Author's Response: Thanks!
i really like this. susan is, obviously, overlooked in the books due to the more prominent characters, but i think you capture her well. haha and it's nice to see draco showing a bit of heart here, even though i can't actually see him doing that. i really like the spin you have on these two characters. one of my favorites, for sure.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.
Oh, Elle. This was amazing.
Your word choice is wonderful, yet not overdone. You make things clear yet mysterious at the same time if that makes sense.
Draco and Susan would never be friends and you have kept the truth to that with this fic. The innocent kiss they share in their moment of needing someone was so beautifully well-written.
I thought that they were both in character which is hard to do in this case because Draco is such a proud person. The fact that he plainly and openly admitted that he would become a Death Eater was perfectly Draco of him, and true to his arrogant self. The sense of pride and wanting to uphold his family name was definately showed brilliantly here.
The apology was written very well as well. He didn't say he was sorry because he liked her but because he related to her situation. Which was refreshing to read because I thought at first that they would end up liking each other and it would be so OOC. But that was my mistake as I should have known that such a talented author would do nothing of the sort.
One little thing intrigued me though, Draco said he had seen his mother use the spell countless times, which makes me think that Lucius too may have broken a few bracelets. Just my thoughts taking over though.
Brilliant job. This was a well-written, thought provoking, and interesting fic.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
As for Narcissa using the spell, no, it wasn't Lucius related. I've never thought of him as abusive, to his family anyway. I was rather thinking of Narcissa as a big of clutz in this fic... It wasn't an overly well developed idea, to be honest. Draco needed a way to know the spell and Narcissa was the obvious one to have taught him.
Thanks for the review.
Wow, Elle... I didn't know you had it in you, hehe. I'm not used to you writing my Draco! Let's see here...
I appreciate the way you showed how each of the two main characters showed such great pride in their families and the values they held. I also respect the fact that you kept them in canon and didn't pull one of those, "Draco decided 'to hell with the Dark Lord' and wanted to spend the rest of his life with Susan who looked more beautiful than ever in the moonlight as it shone through the classroom door..." *gag*
I think the only thing that threw me for a loop was Draco's personality. He was under a LOT of stress by that point in the book (if I am on the same page, hehe) and I'm not sure he would have taken the time to find her and apologize for his behavior. Don't get me wrong - I LOVE that he did that in your story. I personally am partial to seeing Draco written with some sort of conscience but it just kind of took me a minute to grasp what was going on. *hopes I am making sense* It was refreshing to see his thoughts regarding Bella (in true Elle persistance) and how he showed her in a more positive light which most people never see or even think to show in stories.
Nice job, my Modly one.
Author's Response: *hugs Nicole*
Thanks so much.
Hmm...you have a good point about Draco's stress level, but in a way, I think he just needed someone to talk to.
Thanks again! *more hugs*
What a bittersweet ending! You really have knack for that... But it was done very beautifully, and I loved how IC Malfoy seemed even behaving so differently from in canon. Anyway, this was a really well done look at the losses felt by the two characters - and I loved the characterization! Great fic!
Author's Response: Thanks so much. The characters on opposite sides of the war really had a lot in common, if any of them had been able to admit it. Anyway, thanks for the review, and I'm glad you liked the story.
Hey, Ellie! I had forgotten to review this before, and now, the perfect opportunity came up for my class.
This one-shot is really touching, and really deep. The fact that they were connected through their losses was sad, but yet, still true. Even though they had completely different goals, they kinda encouraged each other to follow in the footsteps, to make their hero proud, and to support each other, and I liked that. They knew the differences, acknowledged them, but felt their connection anyway.
I loved this line:
"We will always be on opposite sides of the war, Susan. But we will always share a bond–a bond between two people who know what it feels like to suffer a great loss.”
I love the way he said it; 'We'll be on opposite sides of the war'. I don't know why, but I got a visual from that, lol. And I like how they were bonded even if they might grow up to fight against each other, or even kill each other.
Overall, lovely one-shot. The beginning was so sad, with Susan and her crying. They were both really IC though, which was great. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thanks, Sarah. I'm glad you were impressed with this. It really is a strange bond that Draco and Susan share. However, they are so similiar and you completely opposite. It was really fun to play with this story.
*huggles to Sarah* Thank you so much for the really wonderful review!
Ah, wow! Very well written, and I just love the thought of Bellatrix and Draco being close. This is defintely one of my favs.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you liked it.
Ahh, I loved the mention of our dear Bella *huggles Bella*! I always loved the thought of her and Draco being close. And this fic is absolutely gorgeous! Another one for my favorites lists! It could honestly be the best Draco one-shot I have ever read, and believe me, I've searched long and hard for one that I would like. I especially adored Susan's line about ending up killing each other. Something about it wrapped up the whole situation into a single sentence. This fic just made me so sad for Draco, which is good. Sadness is a hard emotion to inspire in writing, and you have done it over and over again. I truly belive that the quality of the piece depends on the reaction of the reader, and you have made me utterly emotional! Great job! You have really outdone yourself on this one! Its absolutely amazing... a masterpiece of sorts! Well done!
Author's Response: Awww, thanks, hon. It means a lot that you like my stories so much. I really enjoyed writing this one. It shows one of the things everyone in this war has, a sense of loss.
*huggles for the wonderful review*
Thats quite sad. :( I really enjoyed it :) I dont ship or even read susan/draco, but if i read something as good as this, im sure i would enjoy it! oh and yay, im first reviewer! *giggles* congratz on hgetting another wonderful story up!
Author's Response: Thanks, Claire. I'm glad you enjoyed it.