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Reviews For Shroud of Darkness

Name: Evangeline_DeMore (Signed) · Date: 05/27/11 16:35 · For: One-Shot
:') tears of sad happy ness

Author's Response: I like that phrase, tears of sad happiness. I think it's probably a good reaction to this story. Thank you for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it! ~Gina :)

Name: Cheshlin (Signed) · Date: 07/10/07 19:20 · For: One-Shot
This is another wonderful story. I love how you explained Severus' reasons for doing as he did, and having Fawkes join him. I've seen countless stories where Fawkes joins Harry, but I think this is a much better continuation for Fawkes. I also loved the memories you wrote for Snape as he tried to make the Patronus. It was great seeing a Phoenix save him in the end. Good luck with this challenge! :) Cyns

Author's Response: Well, I'm a bit late responding, but thanks for the lovely review! I'm glad you enjoyed the story, I really enjoyed writing something just a little bit different than usual. It was really interesting trying to explore Snape. I wish Fawkes had shown up in DH. I'm writing him into my post-DH story, though. :) Thanks again for reading this story and leaving a review!! ~Gina :)

Name: GryffindorGoddess (Signed) · Date: 07/09/07 16:09 · For: One-Shot

Wow. I love how you incorporate several of Snape's memories and show how he systematically goes through them, trying to find one strong enough to defeat the Dementor. I also like how you described the relationship he had with his parents, referencing the Prince v. Snape. Nice tie in and foreshadowing of HBP. The "missing moment" type scenes you've incorporated into his memory are just perfect with the story.

Perhaps my favorite line is, "I was hit with the realization that Dumbledore’s faith in me did not end with his death, just as my duty had not ended with his murder." I think it really captures Snape's feelings about Dumbledore and it really fits with how I imagine their personal relationship. It's also an amazing explanation of Light Side Snape. The symbolism of his Patronus changing from the raven to the phoenix is also a nice touch!

Haha, I know I'm not being helpful as far as critiquing, but honestly I think it's superb. Well done and good luck in the challenge! *oober hugs* ~Ashley

Author's Response: Ashley! You are such a dear for coming by to read this story. I'm so glad my own ideas pulled themselves together after dropping some off for others as I rather enjoyed writing this prompt. I'm also glad the memories I wrote for Snape fit; it's always a tricky balance when it comes to the Potions master! Thanks again for reading this story and leaving such wonderful comments, you are too nice. It's been great talking/working with you over the past week. *huggle* Thanks again and good luck to you as well! ~Gina :)

Name: misundersnape (Signed) · Date: 07/08/07 18:59 · For: One-Shot
*Tears fall with both my anguish and hope that the darkness is merely unconsiousness and not death*
Exquisite - nothing else to say!!

Author's Response: Hee hee - it was fun playing with the end. It's up to you, and whatever you'd like to believe about Snape! If you feel that memory was strong enough to hold back the Dementors without draining the rest of his energy, then he lives; but perhaps it took all he had left and still wasn't enough and he dies. The beauty of enigmatic darkness. ;) Thank you so much for reading this story! I'm so glad you liked it - thank you for the lovely review!! ~Gina :)

Name: Red and Gold (Signed) · Date: 07/08/07 16:49 · For: One-Shot

This is the moment I love best - when I can sit and read a completed story that not too long ago merely existed as snippets and ideas bounced back and forth in AIM chats. I am so in awe of your ability to turn that into such an amazing story!

I can't tell you enough how much I love the detail and description in this story that sets the scene like a beautiful painting. Everything is vivid and has such clarity.

I believe the happy memories you chose for Snape were wonderful - and I know how difficult and challenging it was to find such things for his character.

This is my favorite paragraph, though it was so hard to choose just one:

"This second realization filled me with awe, gratitude, and an unfamiliar joy. It was the joy of unconditional trust and it renewed my faith in what I had done. I had killed this man whom I had loved like a father, and yet he reached out from beyond the grave to affirm my very existence and guide me toward my destiny with complete trust in my actions. As my heart was moved to emotions I had rarely felt, the phoenix burst into a glorious song of ecstasy and I found within me the strength to carry on. . ."

*gasp* I thought that was just such an uplifting and inspiring paragraph! Especially for Snape, who has felt so few of those emotions, it seems. Break my heart!

And speaking of my heart, I'll take you up on your offer about the ending and say that Snape lives. *sighs happily* ;-)

Very well done, Gina! Thank you so much for letting me be your sounding board on this story. I loved every minute of it.


Author's Response: Andrea! *SQUEE* Thank YOU so much for your help - for my frequent IMs about this story and for beta-reading it once it came together. You were great and I really appreciate your support! And thank you for the amazing review. *blushes* I'm glad I could do Snape justice. It was a tricky finding the balance between his edge and my own tendencey toward sentimentality; thanks for helping me find it and keep it. Remember to poke me if you or Lucius need a poke! ~Gina :)

Name: remilupin (Signed) · Date: 07/08/07 16:19 · For: One-Shot
Wow - I loved this!
I love that the we get insight into Snape's past, that Fawkes goes to stay with Snape after Dumbledore's death, and specially that Snape's patronus - a rave, which is befitting for the bat-like man - becomes a phoenix.
I have to tell you, I was in a really awful mood today, and you're story really cheered me up (despite your up-to-the-reader ending).

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad this story cheered you up; I thought it was rather dark myself, but perhaps that bit of hope at the end was enough. Thank you so much for reading this story and leaving such a wonderful first review! I really appreciate it!! ~Gina :)

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