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Name: XhayleeXblackX (Signed) · Date: 01/27/08 10:28 · For: Chapter 1
Sarakime, this is another lovely Dramione story.

I loved the way that Draco practically protested throught the entire thing. It was very Draco of him. And I also thought that Harry was in character with his little remarks but yet being nice all the same. However, how on earth did Hermione convince Harry to give Draco a factory? I don't think he did it purely on his own. Hehe.

I loved the description that you used, as I always do. I thought that it allowed the story to flow nicely.

Nitpick: “Take the one to the righter-most one.”

This sentednce doesn't make much senxse and is slightly awkward.

Good job overall my dear.
-Haylee


Name: Rapier (Signed) · Date: 08/16/07 6:22 · For: Chapter 1
...sweet


Name: Alexarama (Signed) · Date: 08/12/07 3:57 · For: Chapter 1
I have to say, I did get confused, but I still loved it!


Name: Lily_rocks (Signed) · Date: 08/04/07 12:18 · For: Chapter 1
Very very good! Draco Malfoy stayed true to his character. Can't really explain this. But anywayz, very good! I rather enjoyed reading it.

Author's Response: Thank you!


Name: CowGirlHPFan (Signed) · Date: 07/16/07 18:54 · For: Chapter 1
That was really funny,Draco got dragged of by gnomes,Thats was ASOME!!! When I read this all I thought was "It's Draco and the Chocolate factory" (*cough* Willie Wonka and the chocolate factory,*cough* *cough*) Wow,Harry got him a factory,that's really cool,but i wouldn't want one!!! :P Great story, *~*Sarah*~*

Author's Response: LOL! Draco and the Chocolate Factory!! That cracked me up. :) Thanks for the review!

Author's Response: LOL! Draco and the Chocolate Factory!! That cracked me up. :) Thanks for the review!


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