I really enjoyed reading this. Some of the dialogue for Ron and Hermione didn't feel like dialogue, otherwise I really loved it.
aw lol i loved this fic was amazing :P
awwwwz sooo sweet!
Luuuuuved it! So cute! Nicely written! Can't wait for more!
aaaw this is lovely, just beautiful... i love it
THat was brilliant! I loved it !
Brilliant! Love the fluff!
very sweet, nicely done!
i loved it
really fantastic especially for a first fanfic
awww!!!!!!!!!!1 that was really cute!!!! great story!!!=D
Awwww...that was cute!
oh my gosh...how sweet! i really loved it!
somewhat predictable, but good writing!
I really enjoyed that, Ron was really in character and it was really sweet! I can just see ron letting that slip. Ron and hermione are the best couple and this was a brilliant one-shot for them. Well done!
This was a really good first-time fic. It takes a lot of talent to be able to write decent romance for the first time.
“That’s behind us now. Lets enjoy the moment Hermione and look to the future, that’s all we can really control.”
I thought that this was a bit OOC for Ron to say. It sounded too wise... to Hermione like. And also a little cheesy. :o
Also, there should be comma's surronding the name Hermione. :)
I also had a minor problem with the kiss - I know a lot of fics have these sweet, tender kiss including, admittidly, one of my own, but first kisses are usually quite awkward and clumsy affairs, and if you add something like them both tilting their heads the same way, it can make it a bit more realistic.
Anyways, it was really good for a first fic, let alone for a first romance, I was really quite impressed. :)
Aww, how sweet!