MuggleNet Fan Fiction
Harry Potter stories written by fans!

Name: harry_victoria (Signed) · Date: 08/13/07 17:44 · For: Singularly in his Heart
You know what you should've written? "His eyes are green like a fresh pickled toad". I would've laughed at that; it was part of the poem Ginny sent Harry in COS. :) Good job.

Author's Response: Haha! I did love that line from Ginny's poem. But it would sound a little odd in my poem which is serious. It would probably defeat the whole purpose of the poem's solemn mood. But if you like, I have another poem up that has a much more humorous mood and is meant to amuse. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: MissyQuill (Signed) · Date: 07/22/07 9:04 · For: Singularly in his Heart
That was a great poem. A job well done and Yarah isn't bad either. In my language, it means trusted friend.=Sumayya

Author's Response: I'm very glad you liked my poem! My name is Arabic. Sumayya is an Arabic name too.

Name: Lalalalatina (Signed) · Date: 07/18/07 17:19 · For: Singularly in his Heart
Amazing work. I like how you included parts of the prophecy in there. My only critique is that you used commas in certain places where they seemed unnecessary like:

Situated above his spectacled emeralds,
Is what truly makes him unique...

The occurrences of one single night,
Are represented with this mark on his head...

And I don't think the commas were necessary in the 4th stanza.

But that is just my opinion and other than that I have to say this is an extraordinary poem. Keep writing! ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I'll keep your grammar advice in mind the next time I write poetry.

Name: fawkeshermione221 (Signed) · Date: 07/18/07 6:02 · For: Singularly in his Heart
Excellent job! I loved this poem - especially the begining and the last few lines. I also loved the part about Lily. Nice title, too. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! The part about Lily is one of my favorites too.

Name: Euphrates (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 9:30 · For: Singularly in his Heart
This is an amazing poem. Great job. It has a ton of meaning behind it, and emotion and all that, and you portrayed it extremely well. Your rhyming was amazing, too. It kept the poem with a structure.

My only nitpicks:

To me, it seems as if there is little to no rhythm to this poem, or you deviated from the rhythm a lot. The only rhythm I found was in the rhyme. It's still an amazing poem, and it's *very* good, I just think that next time you should also practice rhythm.

Also: this is a small one, just about grammar, which isn't *majorly* important here. Every line ended with a period or comma, when in some places it needed neither. *shrugs*

I absolutely *love* the last two stanzas. They were so amazing. So well done. It was just so...powerful. *is awed* I love that part, it's just so well done. The ending is great, too, and the title works perfectly with it. You should *definitely* write more poetry!


Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing, Kate! I'm really glad that you liked my poem! And I will definitely take your advice about rhythm into consideration next time I write poetry.

Name: Mhulan (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 3:56 · For: Singularly in his Heart
Very nice poem about Harry!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

You must login (register) to review.