Reviews For My One Regret
Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 01/01/08 14:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

*tears up* Yet another lovely, sad poem (and about a dead parent talking to their child, too). I can't say which one I like more, though. They're both excellent, but could both use a little tweaking (I saw a few spots where you could have added a word in this one, too). My favorite line/stanza/thingymajigger:

Iím sorry Iíll never heal your wounds or see you grow,


Meet your friends, hate your foes.


Once again, wonderful job!~

H_o_I_

Author's Response: And yet another lovely review made by you! =) Thank you once again for the review and kind words. Yes both poems ( I'm Not Sorry and My One Regret) are about a parent telling their child about (basically) how much they love them, I didn't intend to write two poems about similar subjects, it just happened that way. I'm very proud of this poem and am glad you liked it as well. =)

Reviewer: HogwartsGirly124
Date: 11/23/07 23:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

You might have been tired... but
You have a way with words


Just reeealy good job. It made me feel, made me feel something real.

Thanks and I look forward to more soon

Sophia R.

PS
do not be afraid to check out my page or harry_victoria! O-Kay then, good bye! :)

&& good day! (can't forget that, now can we?)

Author's Response: =) Thank you, this review really brought a smile to my face. Thank you so much for your kind words. I won't hesitate to check you or harry_victoria's page, I'm a great fan of both your works- so it's an honour to have you review my poems =) Have a great day also (or night whichever) and thanks again for the wonderful poem!:)

Author's Response: * o.O sorry for some reason some of my words got lost... I meant to say... Thanks again for the wonderful revie on this poem!:)

Reviewer: RavenclawDiamond
Date: 11/21/07 12:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

*sniff sniff* I love Lily, she's one of my favorite characters and that poem is really beautiful!

Author's Response: I love Lily as well she's a really awesome Elizabeth Bennet like character in my opinion, she's just awesome. Thank you so much for the compliments and the review! :)

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 11/17/07 9:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow. You are, quite simply, and amazing poet. *loves* This poem is awesome - there's a lot of emotion running through it, and you handled it very well and made the reader feel the same way. I think this poem is fantastic, as you've got the rhthym down and it all flows very nicely, and there's even rhyming, which helped the rhythm and was done very well. Great job.

--Kate

Author's Response: Awww.... *blushes* Thank you so much =) I'm so happy you liked the poem, I am very (personally) proud of this poem and how it turned out (especially since it was at three o'clock in the morning and I wrote it on my old notepad lol xDD) I just really wanted to get into Lily's mind and show us her feelings that Harry's growing up, and she can't be there for him like a normal mum. Thank you for the compliments and the kind words it's always appreciated!

Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 10/20/07 10:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hey Nikki! *gives hug to awesome reviewer* Another great poem, once again. Now, let me try to give a SPEW-ly review (although I'm not in SPEW :P)

Iím sorry Iíll never be there to wipe your tears,
Hug you, vanquish your fears.
Awesome way to start off the story. It doesn't throw Lily right into the story, but illudes her character.

Iím sorry Iíll never hear your secrets or share my own,
Iím so sorry I left you all alone.
I really love these lines. It's just so heartwrenching, so beautiful.

Now for a nitpick... Until weíre reunited, once again. You used an unnecessary comma here. It should be 'Until we're reunited once again.'

Awesome job, Nikki! *huggles* xxvictoria





Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the awesome review *huggles* It really means alot. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, I must say out of all the Harry Potter related poems I've written (and there have been alot alas they have not been posted on this site for numerous different reasons..) that I'm most proud of this one, mainly because I was half asleep when I wrote this, so I'm pleased how it came out. Thank you for the comments, they're always appreciatted. And woops, you are right there is an unnecessary comma in the last line. Thanks again for the awesome spew-like review xPP!

Reviewer: cutiepoet
Date: 08/19/07 21:08
Chapter: Chapter 1

Kudos -- definitely!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review!:) Woot, 10 reviews! Yay. :P

Reviewer: Prongs92
Date: 08/09/07 12:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awwwwww...That was amazing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, it's really really really appreciated!!

Reviewer: Nez
Date: 08/09/07 10:43
Chapter: Chapter 1

aww poor Lily! We were always thinking of what Harry lost, but you showed so well that Lily is hurting too! And that she is still with him. Sad, but good lol.
~Nez

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! It really means alot. Yeah, I wanted to give an insight to what Lily may feel (and James). I mean not being there, for your only son? But I think that both she and James realized that they died not in vain, but for their son to have a chance to have a future. Again, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: StellaSirius
Date: 08/09/07 8:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

:) That was really sweet. Except for my morbid personality goes, 'until we're reunited? scary omg kill for loveeeeee....' Yeah. xD But I really really liked it, especially because my morbidness really knows what you were going for.

Sometimes the rhythm was a little bit off, but not by a whole bunch, and it wasn't distractingly wrong. Overall, good job! I'd give it an eight out of ten. :)

Author's Response: Hahaha xPP. Thank you so much for the review it means alot. The rhyming was indeed a bit off, but I'll try harder next time. I'm glad you 'really really' liked it. :)

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 08/05/07 23:48
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh my Godric. *tear* That's so sad/adorable/sad again. Wow. Just...amazing. Great job with it. The rhyme seemed to get a bit rocky in places, but overall it was a very moving poem and very well written. My favorite part would have to be the end. It was just so...can't find the word here...awesome. (That'll work.)

~Kate

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, it made me very happy!:) I'm so touched that you felt so moved by the poem, thank you (I think I already said that :P). I also thank you for your honesty with my rhyming being a bit rocky, that helps me for the future if I write another poem. :)

Reviewer: fawkeshermione221
Date: 08/04/07 8:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

I almost cried when I read this! You did a really great job with this poem. There was only one line that was a little too long ( I didn't get to see your first day at school or embarrass you by beggining to cry), but I actually really liked that line anyways. I can imagine that this is how Lily feels, watching her son grow up without her.

Author's Response: Double Post xPP

Reviewer: fawkeshermione221
Date: 08/04/07 8:02
Chapter: Chapter 1

I almost cried when I read this! You did a really great job with this poem. There was only one line that was a little too long ( I didn't get to see your first day at school or embarrass you by beggining to cry), but I actually really liked that line anyways. I can imagine that this is how Lily feels, watching her son grow up without her.

Author's Response: Thank you so very much! Yeah, that particular line was shorter, but I guess I added more when I wrote it out on the computer. Lol. Thank you so very much again for the compliments and reading!

Reviewer: sam_1034_lily
Date: 08/03/07 17:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

very touching

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review it means a lot!:)

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 08/03/07 17:34
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very sweet. I'm sure that really was her biggest regret. My only bit of critique is that some of the lines were a bit long whilst others were much shorter, like:
I didnít get to see your first day at school or embarrass you by beginning to cry,


Anyways, great poem. Keep writing! ^^

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your critique I'll try and keep it in mind when I write another poem.. Thank you also for the review and yeah I really think that was Lily's greatest regret.

Reviewer: moonysgirlxx
Date: 08/03/07 5:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

dis is really good, srsly made me teary. Poor Lily. =( gud job!

Author's Response: Thank you sooo much for your review, it's really put a smile on my face. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!

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