Reviews For Expectations
Reviewer: The Dog Star
Date: 10/31/07 15:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really like this. It's sad, but sort of sweet at the same time.

Reviewer: Solemnly Swear
Date: 08/30/07 20:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

Really like it! Kinda strange though, that's exactly how I like to end stories I write... I can only describe it as.. arupt. :)

Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 08/10/07 0:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww, that was sweet. I liked how this one ended. I always pictured this starting early on so this fits in well with the theory in my head, :D. Update it and I'll read it!

Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 08/10/07 0:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww, that was sweet. I liked how this one ended. I always pictured this starting early on so this fits in well with the theory in my head, :D. Update it and I'll read it!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: Starmaiden
Date: 08/09/07 12:02
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a sweet, creative take on the Remus/Tonks relationship. Good work!

I like the opening. You set the tone, identify the setting and character, and show us how Tonks is doing all in one. I like this sentence:
The fireplace’s heat was comforting, especially tonight, when Grimmauld Place felt so cold.

... an unpleasant as ever Kreacher...
I would suggest that you put dashes in this: "an unpleasant-as-ever Kreacher". It holds the phrase together better. Or you could rearrange the wording:
"Now the only occupants of the house were Tonks herself, Kreacher, as unpleasant as ever...."

She watched the flames so intently that she was started to hear a voice behind her."
I think that's supposed to be "startled".

The parchment-burning idea is a creative one (good way to get the fire in, hee). This part really sets the quiet, pensive mood.
“It seemed more personal to throw them in one by one, rather than all at once,” Tonks said, breaking the silence. She hadn’t needed to explain, Lupin understood already, but she seemed to have needed to say it out loud.

There are a couple of minor flow issues here, nothing seriously bad:

Lupin studied her for the first time all week, as her appearance had changed as she seemed less her usual self.
Two things: One, that should be a period or a semi-colon instead of a comma. Two, it's a little confusing. It seems to suggest that her appearance has been gradually changing and that Lupin has been noticing, but it also states that he has not looked at her until now. It's a small detail, but you could clarify it.

She trailed off, unable to admit to herself, let alone Lupin, that there was the possibly that the person she had feelings for was in actuality sitting right next to her.
This phrase is sweet, though a trifle odd. I think it would work better if it said: "...that there was the possibility that the person sitting next to her was, in actuality, the one she had feelings for."
What you have works okay, but again, it could be clarified. I love the sentiment, though. It gives a really good picture of Tonks, sitting next to Lupin, trying not to answer his question.

This sentence is a little difficult to understand.
She was unsure of what the feelings were, and if they were brought on by their conversation, and once she had decided it wasn’t just a pesky thought that wouldn’t let go, she wondered if he could feel the same way, and decided there was no way he could.
The first part is Tonks trying to decide what she does feel. The second part is her deciding what to do about it. They kind of run together, though, so it shifts very abruptly. It might work better if you emphasize her discovery -- something like this:
"She was unsure of what the feelings were, and if they were brought on by their conversation. When she decided that it wasn’t just a pesky thought that wouldn’t let go, she wondered if he could feel the same way, and decided there was no way he could."
It's a slightly confusing setup no matter what, but I like it. It reflects a nice little thought-jumble.

And the ending is just sweet. Really good job overall! I look forward to reading more of your writing.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for such an indepth review! I really appreciate the advice; I will definitely fix the things that need fixing and try to clarify the things that are confusing.

Reviewer: Purdy123abc
Date: 08/08/07 16:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was fab! I want more!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like it!

Reviewer: koolio_jollymints
Date: 08/07/07 10:09
Chapter: Chapter 1

I think this is a very good story! You should write more, instead of making it finished!

Author's Response: Thanks! This will always be a one-off but I do plan to write more with these characters.

Reviewer: koolio_jollymints
Date: 08/07/07 10:08
Chapter: Chapter 1

I think this is a very good story! You should write more, instead of making it finished!

Reviewer: RemusLapin
Date: 08/07/07 9:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

uhh. well I liked it:P A bit confusing but I assume that what supposed to be a happy ending. Well done.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, and I'm sorry that it was confusing. :(

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