knew.


It was so well written and slightly powerful in a sad, depressing way. Another amazing job!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I don't write many poems that don't rhyme so I'm happy you thought it flowed. Thank you for the review!

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