Reviews For A Trampled Iris
Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier
Date: 07/18/07 15:45
Chapter: A Trampled Iris

Very, very, very scary! It was a very powerful piece. You managed to make it historical, without aielianating the modern readers, which is really hard! There are far too many historical fics which are either all posh and toffee-nosed, or just sound like modern-day.
But there were a few times, particularly in the earlier bits, where you used the same word (like 'card') a few too many times in one paragraph. This isn't a big problem, but if you fixed it, your wonderful story would be even better!

Author's Response: Eeek! You are my first reviewer for this story! =]

Thanks for reading this, it is my Gauntlet entry, so I'm hoping against hope that this one will do as well as the last! I can honestly say I tried very hard to write this entry without sounding too old-timey. I mean, it was over a thousand years ago!

Thanks for the tip as well! I'll get to working on it!

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